"War"

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Poem By: CanadianIdiot
War and Military

Tags: war, soldier, bat, dead, hate, anger

A poem about the anger in war. View table of contents...

Submitted: Mar 18, 2008 Reads: 51 Comments: 5 Likes: 2

“War”

Over the lost and restless,

Have a thousand souls been lost.

All have died by a pointless cost,

None of the deaths have been painless

I am stuck here in this alien place,

All of my friends are either lost or dead.

I try to hide from the firing above my head,

I trip in fear, but realize it is only my shoe lace.

All around me, bodies lay flat,

Fear overwhelms me as I run past.

Anger builds inside me fast,

As I see a friend spread out like a bat.

Let the war end, I say!

Before my anger goes beyond the top!

They refuse; enough trouble to mop,

But as long as anger is here, the war will stay…

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Comments:

pocorox

When the anger builds more,
And the tension grows,
Everyone knows,
This is a war

Great poem

Posted: Mar 20, 2008

Author Comment:

I myself am not the war type of guy; if I know a thing about war, it is usually from Medal of Honor of Call of Duty. But anger is something I know about. Thanks for complimenting more.

Wow, this was really powerful. War is such a horrible thing, and it's so completely pointless. As Mark Twain once said "All war must be just the killing of strangers against whom you feel no personal animosity; strangers whom, in other circumstances, you would help if you found them in trouble, and who would help you if you needed it."

I really enjoyed this poem, because it wasn't so much about the actions of war as it was about the emotions of war. Great job.

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

When I write poetry, I usually write with emotion and events. I dont know anybody in war. None of my family members have ever been in the army, so I got no inspiration. It all comes from my head. When I made this, I think I had just play Medal of Honor or something, but that made me think; how would my character feel in a situation where I am pinned down by Nazi's? How would he feel to see his allies die? It all just came to me and I got this.

Chris Myers

Awesome poem. You really know how to express your indignation at the senselessness of war (an indignation I share). You really capture it with, "Let the war end, I say! / Before my anger goes beyond the top! / They refuse..." That's about how it goes.

I just published some poems and stories that deal with similar themes. I'd be thrilled if you'd check them out and let me know what you think.

--Chris

Posted: Apr 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Rawk on distant brother. War is just a messed up shit-hole that we can't get out of. I really dont think war can solve anything.

viper

So true.It reminds me of the poem I wrote."Our Loved Ones."It also kinda goes with my other two,"The World Today",and "To Change The World."Great job on this.More people should speak up on this.Good job.

Posted: Oct 19, 2008

Author Comment:

I'll take a look at your stuff when I got the moment. Over where I am, it's late and I'm getting a bit tired. I'm sure it'll be a great thing to wake up to!