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Forget and Remember, Remember and Forget

Poem By: Erin
Romance


It's a story about a girl who has been left by her lover for another girl, and while she is trying to forget about everything, there are certain things that she just can't forget. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 6, 2007    Reads: 91    Comments: 5    Likes: 1   


Forget the feelings that felt so right,

Remember he's with her tonight,

Remember it's not your fault,

Forget how much pain he brought,

Forget the reason he walked away,

Remember you had no say,

Remember he cheated on you,

Forget that he has someone new,

Forget how many tears you cried,

Remember you had NOTHING to hide,

Remember nothing will ever be the same,

Forget the memories that that cause so much pain,

Forget how you looked deep into his eyes,

Remember you were just a prize,

Remember how he made your heart shatter,

Forget him as if he never mattered.


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Comments:

great emotion in this piece, keep up the good work.

Posted: Jun 6, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you Dino!!!

Erin:

Well written and expressed emotions.

Presentation may not be what you intended. If not, then you can resubmit or re-key and resubmit.

My best advice for a new Booksie arrival to pace your postings at about 1 @ week or every 3-4 days. This gives you the chance to build a following gradually. In a slower but steadier and surer manner.

It's a marathon and not a wind-sprint. You'll get there, get to stay longer and not lose interest yourself. In the intervening time you can read and comment on the work/s of others.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Jun 6, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for the advice!!!

Interesting poem with a fine theme.

Posted: Jun 8, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you.


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one of your first pieces im guessing. well i was born a male homosapien, therefore i cannot express much emotion. If i were a female (*IF*) and having a male point of view, i would be the first "girl" to realise that men can be silly(excuse my french). I see my friends and the way they treat their "women" and i have been a jerk a few times too. Forgive me for my part in hurting girls in this world *-queue Erin beating me till she's happy-*. But this was a good poem, and i dont really like poems, but i like yours :)
keep it up, im wanting more!!!!

Posted: Aug 30, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you Lionheart I'll be writing as fast as I can and posting.

Love Always,
Erin

wow. i love your writing style. It's intriguing. i'm off to read more.

Posted: Feb 3, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL. Thanks for all this feedback, it really makes me continue with my writing.

Love Always
Erin



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