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Poem By: jadey oneil
Romance


I wrote this on the spur of the moment. Thoughts and words just came out flooding in as the tip of my pen hit the paper. ^^ View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 8, 2008    Reads: 131    Comments: 17    Likes: 7   


Watching the sun rising from the east;

As the sunlight touches the earth with a kiss;

The nature’s beauty is bared naked;

In the eyes of those who are not blind to see;

The heavenly place is flaunted before me;

Garden of Eden with the sight beyond compare;

Beautiful buds bursting into flower;

Silently showing the fullness of life;

This ground where I step on---

Mirrors my own.

* * *

Looking back through years that passed;

When life was overshadowed with angst;

I’d see by the blind’s eyes;

Not seeing through the light;

Days of darkness fell upon my world of sight;

Then there you were;

Like my own sun shining from nowhere;

You shared me your light;

Without you noticing it;

Without you realizing it.

* * *

Now, look what I have become!

A wonderful person is all I am;

The beauty of life is revealed;

You are my light, you are my sun;

You are somebody, you are the one!

I wonder if you get to see me the way I see you;

I wish I could be your sun too;

Where I could sense your joy in my presence;

Where we could be the reflection of each other’s inner beauty;

Someday…someday…someday…


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Comments:

awww i liked this. very sweet with a nice touch of romance ^^ its a wonderful thing finding someone who can be the sunshine to brighten your world :) though it has a bit of a sad ring to it because at the end, she doesn't think she is the sun for his world... but! have no fear because there is hope. "someday" she will be ^^
a truly lovely piece jadey
excellent work big sis :)

Posted: Jul 8, 2008

Author Comment:

So long as there is life, there is hope. So long as the sun still shines on her, there is always light. ^^

"Sweet with a nice touch of romance" indeed. ^^

Again, thanks a bunch, li'l sis! ^^
Ingat always. :-)

A lovely piece, speaks volumes of how I feel right about now.....great piece!

Posted: Jul 8, 2008

Author Comment:

How have you been, Deb?
Thanks for commenting. ^^

I love your poem, Jadey, so wonderful. Longing for that someday.

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Well, i'm counting you in then. ^^
Thanks, Susan.
Godbless! ^^

i liked the line Days of "darkness fell upon my world of sight" great story..i enjoy more dark and twisted stuff but also found myself loving this poem.

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

It's nice to know you loved this piece. Thanks a lot! ^^

It's a really sweet poem. Great job!

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! ^^

I really do love this-it's beautifully done :D

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw, Thanks! ^^

The is an awesome poem, and I think it is cool that you wrote it on the spur of the moment. It really shows how talented you are. Good Work!

~Brad

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

That was just one of those moments when I felt like writing down my thoughts. Thanks for dropping by, Brad. I appreciate it. ^^

this is just lovely :p

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for commenting , James! ^^

Beautiful,,,I liked it alot! Everything flowed perfectly and was so sweet. I can't believe you wrote this in the spur of the moment. Amazing talent!

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

There are times when thoughts flow like water in the stream. That moment was one of those. Thanks for commenting on my stuff. I appreciate it very much. Godbless! ^^

Lovely poem.

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! ^^

wow!!!
its such a beautiful poem..
i like it...

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh, Thanks! ^^

This is really wonderful!It's romanti and so beautiful.I like it. :)

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, Silvija! ^^

Great poem and metaphor.

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, Codey! ^^

Hey! I loved it :) I write on the spur of the moment too...I don't even think about what i am writing! keep writing -zia

Posted: Jul 11, 2008

Author Comment:

It feels great, right?
Thanks, Zia! ^^

Sorry for being late honey...

this one comes as a surprise...random thoughts beautifully woven in a poem which is soothing and sad....

U know what Love sure is a mirage...i wish everyone get their sunshine in this life..i honestly wish so...

Posted: Jul 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh, there's nothing to be sorry about. You may come and visit anytime. I have the door opened for you always! :-)

Love could be like a mirage. I hope it won't stay that way though.

Thanks for commenting, Buddy.
Be safe. ^^

That is truely lovely! You can tell it was spur of the moment but that only adds to the glow! Nicely done!

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw, thanks! ^^

Beautiful.
Full of unrestrained emotion for the 'one'.
Very good, and very powerful.

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. *smiles*
Godbless! ^^



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