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Originaly wrote as a Worth1000 entry about the theme, seasons.

As I was in my hippy styled mood that oft predicts the end of humanity I just couldn't resist bringing the climate into the fray one more time. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 26, 2008    Reads: 42    Comments: 7    Likes: 3   


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The mist hung with dark satisfaction over the snowbound city, its tall buildings towering over the few remaining inhabitants like frozen gods. The snow had been the first onslaught, its murderous intentions hidden amongst the pleasures of children with their sleighs and snowman. Three days later, still coming heavy the heavens had thrown the next gauntlet down. That icy mix of snow and rain came down in torrents, scaring the artificial men, ripping their skin and pummelling the lovingly made bodies into a mass of cold ice and coal eyes.

Media paved the way of safety, the government gave advice and in general the people listened. Those that didn’t often found their cars surrounded by death, slowly, coldly crawling into the engines and heaters until mans greatest invention gave up the ghost and died. The occupants trapped in ice enclosed machines as the sleet and snow continued to fall from the dark grey clouds. Power outages soon followed and then even the wise ones found themselves huddled around gas fired heaters and wrapped in layers of blankets. Food and heat became scarce, water on tap even more so.

Eventually they realised this was no ordinary winter; one week of constant snow had thrown a civilised people into disarray. As Jack Frost bit into the people and housings so did disruption become total on the power grid. Water mains burst causing country wide panic, the gas pipes soon followed leaving behind massive wounds when ignited. Slowly everything ground to a halt.

A few against the advice of others dared to venture to warmer climes. Wrapped up in scarves and blankets they advanced on the cold bitter streets, the wind pushing the deadly cargo of ice-cold sleet and snow into every crevice of clothing. Howling in gusts of 60 mph, the now sodden clothes soon froze, rapidly decreasing the temperatures of those who dared tempt nature. Some lasted hours, none managed a day. And still the heavens delivered the cold gift on the poor dead souls until not a one could be seen under the feet of snow.

As the frozen weather continued the buildings concrete and architecture started to revolt. Starting with the windows that cracked under extreme temperatures and then shattering in random directions leaving the occupants scrambling for furniture to block the mind numbing cold, and tend to the wounds brought about by the sudden unexpected implosions. The deep cuts and lacerations becoming infected and with no medical help available death soon followed. The foundations and walls unable to withstand the bite of this winter and the damage invariably led to the disaster of ruined buildings and unsafe housings. Many more died due to collapsed ruins than the snow had taken.

To the north no one survived past the first week and as the cold crept its way further south the tendrils of ice spread its fingers slowly engulfing a whole nation. The snow was followed by the glaciers, moving at incredible speeds and with devastating slides the shards of diamond sharp death crashed down on mankind and its history. With each new day the knowledge of centuries vanished under vast mountains of ice. As these movable giants drove there way into lands unseen the wildlife they chased bore down into mans cities and dwellings. London itself heard the sound of the arctic wolf for the first time in the history of the planet and with that noise the few remaining residents learnt of a new threat to overcome, that of being the hunted.

After a month all communication ceased. Satellites continued transmitting electronic data but now there was no-one left to hear. The view afforded four euronauts in the European Space Station was as beautiful as it was deadly. Where once before they saw a blue green planet covered in life giving water, now it showed a world covered in ice, slowly engulfing the globe with deadly precision. They counted their days patiently, waiting with dignity until the last drop of liquid oxygen was transferred to the circulation tanks and evaporated into breathable life.

The cold persisted alongside the winds and quickly the Earth’s temperature dropped lower than anything man had recorded. The last remaining remnants of human life faded, soon after the animals followed suit until all that was left existed in hot lava streams, fathoms deep beneath the frozen seas surface.

All that once was had now passed. All that was learnt was lost. The few remaining guardians stood proud for eons, a symbol of engineering and science. Yet no-one would ever see them, or understand these three hundred storey giants. Winter had come to mankind for the last time and no other season would follow. Christmas was here and as if listening to the echoes of children, it was white.


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I love you ending! This reminds me of the movie The day After Tomorrow! =D

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha! I must admit that when I wrote it I did sit there for several minutes and hope that I hadn't just copied the films story!

Luckily Hollywood loves a happy ending, where as I rarely do :)

Love how you summed it up so perfectly! It was absolutely perfect and so deep. Great word choice, and keep up such the lovely writing! =)
~Maple

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! Seeing these first comments on my writing made me smile all day :)

That was well written. I love the attached picture too - did you paint it, photoshop it or purloin it from somewhere on the net? Either way, it added atmosphere to the story. I'm glad you did not go for a conventional, happy ending. You ought to send this to Al Gore!

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

For the image I found a royalty free image of Big Ben and altered it in Adobe Photoshop using a stock filter and a bit of level. I then added broad lines to act as the ice and overlayed Big Ben whilst re-filtering the whole shebang.

Hmm wonder if Al would mind :) I need an email! lol

Thing I liked more: the thought about the tall ones... that's a lovely image and here well presented.

T

Posted: Aug 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :)

Glad ya finally got to read some of my stuff.

Your vocab has me feeling bad about my own, however there are moments where I feel it is forced. This is a common plot as such a trying subject. Looking forward to more.

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Your vocab has me feeling bad about my own, however there are moments where I feel it is forced. This is a common plot as such a trying subject. Looking forward to more.

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Hmm forced. I guess in a way it is forced because it is meant to quickly and forcably throw you through the door of a rapidply colling planet. To make use of what was in my mind at the time in such a short amount of space (I limit myself to a certain amount of words some times to push myself) could leave you feeling this way but I assure you it was the intention :)

And hey, regarding your own vocab, I will make an effort to read your work soon, my RL has taken over at the moment but I will be back.

Joe
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Nice prose, very clear and easy to read, and a good read, too.

Your physics has a few problems, I think, but of course this is science fiction, and science does not need to get in the way of the plot.

But on with the physics. Here are some thoughts:

As I have experienced Maine winters, if it is very cold, it doesn't snow. You have to have heat input to moisten the air, and heat output from the condensing snow must show up somewhere, and there must be wind to drive the moisture-laden clouds somewhere. Condensation of as much water vapor described in the story requires heat to warm the source, and a second release of heat for the condensation to happen.

In Maine, a huge snowfall only can happen when you have warmer water and a circulating storm that drives the moist clouds inland where they rise onto the Appalachian "mountains", drop their moisture, and then cycle out to sea again to get wet again over the gulf stream. This is the classic Nor'easter.

In the case of the huge winter accumulation in Colorado two winters ago, moist air from the Gulf hit the mountains' escarpment, rose and dropped and dropped and dropped their moisture.

I suppose you could do something with the heat driving the storm (which it does), and shifting weather patterns, etc.

Climatologists indicate that glaciation is due to snowfall lasting through the summer--it takes at least a couple of centuries for glaciers to form and begin to move, except on mountain slopes.

Glaciers do not move on flat ground--they require a slope to slide down or must have ice pushing them from behind. On the other hand, the continental plates do bend down under the enormous weight of the glaciers which are at their worst 3 KM thick, deflecting the land down as much as 200 meters in Maine during the last glaciation. Of course the weight added to the natural slope to the water, which accelerated the glacier movement.

All that said, who cares? I still really enjoyed your story. I enjoy your prose--it flows very well. Thanks.

Posted: Sep 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Interesting comment!!

My reply is one you already stated, It's just a story and a very short one at that.

I live in Norway, quite high up. I do understand how and when it snows (and it can snow here at extremely cold temperatures due to some messing with air being trapped in valleys etc etc, I don't understand all of it) and didn't actualy ignore those facts however the "plot" to my short story was one of extremes, one the if we dig deeper lets people maybe think of colder planet cores, fucked up magnetic poles and various other "doomsday" options that take our "normal" opinions and slide them into fantasy.

One point, Glaciers can move on flat ground very easily although not at the kind of speeds we see in my work of course. We live near a couple and though they may well start higher the end result is sliding along quite nicely on flat and sometimes raised ground.

Thanks for the comments :)



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