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Incident on Black Snake Mountain

Short Story By: Jobie
Science Fiction


Neville climbs to the top of Black Snake Mountain to settle a bet with himself. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jan 20, 2008    Reads: 71    Comments: 9    Likes: 4   


Dusk was setting in now, and the cold air began to claw its way up the mountainside from the misty valley below.  The sinking sun was just tickling the horizon, and the faint glimmer of distant other worlds began to poke through the blue-purple veil of eastern sky.

Neville paused, panting from the arduous climb and, though perspiring from the effort, found himself beginning to chill.  He drank deep from the cantine he had brought with him, then wiped the fresh sweat from his forehead on to his soggy shirt.  He stared into the dimming sunlight, now more than half obscured, and reflected on the life events that brought him to this spot on this day.

* * *

It began when Neville was 6.

The dream was always different, but had familiar, consistent elements each time.  Black Snake Mountain (which he had never even heard of) was usually where these dreams took place.  Every subsequent dream revealed something new and unique, but always at Black Snake Mountain.

The dreams began infrequently, and were at first easily dismissed as the whimsies of childhood; strange stirrings of the mind brought forth from too much chocolate and an over-active imagination.  But as Neville grew older and the dreams became more frequent, it became much more difficult to ignore the twists, the messages, the clues.  At age 13, Neville began keeping a notebook, full of drawings and descriptions of things revealed to him in dreams.

By age 15, Neville had convinced himself that he was well on his way to madness.  He never spoke of the dreams, and kept his notebook steadfastly secret.  By that time it was well over 200 pages, and the sheer volume of it all compelled Neville to become obsessive about it; he spent hours and days scribbling notes, theories of interconnections, of how this map might relate to that sound, and what it could all mean.

Finally, at age 21, it happened.  A date.  October 19, 2007.  It was now a recurring theme.  Black Snake Mountain.  October 19, 2007.  Whatever else the dream contained, there was that day and that time.

Now it was time to settle the bet.  Was he mad?  Was there genuine meaning to the dreams, or would they repeat forever without mercy...if he allowed the date to pass without answering this question, he might be tormented forever.

"You made it!" came the soft, female voice from behind the rock.

"Adrianna?" Neville answered, without fully understanding why he knew that name.

"I knew you would make it!  Is anyone else with you?  Henry?  Monique?"  Adrianna was full of questions as she embraced Neville like a long, lost friend, though he was quite certain they had never met.

"No," he answered, "I haven't seen them yet."

"No matter, they'll be along, I'm sure."

Adrianna grabbed Neville's hand and they continued together to the top of the mountain.  By now, Neville had his flashlight in hand, carefully negotiating the loose rocks on the aggressive slope.  Up ahead in the clearing, they saw another flashlight, waving in a signaling fashion, and the faint echo of familiar voices.

"Henry!" Adrianna called out and began running towards the other light.  Monique was there too, of course, Neville knew she would be, though he was still numb trying to soak it all in.  Was this merely another dream?  After all these years, had the dreams simply taken on a new level of realism?

"What time is it?" Monique asked Neville as she hugged him.

"8 o'clock." Neville answered.

"We're right on time," replied Monique.  She began to notice Neville's somber mood.  "Cheer up man...the answer is coming, should be here in..."

"5 minutes." Neville answered.

They all stood together, holding hands and staring at the southern horizon.  No one said a word, and the only sound was the faint whistle of gentle breezes and trickling streams.

Then, it happened.

A faint light appeared just over the southern ridge and began creeping slowly toward them.  Neville could feel Monique's hand clench tighter around his, and her thumb was rubbing his skin lovingly.

The light remained silent as it approached, and the closer it got the more memories from forgotten dreams began to pour forth.  The light finally engulfed the 4 friends who had never met, and in an instant they were gone.

Neville, Henry, Monique, and Adrianna had gone home.

 


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Comments:

Whoa - Close Encounters...
They've gone home but probably after suffering the discomfort of an alien probe up their rear ends...

I liked this.

Posted: Jan 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, I appreciate that. (Anal probe in sequel? Maybe. Maybe not.)

have to say this blew me away my friend, blew me away, almost peerless, such amazing descriptions but never thrown in, a frantic pace and alway a question left in the readers head, forcing me to read to see whats next, thtas the secret to good, no great writing and you seem to posses that talent and more, i was compelled and intrigued and loved the endnig, it was mysterious and unexpected but you could almost feel the suspense as the light approached and memories flooded his mind, this was fabulous well done!!1

Posted: Jan 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow, thanks very much, I appreciate that! You might enjoy reading Suitor's Gambit, though it's not quite as sullen as this. -John

wow...i must admit that this is certainly a piece of art. Where did the inspiration from this come from I wonder?

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

honestly? I was sitting at home with some free time when the muse struck me, and I actually wrote it fairly quickly. Thanks for the compliment K!

I liked the idea. I enjoy stories about recurring dreams and shared thought. I have some of what you describe in real life but not to the extent of your characters of course. I believe I would enjoy learning more about you characters.

Posted: May 30, 2008

Author Comment:

I actually had many recurring dreams all through my adolescent years and on into adulthood, but they've mostly stopped now. They made no sense, really, but they were absolutely consistent, which completely puzzles me.

Anyway, glad you enjoyed the story!

-John

hi! john. had neville told others about his recurring dreams, no one'd've believed it for most of us do not take them for real thing but an illusion. most cases are a result of rebirth (remember 'reincarnation of peter pride') or childhood incidents making deep impact. its about time dreams were taken seriously and given their due importance.

u've left a few questions unanswered (or do u wish us to interpret in our own way):

* what was the light (henry!)?
* mystery about location and friends
* what does home imply?

till then, it should keep us guessing, glued and intrigued. ;-)





Posted: May 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Excellent questions, all of which, however, are left to the interpretation of the reader. At least for now. I may expand on this story some time in the future.

I'm so glad you liked it (or at least I hope you did...you didn't say that outright, but judging by your comments I think you might have.)

-John

hi! john. u naughty! U R HUNTING FOR COMPLIMENTS. now, now, that is not wholly appropriate. but then, what is a little excess between two friends. forget compliments, i must say, it is a superb piece, that leaves us wanting more.

(my choice always is: a piece of fiction where i don't need to search for hidden meanings, symbolism, imagery, darkness. that makes a reader tired. i like to read, chew, guffaw. makes for an enjoyable read.)

so if u r planning to expand, it'd be welcome as it'll make the story complete. ;-)

Posted: May 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha! I'm not hunting for compliments...but I'll take them anyway! :-)

-John

I remember people having paranormal experiences. That accounts for some genuine interest. You must explore it in your story further.

Posted: May 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Saif...I am definitely thinking about doing just that.

This is too short for science fiction. When I began to enjoy the story, you ended it.

Posted: May 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Hi Rose...I agree whole-heartedly that it ends entirely too abruptly. It's really more like a prologue to a story than a story in and of itself. I may expand this at some point...too many ideas to get down!

Thanks for the comments, I appreciate them.

Elegant and trim - tasty stuff.

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey, thanks Tonant!



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