My first poem..............May be Its not perfect but I love this poem...........
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Submitted: Jun 25, 2008
Reads: 426
Comments: 50
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The flower is incomplete without dew
My life is incomplete without you
My life seems to have no meaning
If it wasn’t for our meeting
And now my life is meaningful
And my moments with you are always joyful
Memories are hard to die, may be, but
I shall never forget, then why remember
I don’t want our love to be romantic
But for at least let it not be dramatic
I know your heart is as soft and kind as butter
In front of you I couldn’t speak or utter
The world is sweet and wonderful
But to me, without you, the world is dreadful
In this world you’re a beautiful dove
And till death never forget my love
I will certainly find a place for my name in history
But let me find a place for me in your heart _______
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Alice
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Great poem. Very romantic. I hope to read more of your writing.
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
This is sooo beautiful poem.I like it.Really great. :)
Posted: Jun 26, 2008
stunningly beautiful... i love the honesty you brought into this poem. nice job:)
Posted: Jun 28, 2008
Great poem. Very romantic.stunningly beautiful.
Posted: Jun 28, 2008
Sweet and kind and from your heart. Lovely opening.
Posted: Jun 28, 2008
Richie
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One of the best....
Posted: Jun 29, 2008
best yarrrrrr
Posted: Jun 29, 2008
beautiful beautiful choice of words! well done. i love it.
Posted: Jun 29, 2008
itz sweet.
Posted: Jun 30, 2008
did i like it? nope...
I loved it, Subbu....WOW....how old r u by the way? U r so young and write with such maturity....
these lines need ur consideration though buddy
"Memories are hard to die, may be, but
I shall never forget, then why remember"
sorry i did not understand the meaning....
Posted: Jun 30, 2008
The flower is incomplete without dew
My life is incomplete without you
But let me find a place for me in your heart _______
LOVELY LINES....who is the lucky girl...Introduce her to all of us sweetheart
Posted: Jun 30, 2008
Thanks a lot Mrs pratibha..........Can u help me with something.......when someone comment in my poem........how do i reply to their comment?????......neways Im 19 years old.......and actually what i meant in
"Memories are hard to die, may be, but
I shall never forget, then why remember"
is that I shall never forget the girl,not even for a moment,so there is no need for me to remember her as a memory.She will always be a part of me.......
Posted: Jun 30, 2008
Dana
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Lovely opening..........powerful words............Strong display of love........Hats off,,,,,,,,
Posted: Jun 30, 2008
lovely poem, very well written!
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
i love it. its really sweet. you did a great job with this one too! =)
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Archita sharma
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What a great poem!!very lucky girl...
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Vicky
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The best opening ever
full of love and emotion
Posted: Jul 2, 2008
You write good poems, but I would like to see one without rhyme.
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
very beautiful and sweet. I like it, good job. =]
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
You have a gentle peaceful spirit about you that is calming and is reflected in your writing. Keep writing. Love, Susan
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
simply beautiful.
L ♥
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
loved it.
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very sweet
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
Aww I liked that. It was really nice.
A good poem about love.
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
lovely.
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
this is really sweet and u definitely are a good writer...unfortunately, it has been a very longtime since I felt this romantic-my first true love of three years felt like your words...ever since then-I can honestly say I am a bit pessimistic when it comes to romance...maybe one day I will feel this way about someone, but in the meantime, it looks very bleak...but still, good stuff, dude ;D
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
nice!! gud wrk!
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
Great poem subbu! I like it a lot. Great job!
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
awesome!
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
shree
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nice poemm
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
appu
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hey subbu you have written a truly enchanting poem....did not know you had so much talent.... keep writin......all the best...:)
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
beautiful
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
Subbu, you are very sweet, keep on interacting here and you will indeed see yourself blossom.
warm wishes to you, ~katie
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
ha!!!
great poem...
r u sure its ur 1st poem..
u sound like a pro at writtin poem...
lol
GREAT poemm
...
.x
Posted: Jul 5, 2008
Good poem.
*+*Peace*+*
Posted: Jul 5, 2008
Wow that was an amazing poem.
Posted: Jul 6, 2008
This is another beautiful poem.
Its so sweet, is just amazing!
I can't believe this is your first poem, its like you are an expert! You shouldn't doubt yourself, you have real talent!
Megzbo-x
Posted: Jul 8, 2008
i loved it
Posted: Jul 8, 2008
You call yourself a new writer?? I would call you a writer new to booksie.. :) Wonderful flow.. I could sense the rhythm with which you drafted the poem! :)
Posted: Jul 9, 2008
Well done Subbu. Some effective sentiments in there.
Ricky.
Posted: Jul 10, 2008
The flower is incomplete without dew
My life is incomplete without you
that was my fav line, its good but I do have one thing to say, poems don't have to rhyme, I personally think this would have flowed more as a free verse, but it is still extremly good! im off to press the i like button!
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
Very cute, I love love poems! :-D Good work!
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
wow!
i think this was phenomenal...if i spelled that right...
but wow again!
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
The first line was the best for me, such a good metaphor. Hope to read some more of your work in the future :)
Posted: Jul 21, 2008
I love it! I liked that you had some of the lines rhyming, to me it makes it flow more beautifully. Can't wait to read more of your writing! =)
~Maple
Posted: Jul 25, 2008
Nice poem, keep up the good work!
Posted: Jul 26, 2008
This poem is really beautiful. :) it's really sweet. keep it up! :D
Posted: Jul 27, 2008
I think it was very nice and loved the sentiment behind the words. You can never go wrong with a love poem.
Posted: Jul 27, 2008
good one subbu
i like your style
it's simple
but very powerful
keep up the good work :]
Posted: Jul 29, 2008
i loved it!! the topic was wonderful and well put.
Posted: Aug 26, 2008
