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Like Water

Poem By: Brown Skin
Romance


What she is to me..... View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jan 9, 2008    Reads: 134    Comments: 9    Likes: 5   


Fishing in the memories of my life....Bathing in the happiness that fills me....Drenching myself in her love....She cools my fire of longing....Quenches my thirst with her intellect.....Overflowing my soul

Just like water....

She is like the water to me....

She pours out her soul to me till sunrise....I want to be lost in her ocean....Set sail with her through this life....Drowns me with her praises...I swim in her ambitions....Soak in her arms while we dream....She evaporates all fears.....My shoulder she rains on....So I bathe in her tears

Just like water....

She is like the water to me....

Washes me of impurity....Her strength coarsing through my veins....The power she has moves me.....Diving in my mind....She creates waves in my mental....She splashes me with her laughter....Her voice is like soothing like the river....

Just like water....

She is like the water to me....

She is like the water to me.....


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Comments:

Love is a powerful emotion - you said it well.

Posted: Jan 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Love is very powerful! Thank you for your comment! I'm glad you liked it!

Powerful, very well expressed. Nice wording and structure. Thank you for sharing.

Posted: Jan 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much I appreciate your comment!

wow... that is just so powerful i really like it

Posted: Jan 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it!

Brown Skin:

Good use of symbolism. Well written. Gave it an "I Like It" vote.

Interesting formatting and presentation as well.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Jan 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Ed, I appreciate your comment! I thank you for the "I Like It" vote as well!

good comparison with water and her. very powerful!

Posted: Jan 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it!

A fine affirmation of love.
'Like it'
Ricky

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for your comment! I really appreciate it.

I absolutely adore your metaphor. As a rule, I'm not a I'm not a big poetry fan, which is probably why I feel like the refrain could really be cut all together to strengthen the piece, but still, I love it.

Posted: Jan 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol Thank you for your comment and your honesty! It is greatly appreciated! I'm glad you like it!

wow... it was really good.

Posted: Jan 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for comment!

Beautiful.

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much



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