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The Evening

By: devilrod
Science Fiction


Babbling incoherently in mangled prose form. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 3, 2008    Reads: 48    Comments: 4    Likes: 4   


The road has grown so long, so quickly. Another day and I must break through some barrier. Be it, what it may be. From the depths of a lion's mouth to the pinnacle of the perrigrine's gaze, I shall taste this bitter-sweet, from tower to trail.

I suppose you could say it's a normal day. Normal for me in all of it's transitions of consciousness and awareness, and consumption of the sustenance in which the earth bequeaths me, and tremors that beseach me. My will is not my will, but merely the mechanisms of a confused alien, ailing from vertigo and amnesia. Yes, a normal day.

You see, the power has gone out of my life machine, and I am disconnected. And with no emergency backup system to keep me running, I am stuck. Stuck in the furrow of my own plow. A half-cracked seedling with intentions of sprouting, but no means for rerouting. No synapses firing. A seance with out the guest of honor.

Inside this cold, hard block of condensed matter is an intensly vibrating idea. Burning with the need to be recast into a form more suitable for this incongruous atmosphere. I need to be reformed by the hands of a master to quiken the souls of my new neighbors. To dilate the pupils, increase the heart rates, tighten the grips and salivate the tongues. I need to metamorph myself, before I can even think of catalyzing the minds, bodies and spirits of this spiral species.

And just as my vitals dissapear and my life force ebbs away, the power grid levies itself from slumber. Tense with new electricity, I am jolted forth through time and space, and into pure alchemical miracle. The unmentionable magick of the moment at hand.

That was how the evening began.


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Comments:

My sandals burned in the desert sand.

OR,
I was finally able to open the box of KD.

ha!
Kidding. This is seriously some deep stuff.

Posted: Aug 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you much for that. I never really write anything in a linear, or structured way, like I was telling air, so I wanted to give it a poke to see. It was still out on a limb a little, but I'm glad it gave you something. You're wonderful Peach.

WHOA!!!! Goodness!
ok, you 'jolted me through time and space' as well
hehe
fantastic stuff.

Posted: Aug 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Cool, I'm glad it was effective for you. I never really write anything with much of a structure or linear, so that's a positive sign. Thank you...luvluvluv

Hey :) I've been meaning to comment on your stuff for a while...ah well. Like Peach said, this is deep stuff. It is brilliantly written and perfectly executed. Your prose style is unique and I really enjoy it. Your writing was definitely worth the wait :) Take care, Regan

Posted: Aug 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Regan.
I need to check out your poems.
Definitly keep up the novel..

Clever!!! Its incoherence is the best quality that lends it the charm of realism. You are saying deep, jolting things about the evening of life who is strolling around in the evening of another passing day.

" The road has grown so long, so quickly"

Touching!

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much Carnation. I'm very glad that you enjoyed it. That's a great take on this, and I'm actually surprised that it carried as much resonance for everyone to connect with. That's good though. Maybe I should try it some more.
I need to check out your work. Thank you again.



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