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Hotel Houston - The Check Out!

Short Story By: Nixie
Romance


For anyone who doesn't know, this is an extension of a novel... and this really is the last part, I'm sorry I had to drag it out further I really couldn't help myself. :) I hope this ending works and that it doesn't confuse anyone. Let me know what you think! View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 16, 2008    Reads: 140    Comments: 7    Likes: 3   


Beth held onto my hand, her fingers tracing nervously over mine while the taxi moved into the right lane avoiding the traffic toward town. The taxi driver was a little Asian man with a French moustache, which I thought looked too heavy against his small face. He remained quiet and didn’t ask questions, but that was only because he could catch a glimpse of Beth and I holding hands in his rear view mirror. I had been on this rout many times before and I noticed him taking the long way round. For money or entertainment, I couldn’t be sure but I would bet the later.

It had been two days since Beth turned up at my doorstep, spilling the fate of Michael and since then we’ve loved, fought, laughed and cried. I would be lying to say I didn’t love her as much as the first time I saw her but now I was risking my own life to save her.

The wheels screeched and Beth’s fingers fell out of mine as the driver slammed on his breaks throwing us forward. The driver honked his horn at the youths who crossed the road without looking, one of which sticking his finger up as he passed. Beth’s eyes widened at me as the driver started cursing and grunting something unrecognisable to us.

Beth’s hand came to rest in mine again as the car began to move. She didn’t need to look at me as her fingers flexed in mine, words came silently as her hand slipped out of mine onto my thigh. I looked up to see the driver’s eyes paying more attention to us than the road and still I dared her to go further.

My eye lids felt heavy as she began to caress me. She still made me shiver under her touch, I was intoxicated by her – the scent of her alone was enough to make me run away with her! My eyes jolted open when the Taxi pulled along the curb.

“That’s twenty five dollars!” came his voice as he turned to face us.

His moustache twitched impatiently as Beth reluctantly removed her hand from my leg and reached for her back pocket. I stepped out of the car and looked up at the length of the building. There it was, Houston Hotel, just as I remembered it!

“Sweetie?”

Beth’s voice forced me to look back at her to see her thank the driver as he slammed down the boot. She smiled at me reassuringly and lifted the bag over her shoulder. I hadn’t noticed them pulling the luggage from the boot. I’d lost minutes in what felt like a few seconds of remembering my last visit here.

“You OK?” She asked as she came to stand beside me, suddenly shorter with the bag weighing her down.

“Yeah” I sighed. “Here, let me take that” I said reaching for the bag on her shoulder.

As we moved side by side into the hotel I noticed something different. The lighting was considerably brighter, as if someone had taken notes on my first impression of the lobby on my very first visit. I stopped to hike the bag a little more securely and looked over to the small queue forming by the reception desk. Just as I went to move forward Beth stopped me with a handme on my arm.

“Hey, look who it is. Our timing couldn’t be more perfect!” she cackled and made a nod toward the lifts.

I looked over to see a thin figure of a man rolling a luggage cart backwards out of the lift, and then the cart got stuck, the lift doors tinged and attempted to close repeatedly against him and the cart.

“Charlie!” I pouted, though unable to help myself grinning at him and his sorry state.

“Come on!” Beth hit my arm plyfully and moved ahead, starting for the lift.

I hadn’t had a chance to see her face yet to distinguish her feelings about Charlie and we’d only spoken briefly about his part in the deal with Michael but I had a feeling, by the way she swivelled her hips toward him that it wasn’t good. I followed her – of course, and got there just in time to see Charlie’s face as he caught sight of us.

“Holy… Beth?” he held his hand to his heart with a fright, whilst Beth stopped, folded her arms and cranked an eyebrow.

“Hi Charlie!” she cooed.

“Look, I have a kid at home who needs his…”

“You have a kid?” I asked, somewhat impressed with the idea.

The lift tinged as before trapping the cart. He turned in frustration, wiping his brow before pulling on the luggage cart, hoping to free it. “Well, it depends on whether you plan to hurt me or not” he said bravely with another yank, but still no success.

“No, Susan wouldn’t hurt a fly it’s me you need to watch!” Beth corrected him and with a sigh she moved forward to looking at the cart.

Charlie looked up “then yes, I have children, two…no four, and a wife! I’d be missed!” he said speedily.

“Relax Charlie, I’m not going to hurt you!” she laughed at the idea “here, let me try” she said pushing him aside and placing her hand on the cart. With one hefty pull she drew it out of the lift, allowing the doors to ting one more time before closing at last.

Charlie watched in surprise and coked me in close enough to whisper “I see why you like her!”

“There!” Beth said aimlessly whilst dusting her hands off and looked up to see us both gawking with adoration. “What?”

“Huh? Oh, nothing” I shook it off, but still I smiled at her.

Beth let it go, instead directing her attention back to Charlie. “So, Charlie, Chaz, you little hunk you, you owe us a favour!” she teased and punched him gently on the shoulder and then with stern face dared him to ague it.

“Ah, I do?”

Beth looked at me and I looked at Charlie “Yeah, you do actually” I nodded softly.

Charlie hesitated, thinking back to how he had lied to us in the past. “Ah, I do, you’re right” he agreed, solemnly searching both of us for forgiveness. But for true forgiveness he had to repay his debt and that would set us free!

***

“Charlie?” Beth’s voice echoed over the heat wave hitting the Caribbean cost.

I lifted my head up from the sun-lounger and looked over my sunglasses at her, she wasfighting her way through the white sand with two ice-cream cones in her hand. I pushed my shades up to rest on the top of my head and sat up to take my ice-cream as she joined me.

“You know, I will never get used to the name Charlie Batten!” I mused and licked the white cream now melting and dripping down the cone. We‘d used his bank account to transfer a large amount of Michael’s money from the business, and Beth and I had signed for it with the knowledge that Charlie would be linked to Michael. She‘d been teasing me with the name ever since!

“Poor Charlie, you think he’ll have found out by now?” I asked.

“The name -I think it suits you and anyway don’t feel bad about him!” she waved a careless hand atme “right about now he will be driving his Porsche Carrera across the Golden Gate Bridge without a care in the world!”

“Poor, Charlie!”

Beth laughed softly and sat down on the sun-lounger opposite me. Her skin was already of a stunning bronze tan after just a few days here. I couldn’t help but watch her licking and nibbling on her cone, knowing how good it must be to be at the mercy of her tongue like that.

“You know he will get pulled over don’t you?” I offered her the truth, in thehope that she’d see where I was coming from.

Beth looked away at the ocean, the breeze blowing the loose strands of her hair in her face. Sweeping them away with her free hand she looked back at me, sorry for what she was about to say. “Yes, I know.”

***

Meanwhile, while driving across the Golden Gate Bridge Charlie revelled in the girls screams coming from the back seat of his red Porsche as he sped toward San Francisco until a set of blue lights pulled him over. He watched the cops step out of the police car and made their way toward Charlie with their hands fumbling their firearms held at their waists.

Cranking his neck, Charles looked up at the offers now looking down at him.

“Sir, please turn the ignition off!” a cop ordered as they approached.

“What seems to be the problem officer?” he asked nervously.

“Your name, please sir?” came the officer.

“Charlie Batten”

“Is this car registered to you sir?”

Charlie coughed, held his chest and apologised before answering “Yes officer!”

The officer looked to his colleague, reassured he looked down at Charlie “Do you know of a man called Michael Staines, sir?

“Michael Staines?” Charlie looked ahead, confused. “No?” he said, hoping that was the correct answer.

“Sir, Michael Staines was found dead at his home last week under suspicious circumstances and we have reason to believe you are driving his car, please step out of the vehicle with you hands above your head!”

The truth suddenly dawned on him, that he’d been set up!


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Lol! I love this ending. Sweet revenge is what the little weasel deserved! (Oops! I think I might have some anger issues!) Honestly, though I wasn't expecting the ending. I thought they were going to get Charlie to help them. Wonderful Job Nixie!

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw, thank you so much! To tell you the truth I'm quite relieved. It took me a while to figure out what to do but I think this was the best option. I do feel bad for Chalie but I LOVE that the girls are home free, sunbathing on a beach together! Haha! I wanted to write more of that... I know, don't tempt me, that is it now. :) Thanks again, I'm chuffed! ~ Nixie

What a great addition to the story, I enjoyed reading it and the twist, very nice. I did notice a couple typos, if you don't mind.

In the 1st paragraph, 6th line...rout (route)
and half way down, line starting with "Huh? Oh, nothing..I shock (shook)

Great story, I "Liked It"
Take Care, Ted

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Ah, thank you for that Ted, I thought there might be a few, I always do. :) I will had to fix them when I get a moment. I'm chuffed you enjoyed it though especially the twist as I wasn't sure, always great to hear that it worked! Thanks again! ~ Nixie

I loved it. It kept me going right to the end. And I had no idea what the ending was going to be. Excellent job. Love the way you put that twist at the end. :)

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Phew, what a relief! It got to the point where I'd put so many twists in the story that it was almost predictable, but I'm one happy gal! Thank you Michael, really pleased you enjoyed it! ~ Nixie

i think i would come back again after i read all the previous posts of this novel...is this the last chapter??

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Yep, this is the very last chapter! :) I hope you like it! ~ Nixie

Now wait a minute. I thought there was another 100 words...and they were a little more racy. Now don't get me wrong! I loved this ending. Beth & Susan are safe and happy and that weasel will most likely have an aliby:)

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL there was more of them together! Ahh, this was just too long. I wanted to write more of them on th ebeach together and give it a little heat there but I had to cut it down. IF I put all this together as one post, I might add a little for you. :) I'm glad you liked this though, of course! Thank you for reading Nita! ~ Nixie

I can't believe you do this to me.
I love it. I'm really trying hard not to get too much distracted as I'm busy writing exams at the moment but I just resist reading all your stuff. Love the ending... Thnx Nixie

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Aww, I'm sorry to distract you Mel *sniggers* I hope it was worth it?! I seem to be in a similar situation with writing it, I always write while I'm at work and it's been so busy lately that I've been falling behind - Opps! Ha! Thanks for reading though, you know I appreciate it and I'm glad you liked it. ~ Nixie

Nixie, this was the best because;
1.) I love the ending up in paradise scene
2.) The characters seemed most present in this one
3.) They got away with the money;)
4.) They got away in paradise, with the money;)

Poor Charlie though..... ;(! That wasn't nice! lol

Nixie, this could be a t.v show and I would watch it! I like it as a story though, but its just that good;)
~rain

Posted: Jul 17, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL I'm grinning like a fool right now! I could dance!! Thank you so much for liking it! Ha! I know I was mean to Charlie, but the girls needed a way out, and he had caused some of the trouble before so I figured karma could hit back a little. I wanted to write more of them on the beach, i could've got carried away... *daydreams* :) Aw well, I'm happy! Thank you Rain, I'm chuffed! ~ Nixie



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