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Submitted: Jan 21, 2008 Reads: 174 Comments: 17 Likes: 9
Love me please
Embrace my frailties
Lust over my physical
Rejoice in my spiritual
Find favor over my mental
Trust in me
Make love passionately
Miss me
Love me please
Enjoy my company
Watch me as I sleep
Wondering what I'm dreaming about
Hold me under the night sky
Be honest to me
Cry on me when need be
Welcome who I am
and love me please
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Wow! I thought I liked the other one best, but this one might be a favorite. Good job!
Posted: Jan 21, 2008
I loved this. Out of all the poems that I've read on here, this is one of my favourites. Keep up the good work.
Posted: Jan 21, 2008
This is really good....so much said in so little words. Sometimes lack of structure conveys so much more than elaborate sentences. Keep up the good work:)
Posted: Jan 21, 2008
wow, this is what I would call a special poem....its amazing! good work..:B LC
Posted: Jan 21, 2008
Enjoyed this poem very much. Good imagery and it speaks to the heart. Happy writing.....Jerry
Posted: Jan 21, 2008
Wow, I really loved this poem. Just like zarakmez said, it's good that what you feel and want the reader to know is in so little words. When you have a big structure, you say mostly the same thing over and over again, or your desperate for things to say. This is what I like best about your poem, is that you kept it small, but said so much. I really like it.
Posted: Jan 21, 2008
That was an amazing poem! I love stuff like this. It's so meaningful and deep! Keep it up!
Posted: Jan 22, 2008
um. i hate you for not updating me on this poem! its amazing! (:
Posted: Jan 23, 2008
Well , it is the kind of poem that i would send to a girl! Good !
Posted: Jan 23, 2008
this kind of poem just draws people in, and after the first line, you just have to keep on reading, its great! here's a bit of love for you! ^^
Posted: Jan 24, 2008
What are you doing?! This was meant for HER to read! hahahaha!
Very simple and short, and also another easy to relate poem. Great job, i personally have to work on the balance between detail and length, but hey, thats why im still writing ;)
Nice, glad you gave me invite to read.
Posted: Jan 24, 2008
Thank you for inviting me to read this. It is really beautiful. Your words capture exactly the way I think we would all like to be loved...
"Watch me as I sleep"
Posted: Jan 24, 2008
It's matchless....the way you describe being "in" love...
Joka
Evelyn
Posted: Jan 25, 2008
Lovely :D its the gest love poem ever :) lindydan
Posted: Jan 26, 2008
This is a really nice piece! I think it kind of sums up what most of us want in our relationships. Great Poem!
Posted: Feb 7, 2008
Beautiful poem, everyone wishes for these things.
Posted: Feb 12, 2008
Watch me as I sleep. Serenity devoured.
Posted: Mar 1, 2008
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