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Inspiration Part 1

Short Story By: MrPrinceton
Thrillers


A man suffers a burst of inspiration due to psychosis, that ends in tragedy. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jan 8, 2008    Reads: 100    Comments: 10    Likes: 3   


� Winston laid down on the couch and stared into the ceiling that to him seemed to be much more. His mind conjured many things from the comfort of his own living room. He enjoyed his escape into nowhere, as he did it often. Winston was a thinker. He figured so many marvelous things in his head, it was all he lived for, but things would stay put, him and his thoughts, never to be shared with the world.
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�He was relaxed and deep into a provocative thought, but his dreamy silence was broken. He heard the squealing and laughter that was native to the children. They lived next door and he found the noise to be displeasurable. Their pesky ruckus shocked him from his daydream. He blinked slowly, coming out of his haze. Sitting up, he found he was rather stiff. He'd been on the couch for some time now. He stood and stretched. He stared lazily at the television. He was in no mood to do anything. The cumulative stress of a lifetime was building to unsurmountable heights. A peak to high to climb and conquer.
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�He turned on the T.V. and heard the droning voices and the idea of people diminished to mere pixels danced in his head. Mind numbing as it was, it didn't take his mind off things. He tried to absorb himself in the show, but the TV's blaring screen soon bored him. He heaved a sigh and forced himself off the couch and into the bedroom. Life was rather dismal nowadays, and things weren't getting any better loafing around the house feeling the way he did. If he'd had a hobby he'd love to be doing it now, but he had no hobby to speak of. He needed to go for a walk. The sun was setting and the temperature was dropping to a chilly forty degrees, but he needed it all the same.
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�He stepped off the porch into the crispautumn air. His bogged down brain was refreshed by the natural atmosphere. His shoes clicked against the road as he strode onwards. He tried to unburden his mind and for a moment he found peace. It was something he had not felt for many years, that singular moment of sanity. Unfortunately it was to be the calm before the storm.
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� He had recently fallen into a trench of depression, that wasn't letting up. Winston had been medicated some years ago for all sorts of strange symptoms of a diseased mind. He knew that insanity had been creeping and conquering his mind in times since past but he hadn't had any trouble with such things in years. He took the medicine faithfully everyday, but two decades had gone by, and he'd been okay. He was doubting if he really was reliant on the medication anymore. He was unsure of the consequences of dropping the dosage entirely, but nothing had occured in so many years and he was feeling confident in his decision.
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�He found his way home, head buzzing. He stepped out of the air that, being so late at night had turned frigid, and into his house. He made his way into the bathroom. The lights, the mirror, the medicine cabinet. He shuffled through the cabinet. The desired medication now sat at the counter. He stared into it and through it as he decided what to do next. Did he dare? He knew he was supposed to take it. After all he'd been feeling really bad lately, and maybe the medication was at fault. The episodes had ceased long ago. He was better than before.
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� Before he knew it, the medicine in question was swiped carelessly off the counter, and into the garbage. That was that. He was seated in a plush chair from the living room, and was fixated on the painting that hung above the couch. It was a painting he had picked himself for it's beauty and color. He had an appreciation for the creativity and dedication that went into any craft, though he was never blessed with the creative gene. He was envious for it and his lack of talent was his final thought before drifting off to sleep.
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�The dreamworld was ominous to him. Lines were no longer lines for they moved about him surrendering thier stationary roles. Dark and light clashed and the air was heavy. His rapid heart and shallow breath grew at a steady pace until a psychedelic splendor of horror flashed before his eyes. He shook and spasmed, weeping until all was calm once more.


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AA
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Princeton this is great so far! Very atmospheric. By describing everything from Winston's perspective, it's kind of similar to a first-person narrative, where the reader gets dragged into the protagonists mind and can only view their actions subjectively. This is especially eerie when the subject is so detached, with shades of insanity. There were a few minor errors, but you'll pick them up easily on a re-read. I definitely look forward to reading the rest!

Luff, AA

Posted: Jan 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks I hoped you would like it!

darlene
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I think this is a wonderful read. I'm sorry there wasn't more of it. It has a way of drawing you in. I think anyone who as suffered from any kind of mental illness can relate to some of his thinking and actions. I can't wait to see where Winston's mind takes him next. Bravo, MrPrinceton!

Posted: Jan 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Darlene! :)

HMHPT
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Great job. Very clear. Eager to see where you're going with this.

Posted: Jan 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you.

i like this alot. keep me posted when you get more stuff?

Posted: Jan 10, 2008

Author Comment:

I will definitely keep you posted. :)

I like it a lot, and the characterization is great. But what happened at the end? Did he die or just fall asleep?

Posted: Jan 11, 2008

Author Comment:

It's only part one, there is more to come. It will be up soon. That's why it's called 'Inspiration Part 1'

Valerie Lucinda
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My girl, you are brilliant. Can't wait to read more!

Posted: Jan 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

brian breimers
(not registered user)

Awesome!
Well done, really looking foward to reading some more.

Posted: Jan 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks 'Brian' *wink wink* Awesome!

cutebunny
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it was really good i am going to read it again when i am not as drunk as i am right now but as far as i can see it is really good.
CB

Posted: Jan 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks CB, it would be good if you read it sober :D

This is really good so far. I'm sorry it took me so long to read it, Ive been a little busy.
I hope you put more work up soon ^^


*Mandy

Posted: Jan 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. I actually reread it awhile later and found that I didn't like it as much as I did originally. So I will be fixing it soon.

i liked this alot.... very descriptive !!
:)

Posted: Feb 2, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you. looking back on this piece I see it needs a lot of work.



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