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Love song(poem)

Poem By: Dark Skylight
Romance


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Submitted: Oct 8, 2008    Reads: 64    Comments: 7    Likes: 4   


All I ever wanted was

someone to love me.

All I ever wanted was

someone nice and sweet.

In my dreams I would wonder around,

looking for that special person.

No one could made me complete,

but you.

And now you're here.

When the moon shines upon my heart and

white flower opens in midnight.

I say hy my love,I found you now.

Something comes inside my soul,turns me into love,

and I smile just for you.

Darkness enters and sad song plays.

Sky is black like my toughts.

My heart is crying,mind is dying for you.

Im in love.

When that second comes,I see you here,

holding my hand saying everything's gonna be ok.

Finally I see.

Dawn is here.

Thinking this life is not so bad.

Cell phone rings,your message is here.

I cry.I smile.I love.

Day ends,Im full.

Moon shines upon my heart,white heart opens,and I say

Hy my love,I found you now.


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Comments:

Wonderful sweet words.
One comment though. Improve more on spelling and verb tenses.

I enjoyed reading.
Keep writing Skylight.

-Blacklust

Posted: Oct 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww,thank you so much! I'll try to improve that,lol.Thanks.
:)

sweet

Posted: Oct 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Aww,thanks.
:)

Very sweet and very romantic.I really liked this.It's good to have someone to love.Thanks for inviting me to read this.I enjoyed it.

Posted: Oct 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much.Im really happy that you liked my poem.And the other ones too.Thank you a lot.It really means a lot.
:)

hahhah...
thats really CUTE..
there no other words to describe it.. lol
Cute and soo SWEET...
i like the lines with the cellphone..

great ... poetry

.x peace

Posted: Oct 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol,awww,thanks for lovely comment.So muchy.And for reading too,lol.
:)

OMFG i love it it is soooo awsome:] i love it

Posted: Oct 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Hhahaah,thanks!!! Glad you liked it,and thanks for reading and commenting.
:)

Great n lovely. Sweet n romantic. Can i know something. whom did u write this poem for

Posted: Oct 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Aww thank you.I wrote it for you.Of course.
:)

Its great. One of your best. Only thing you should check out and fix is "hy", its suppose to be "hi". D=

I like it.
Regards.

Posted: Oct 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol,thanks for that,and for reading too.Im glad that you liked it,I know its hi,not hy,lol...I don't know why I wrote it that way...I guess I didn't pay attention,lol.
:)



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