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Like The River

Poem By: November
Romance


A simple description of all things love. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 25, 2008    Reads: 63    Comments: 5    Likes: 3   


Like The River


Love is like a river
giving life as it runs by,
reflections of the stars at night
give beauty to the sky,

love is like a lifeline
that'll save you from abuse,
it takes you by the hand to dance
for any old excuse,

love is like a dancefloor,
on which to dance we dare,
I hold you in my arms and whisper
something then a prayer.

But I'm dancing all alone
and I can't seem to find you there.
For love is like a dancefloor,
and all I clutch is air.

She pulled upon my heart strings
then she tied them in a noose.
For love is like a lifeline.
Now love's cutting me loose.

No reflection of the stars at night.
No beauty in the sky.
For love is like a river
and the river's running dry.


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Comments:

Nicely structured, a well written poem.

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Why thank you very much.
x

I like the change in tone of this poem through out it. Nice job.

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks alot, I enjoyed playing with it =)
x

wow. that's amazing.

L ♥

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much
I really like this one too
x

Ahh, beautiful. Great poem you have here, can't wait to read more of your poetry! =)
~Maple

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so so much
x

Great poem. Good metaphors. If I could make just one suggestion, I wouldd say; change line 20 to: Now love has cut me loose. In general, the use of a contraction is a detraction -- just my opinion, mind you.

Keep on writing mate.

craaig

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for the comment
x



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