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Celestial Moon

Poem By: caralouann
Romance


You inspired me at a glance
You are like an orchid gleaming
under a celestial moon
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Submitted: Oct 12, 2007    Reads: 55    Comments: 2    Likes: 2   


Your beautiful face
is like an orchid gleaming
under a celestial moon.

Inspiring me with one glance,
your mystery and charm is alluring.

Your winsome ways
melt my delirium struck mind,

Bringing me from my pensive mood,
my emotions are brought to a new horizon.

My free roaming spirit,
is tamed by your finesse.

You have become my eternal paramour,
my unquenchable fire.

 

(Revised Version)
You inspired me at a glance,
like an orchid gleaming
under a celestial moon.

Eyes beaming like,
astral projections.
Your winsome ways,
melt my delirium struck mind
Tainting me with affection,
I've never had,
you bring me from my,
pensive mood,
my emotion's are brought to life.
With your finesse,
you tame my,
free roaming spirit.
I'm allured,
by your mystery and charm.
The more we mingle,
I fall more deeply in Love with you.
You are my sweet,
everlasting paramour.

(old Version)

You inspired me at a glance
You are like an orchid gleaming
under a celestial moon
Your voice is a melody in my mind
It was an affair at the start
You are my paramour
Your electric vibes like lightning strike my heart
Your obscure ways sends chills up my spine
With your finesse you tame my free roaming spirit
Your winsome ways melt my delirium struck mind
Your reverberation of voice rings in mine own ears
The staccato way you stole my heart burns my blood like molten lava
At your ablution it does so cool my burning body
You have made my emotion's come to life I am no longer in a pensive mood
You taint me with affection I've never had
You are like a new horizon I shall forever embrace
Your eyes are like astral projections beaming bright
Your mystery and charm alluring
The more we mingle I fall deeply in Love with you.��

I used these words to form the poem

inspire, orchid, celestial, melody, affair, paramour, electric, obscure, finesse, winsome, delirium, reverberation, staccato, ablution, pensive, taint, horizon, astral, mystery, mingle,

I got them from a word bank


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Comments:

You may have got them from a word bank cara but so much passion.Keep up the great work.
girlish

Posted: Oct 13, 2007

Author Comment:

thanks

YES! who cares where you got the words. like WOW, what you did with them is amazing... great job cara

Posted: Oct 13, 2007

Author Comment:

thanks , I had to revise it for a contest take a look at the new form if you want new and old are on same page i had to take alot of the you's out and some words were not used right. I hope it's allright now . Allpoetry.com has a lot of community contest's pretty cool they give you tips on how to make your poetry better Very nice people



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