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Poem By: nikkiluv123
Romance


Tags: love, poetry, hair

its just bout love,
bout love View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 17, 2008    Reads: 24    Comments: 1    Likes: 0   


i really love the country,
theres much more space to hide,
more time to be together,
to stroll weakly through the night,
the fun and the excitement,
will build up all the way,
until that situation,
becomes one others day.
he stares into her eyes,
and with that makes a promise,
to never let her fall behind,
to stay and watch the commets.
he may not ever ask her,
he may not get the chance,
to ask her how she feels,
and her opinion on romance.
shes fallen for your ability,
and your will to enhance,
that makes her go all loopy,
and slip into a trance.
you like the way her whispy hair,
whips wildly in the wind,
and you like her ability,
to keep her eyes skinned.
if this is all deeply true,
you swear it on your heart?
then you and hr should,
never be trusted to be apart.
xx.

by nicole elizabeth bernadette brunt.


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Comments:

This is probably the best poem I've read of yours. It makes the reader think, it gives the action a setting, it's got a good, happy, 'in love' flow to it... few spelling mistakes etc... but those can be ironed out easily. Very good. Well done!
The Rogue Hat Company

Posted: Jul 21, 2008



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