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WHAT IF???

Poem By: whitehart
Romance


Tags: what, if?

Was trying to lure sleep late last night when this popped into my head. Nothing special about it....just a series of questions View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 16, 2008    Reads: 46    Comments: 12    Likes: 6   


WHAT IF?

What if

I gave you my smile.

Would you use it well,

Let it brighten your day?

Would you embrace it,

And lift your lovely brown eyes,

And smile back at me?

What if,

I bared my soul to you?

Shared my most intimate secrets

Would you embrace me,

And lift your lovely brown eyes at me

And promise a brighter future?

What if

I offered my body to you?

Requested for an artful use of your skillful hands.

Would you take me

And look into me with your passion filled brown eyes,

And drive me to the highest points of passion?

What if

I gave you my heart,

A wholesome part of me with no scars,

Would you take it,

And with sincerity in your big brown eyes,

Promise to preserve it forever?

What if

I gave you me?


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Comments:

...
Awe! This is really sweet. I love it. XD

~!~Megan~!~

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Megan...and thanks for commenting. Take care!

Beautiful symetry. I don't usually like blank verse but this one got me going.

Phil

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Gee, thanks Phil....Glad you liked it.

Whoever she is .....she is the luckiest person on this planet Dev....

I will tell you something buddy.....

ur writing hypnotises my soul....

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

^^^ Thanks Pratibha. Glad to hear that.

There is uncertainty, but among all these lines is longing, love and romance. Beautifully written deb! ^^

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Punishment...

IRENE
(not registered user)

This is a sweet piece Deb.I liked.

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Irene, glad you liked it

Deb you get better with every word you write.this is word!

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

Author Comment:

^^ Thanks Billy. You take care n don't work too hard.

In every "What if..." there lies doubt and fear. These are emotions present in us when we are likely to feel someone might reject us if we open up and bare our soul.

I like this one, Deb. You were voicing out everyone else' thoughts and that, of course, included mine. ^^

Keep it up! :-)

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

hahaha, you are right, we all sail in the 'what if' boat every now and then. Thanks for reading and commenting Jadey.

in language and my life two things i m afraid of are - 'if' and '?' mark. they signify uncertanty for me. what if you are ... But, what if your are not ... Hope and hopelessness. that's where we live isn't it??? yeah ur poem well written. thanks.

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

hahaha, thanks Upali, uncertainty is part of life, in a way. Thanks for the comment.

Great work Bed

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks mate.

What a sweet poem Dee.
Loved it.

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Gary.

I loved this poem whiteheart. You seem to build up your poem very well by your use of certain words and situations. I really enjoyed how you skillfully asked, "What if?". Wonderful work :)

Regan

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks a lot Regan, glad you loved it.

Outstanding the repetition you used made me want to read on and on. well done.

James

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks a lot James.



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