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Life without you.......

Poem By: Kritika
Romance


This was for the challenge by Dark skylight................though it was supposed to be related to death it didn't turn up like that!!!

though i'll be trying to write something more dark and gory.........and ACTUALLY related to death..........but till then enjoy this one!!

the words given to me were---DEATH,HATE, LIFE,SMILING,DESIRE,BLACK,SCARY,NEVER,LOVE,MOON. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 23, 2008    Reads: 129    Comments: 13    Likes: 8   


I used to hate life
until you came along

Smiling that dazzling smile of yours
you entered my life like the first ray of sun,
and I was over the moon.......

The desire to live,to breathe and to be with you forever
burnt in my soul like the flame of the phoenix

I want to hide you from the world.....
Come and live in my eyes--as black as the starless night
and i shall never open them
if only to keep you mine forever

But promise me my love that you shall never leave me
Because that would be more scary for me than Death itself


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Comments:

I likied it!!

you entered my life like the first ray of sun,
and I was over the moon.......

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^loved those lines!!!

:]

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Author Comment:

aww........thanx a ton!!!

lol

^-^

darn!x!.. ws hopin i'd be the first to comment ..
xlolx..

nehoo..i agree with the comment above me!x!..
i loved those lines..
they paint a vry pretty picture.. well done
xoxox

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Author Comment:

=D
thanx!!

glad that you liked it!!!!!

wow...
this is incredible!
Love love love it =]
I agree with both comments above me
Great poem, keep making more!

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Author Comment:

=D
thanx a lot riyuke!!

i hopeyou find time to read some more poems of mine!!!
till then i'll check out your stuff.........

hi! kritika. between love and life, losing former'd be deadlier. an intense poem. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Author Comment:

well given a choice i think death is a better option than to live without one's love............thank you.

lol :D

oHHHH!!!

nice........
especially the last 2 lines

=]


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Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

thanx a lot ........

lol

Awwww,this is soo sweet and wonderful.I like it alooot.Really one beautiful poem. :)

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you!!

THIS IS LOVELY....LOVELY for sure....not scary at all....with the correct dosage of all emotions....

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

:D oh moi!!

thanx a lot ...........ur a sweetheart!!!

This is such a deep emotional expessional poem really well thought out and written.....Superb......Take care Til Later Juliet

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much Juliet..............glad that you took time to read it!! ^-^

lol

"I want to hide you from the world....."

For some reasons, that line's stuck in my head. Ehh. o.O
But anyway, I like it. =]

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks a lot!!
i'm happy that you like it =]

this one is my favorite out of all.

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Raya
I'm happy that you liked it!

lol

i agree with you. being lonely is a lot worst than death. it's like a vast black hole sucking you into nothingness. great poem:)

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks a lot luna........

excellent poem........sweetly written....worth reading.......

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you subbu!

love love love love love it...

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm soooooooo happy that you liked it so much!!

LOL


~Kritika



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