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The Same War

Poem By: mystory
Romance


"I'm not a fighter, I'm a lover...but I'll fight for what I love." View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 1, 2008    Reads: 93    Comments: 15    Likes: 5   


I know the truth.

I know what's happening to us.

I know you know too,

But we're too afriad to face it.

We've been fighting for so long,

That we've forgotten what it is we're fighitng for.

Lost in the darkness,

Trying to fight our way out.

But always losing the battle,

For our sanity.

We are both fighting in the same war,

But sometimes soliders get wounded,

And must give up the fight.

We were cornered,

About to die.

We were drowning in our pain.

Suddenly, out of norwhere,

A lifeboat came to our aid.

But it had room for only one.

I was dragged aboard,

Forced to leave you behind,

Wacthing you drown in your pain,

As I was pulled to safety.

I was forced to leave you behind,

In all your pain.

Wacthing as enemies surrounded you,

Too many to fight off.

This war had caused us nothing but pain.

It has torn us apart,

From the inside out.

Making us forget what's really important.

Now it's been so long,

Since I was pulled from the fight.

But now I now what I must do.

I have to go back,

And search for you.

I know you're strong enough to make it,

Hold your position until I can return,

And pull you from the deadly waters.

I've got to be strong enough,

To swim across this ocean,

Of pain and sorrow.

I have to swim to where you are.

But as I draw near the water's edge,

More enemies appear.

They surround me,

 Blocking my path to you.

So in order for me to save you,

I must first fight off my own enemies.

But I am already so weak,

I don't know if I can fight them all off alone.

I need your help.

I need someone to watch my back,

Like you used to,

And I'd watch yours.

If only these enemies,

Weren't keeping us apart.

I was pulled from harm's way,

Forced to leave you behind.

Only to be surrounded once more,

By the same enemies,

That haunted me in the past.

Only I know now they are real.

They aren't merely in my dreams,

As they once had been.

These enemies are all too real,

And stronger than I could have imagined.

Will I be strong enough to fight them all off,

So I can return to save you?


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Comments:

I like it! It paints a vivid picture of the situation, very cool.:) I'll say it simply, and just say sweeeeeeeet.

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow, thanks so much, Matt!

luuuurrrrrrrvd it!!:P

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you SO much. =]

I loved it! :D Great job =] I could feel all the emotion you put into this :D

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much. =D

this is super cool...again I admire "yourstorys"...;)

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha, thank you. Heehee. That's a new one. :P

wow it was so sad but it spoke the truth and that is what so cool about it

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very, very much. Glad you liked it. ^^

hi! ms. sad but soooo true. a realistic picture of a lover. since u portray a lover, who's not a fighter, s/he loses out.

a good one. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much. & thanks for reading. =D

interesting..this poem absorbed me lol..great mind you have though.

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much for reading. =D

I have to say I like this. It's very touching in a way. It kindof lets me see the other side, since I've always been a fighter. It's powerful and descriptive. I watched it like a movie in my head. Great work.

Posted: Jul 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow, thanks so much. I'm really glad you like dit. Thanks for reading. ^^

hey hows u? Great poem, i just love the metaphors you use, lifeboat, war, wonderful writing carly with all your emotions once again pouring out. It also had a lovely flow to it. A brilliant read!

Posted: Jul 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much. You're too kind. ^^

Whoa! Great poem. Very descriptive. I love it.

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks a lot. =D

Wow, I like this one alot. Great detail and excellent writing!

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. ^^

Whenever we have this intention to build and keep relationship, the more it becomes appealing to enemies. We'll just have to keep fighting back till they back off. ^^

The flow of this piece is kinda smooth. The use of metaphors create vivid imagery. ^^

Posted: Jul 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha, yeah. Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. =D

Awww this is sooo sad and really beautiful!!I love it.Really great!I wish everyone can win that war.
:)

Posted: Jul 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much. I'm really glad you liked it. =D

Wow, this was really good. I love poems or stories like this. Great job.

Posted: Jul 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks a lot. Glad you liked it. =]

For some weird reason i can relate to the narrator here. Somehow it reminds me of the situation I am in right now. Really touched me especially this line

"Only to be surrounded once more,

By the same enemies,

That haunted me in the past."

reminds me a lot about my situation with my ex. Hahaha how ironic. keep up the good work!

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. It always makes reading a poem more enjoyable when you can relate to it. Really glad you liked it.



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