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Drip, drip…the everlasting echoes of blood drops, from the ceiling to the floor; encapsulates my mind and arrests my body. I’m slowly losing faith of reality...
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Submitted: Aug 21, 2008 Reads: 89 Comments: 14 Likes: 8
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Wow Tigerchill! So dark and descriptive! This really is your best piece (in my opinion of course). Plus, the title is so amazing and original, exactly like the poem itself. I like it! Take care, Regan
Posted: Aug 22, 2008
I agree with Regan, this is very dark. No rhymes but still very good.
I hope you read my novel!
With Regards, Jack12
Posted: Aug 22, 2008
okay....wait...alright, I turned the lights on--not as scared now--
Posted: Aug 24, 2008
I loved it! When reading a poem I seem to always grip it from the beginning when there happens to be a pattern of rhyming, but you know what? I didn't even notice that there wasn't any rhyming until I read Jacks comment! Wonderful writing, and very dark... of course by reading my writing you should know by now that I'm a sucker for dark writing... :P
Posted: Aug 26, 2008
I loved the flow of this poem - no rules and rhymes - just you.
"Which are now like leaking taps." - nice line.
I'll get to the rest.
Love Lien
Posted: Aug 28, 2008
o.0 I actually have dreams like that alot. I love the poem ^_^ very fascinating. This comment sucks..anyway keep up the good work =^-^/=
Posted: Sep 9, 2008
WoW! I love this! It's dark, but everything in it seems so real. Our imagination can take us anywhere. I love that you didn't rhyme. I would love to be able to write poetry without rhyming; it seems more intelligent, clever. Some poems rhyme so much that the reader can never grasp its meaning which is why I like this one so much - simple, gripping, easy to read and understand.
Posted: Sep 16, 2008
ohhh... eerie :p AWeSOME!!! It really caught my attention and heart. Very touching. The vocabulary in the poem is perfect. And and the last stanza really finished off the poem nicely. Wow, i can't wait to know HOW DO YOU WRITE SO GOOD? :D
Posted: Sep 17, 2008
It is... alright. Feels more like someone trying to be "dark" than someone actually being "dark". It is morbid, but not entertaining. Though, I do like the structure and flow.
Posted: Sep 18, 2008
I like it. Very spooky, and the language is wonderful. The imagery is just so much in the forefront that you can't help stopping in the middle and thinking "Oooooo..." The meter kinda reminds me of something you would tell around a campfire on a dark night. That sounds lame, I know.
I also didn't realize that it didn't rhyme, but then again that doesn't usually stand out with me. None of my poetry rhymes either, because the rhymes always seem more restricting than just the free flowing words. It actually bothers me more when poetry rhymes, because unless it is very well written it just seems flat. This however, was not flat at all. It didn't seem to have the same emotion as the rest of your stuff, but I guess that makes sence because it's not the same type of piece. Great all around.
Posted: Sep 18, 2008
This was really awesome.Like everyone said bit scary,lol.Not much.It was just dark.Really great job!
I like it.
:)
Posted: Sep 20, 2008
I really like this. I felt like I should have gotten chills after reading it. It has a dark and scary feeling. something I could definately scare my friends with late at night in the pitch black :p This is really awesome! Keep writing!
Posted: Sep 24, 2008
hi! tiger. oh god! u've scared the wits out of me with this terrific poem ur innermost thoughts've portrayed ur turmoil that can raise heckles. very realistic and powerful. u'll scale very many greater heights. lol. ;-)
Posted: Sep 29, 2008
I love it!! Reminds me of...home! Ugh, what does that say about MY home life, huh? Anyway, very good work. I can almost see them, your ghosts. I am officially a fan!!
Posted: Oct 1, 2008
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