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We allways knew we were different. We just had all the required traits to make us "wierd" Oprphans, baces, glasses, scary talking vioces in our heads dictating our every move. Yup, we were something else. View table of contents...
Submitted: Jul 15, 2008 Reads: 126 Comments: 19 Likes: 4
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I like it so far!! That voice is really creepy though O_O!!
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
OMG!!! This is like totally amazing!! OMG!! I can't believe I just said 'Totally' *ick* * washes tongue with soap* Lol. exaggerating a bit, aren't I? :) keep writing and let me know when you have more up, because this is very interesting.
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
man thats some beggining i so want more! poor avery i hope she? he? i think its a she um i hope she gets the voice thing outa her head anyways keep up the good excelent awesome amazing work! cant wait for another chapter!
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
awesome!! Very interesting... "You will obey me and you will like it."--classic:) I love it!
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
Very interesting keep it up!
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
I loved it. Creepy too (in a good way). Lol. Hope you write more.
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
There are two opposing conversation that take place within us everyday and it's up to us which one we favor most. We should be careful though b/c the other one releases toxins. ^^
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
Post more soon! I'm loving the story:)
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
hi! alice. that's an excellent beginning and a refreshing one too. keep it up. lol. ;-)
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
What an original (and slightly creepy) first chapter. I like it :)
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
Wow, that is so cool!!!! Tell me when you have more up!
Posted: Jul 17, 2008
Great job, Alice. Like many of the others have said this is off to a great beginning I'm going to start reading the others soon. Could you please come by to my page and read my poem "A Winter Flame" I'd really appreciate it. It actually has a similar setting, which is why I liked it so much!
Posted: Jul 17, 2008
That was fantastic...cant write much...need to read on...right now...well done though!!!
Alex
Posted: Jul 18, 2008
This is really good so far! Very interesting! I shall read on...
The Rogue Hat Company
Posted: Jul 18, 2008
I LOVED it!!! Thanks 4 reading my stuff! I will just have to read on!
One question though... What's vioce? Is it voice, or somethin' else?
Posted: Jul 18, 2008
Oh, Alice! That was lovely. A few typos, but very well written. You used a lot of great words which made this piece very powerful. I love every bit of it :]
Posted: Jul 19, 2008
omgosh!..
soo sori i didn't take a look @ diis sooner!..
i lov dis!!..
ur writing is soo descriptive that the only way i cud see dat scene any clearer is if i was actualli present there!!.
i av 2 go.. bu i will get 2 d rest wen im bac..
il pt it on mii readin list .. k?...
xoxox
Posted: Jul 20, 2008
Cool. I'd like to see where this one's going ;)
Check some of my stuff out if you get the time, would you?
Posted: Jul 22, 2008
Thank-you for your invitation to read your story. It was almost too much for my poor old heart! Very creepy!
Posted: Jul 23, 2008
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