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The Bathroom Paranormals

Poem By: Tigerchill
Thrillers


Drip, drip…the everlasting echoes of blood drops, from the ceiling to the floor; encapsulates my mind and arrests my body. I’m slowly losing faith of reality...
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Submitted: Aug 21, 2008    Reads: 89    Comments: 14    Likes: 8   


Every night I go to bed,
And turn out the light.
Darkness encompasses my room,
It is silent, eerie and creepy.
I begin to stir memories in my head,
Of my childhood nightmares in Bangladesh.
It is of a man, a man without a head,
Laying under my bed.
I begin to imagine how it happened,
…lost his head from his neck,
With a blow from an axe.
Blood spurts out of
His capillaries and blood vessels,
Which are now like leaking taps.

I remain laying in bed, in pure darkness,
I’m scared…losing control of my mind.
I see blood rushing up the walls and
Running along the ceiling.
Drip, drip…the everlasting echoes of blood drops,
From the ceiling to the floor;
Encapsulates my mind and arrests my body.
I’m slowly losing faith of reality.
I can hear the faint sounds of babies crying,
Mothers screaming and men yelling.
Sane they were once upon a time,
Insane they have become since the truth was revealed,
The truth about their very own existence.

Where am I?
Who am I?
What place is this?
I do not know,
I’m a foreigner in this strange and vivid world.
I walk to the bathroom, slowly, because…
I hear a woman crying
I hear ‘h…e…l…p….…m…e’ in a stuttering voice.
My footsteps are soft but still the wooden floor creaks.
The woman I kept on hearing is now silent;
I steadily push the door open.
I turn on the light and before my very eyes,
Appears a naked woman in the bath.
Brutally murdered and bathing in her own blood.
No evidence of weapons in sight,
No evidence of another being,
No evidence of an escape route.
I begin to blackout.

Later in time, I wake up,
I look under my bed, there is nothing.
I look in the bathroom, there is nothing.
Was I just dreaming?
Was that an illusion of the mind?
Or did that really happen?
Whatever it is…
Why do I have nightmares of this kind?
Am I waiting for something to happen?
Did I just have a premonition?

I’m still in the bathroom when I begin to hear those sounds again,
Babies crying, men, women and children begging for mercy.
I’m scared…I start trembling,
I want to get those voices out of my head.
For some reason the bathroom light goes out.
Total blackness looms and fills the room.
I hear nothing, I see nothing.
With some kind of strong force,
I got flung to where the bath is,
I didn’t feel anything or anyone touch me.
My body was freezing cold,
But I couldn’t feel anything,
Was I paralysed?

Oh heavenly Lord above,
Save thy body from the perils of thy misery.
A being I am, a human being,
Chaos and order ruled my immortal life
Until now…
Dreams, imaginations and premonitions,
Thy mind is freaked and thy body is weak.
White smoky clouds gather and merge together,
And slowly illuminates into a ghostly figure.
A headless paranormal being…
Is coming for me…I can’t move,
There is a stutter in my voice as I yell,
‘H..e..l..p…m..e…’

Written 21 August 2008


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Comments:

Wow Tigerchill! So dark and descriptive! This really is your best piece (in my opinion of course). Plus, the title is so amazing and original, exactly like the poem itself. I like it! Take care, Regan

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks mate. I appreciate your comments. It's a very old piece that I decided to amend and publish. If enough people like it I was thinking of doing an extended short story version of this. Take it ezi...Tiger.

I agree with Regan, this is very dark. No rhymes but still very good.

I hope you read my novel!

With Regards, Jack12

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey Jack, yeh I will read your novel shortly. I'm glad you liked this piece. I was hoping it would be supernatural and dark. Thanks for you comments. Take it ezi...Tiger.

okay....wait...alright, I turned the lights on--not as scared now--

Posted: Aug 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Hope it didn't make you soil your pants...hehehe. Take care and hope you can check out some of my other stuff, Ciao...Tiger.

I loved it! When reading a poem I seem to always grip it from the beginning when there happens to be a pattern of rhyming, but you know what? I didn't even notice that there wasn't any rhyming until I read Jacks comment! Wonderful writing, and very dark... of course by reading my writing you should know by now that I'm a sucker for dark writing... :P

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for your comments. I didn't want to use any traditional poetic methods...I just wanted to write something dark and paranormal. I'm glad you liked it.

I loved the flow of this poem - no rules and rhymes - just you.

"Which are now like leaking taps." - nice line.

I'll get to the rest.

Love Lien

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks very much for your comments. It makes the work worthwhile.

o.0 I actually have dreams like that alot. I love the poem ^_^ very fascinating. This comment sucks..anyway keep up the good work =^-^/=

Posted: Sep 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks mate, I'm glad you liked the poem. No comment sucks, every comment helps. take care...Tiger.

WoW! I love this! It's dark, but everything in it seems so real. Our imagination can take us anywhere. I love that you didn't rhyme. I would love to be able to write poetry without rhyming; it seems more intelligent, clever. Some poems rhyme so much that the reader can never grasp its meaning which is why I like this one so much - simple, gripping, easy to read and understand.

Posted: Sep 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Funnily enough I find it hard to write poems that rhyme...I find that if I try to make it rhyme I am limited in my expressions because the word choice is limited. As usual, your comments mean a great deal and is inspirational. Thanks and I hope I can keep writing material that will interest you and make you come back to read more. Take care...Tiger.

ohhh... eerie :p AWeSOME!!! It really caught my attention and heart. Very touching. The vocabulary in the poem is perfect. And and the last stanza really finished off the poem nicely. Wow, i can't wait to know HOW DO YOU WRITE SO GOOD? :D

Posted: Sep 17, 2008

Author Comment:

I don't think my writing is that good. I always try to put down on paper what I feel inside me and then I read it to myself several times until the theme and settings seem right. Thanks for your comments, it is greatly appreciated.

It is... alright. Feels more like someone trying to be "dark" than someone actually being "dark". It is morbid, but not entertaining. Though, I do like the structure and flow.

Posted: Sep 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, I appreciate your honesty in your helpful comments.

I like it. Very spooky, and the language is wonderful. The imagery is just so much in the forefront that you can't help stopping in the middle and thinking "Oooooo..." The meter kinda reminds me of something you would tell around a campfire on a dark night. That sounds lame, I know.

I also didn't realize that it didn't rhyme, but then again that doesn't usually stand out with me. None of my poetry rhymes either, because the rhymes always seem more restricting than just the free flowing words. It actually bothers me more when poetry rhymes, because unless it is very well written it just seems flat. This however, was not flat at all. It didn't seem to have the same emotion as the rest of your stuff, but I guess that makes sence because it's not the same type of piece. Great all around.

Posted: Sep 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much. It would be a good story to tell around a camp fire. I like writing poetry without having to make them rhyme because it doesn't limit your word choice. Your comments are appreciated.

This was really awesome.Like everyone said bit scary,lol.Not much.It was just dark.Really great job!
I like it.
:)

Posted: Sep 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

I really like this. I felt like I should have gotten chills after reading it. It has a dark and scary feeling. something I could definately scare my friends with late at night in the pitch black :p This is really awesome! Keep writing!

Posted: Sep 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for you comments and you kind words, it makes it all the more pleasureable to have written it. Cheers.

hi! tiger. oh god! u've scared the wits out of me with this terrific poem ur innermost thoughts've portrayed ur turmoil that can raise heckles. very realistic and powerful. u'll scale very many greater heights. lol. ;-)

Posted: Sep 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Again, you are very kind with your comments. Many thanks.

I love it!! Reminds me of...home! Ugh, what does that say about MY home life, huh? Anyway, very good work. I can almost see them, your ghosts. I am officially a fan!!

Posted: Oct 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx very much. It's great to have you as a fan!



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