WOW, Pratibha, that writers block sure is out of the window. This piece speaks volumes...it says all that needs to be said in a nutshell about all this war stuff. Love the way you managed to do all those challenges in one piece, but most of all, love the piece.....a great inspiration it is...keep writing buddy.

Posted: Jul 21, 2008

You certainly said it all. What a waste War is.

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Wow! Pratibha, among all your works, this is my favourite! It is written with passion and the flow of words is great. Over all it sounds coherent and really expresses the need of the day. Also, I am happy that you are expanding your wonderful talents to a different genre, moving effortlessly and spectacularly out of the comfort zone. Would love to read more such poems exploring different themes by you.

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

your writting is always so meanignful and inspiring. I love it every time. great job!
Steph(:

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Oh, I forgot something - I have an objection to what you mentioned in the summary of the poem:

"....I have used “Butterfly in Jewellery Box” twice...In the first line, it signifies aspirations of people living in Palaces who use others for fulfilling their never ending ambitions."

I think it would be better if you define the context in which you talk about 'people living in palaces' - not all of them use others for fulfilling their never ending ambitions; many of them rise up from nothing and acquire riches through sheer hard work and will power (I know many such people). It is not fair to pool them with selfish bloodsuckers such as the ones you are talking about.

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Oh, and once more: I LOVE IT! I LOVE IT1 I LOVE IT1 (aw, it became thrice more, but what the heck, I DO LOVE IT).

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Hello again Pratiba,

I've again visited the scene of the crime. I just wanted to say that I regret that my first comment was so brief. I had spent some time over my comment on your other piece and it was late.

I will just second Urjas comments (I think of her as your de facto elder sister)and add, apart from your obvious concern for others, I would never known that your had written it.

It is so powerful (not that you aren't)but so different from your usual way of expressing yourself. It gives a hint of what would happen if some-one threatened the Lioness's cub!

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

It really is easy to declare war as easy as letting a butterfly out from the jewelry box. ^^

The intruders in the war are still people. Thus, people are fighting people to fight for their contrasting interests. :-(

To call for peace is as difficult as getting the butterfly back to the jewelry box.

You did a good job. :-)
Thanks for sharing this, Buddy! ^^

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

well well, this is very different from your usual style pratibha - well, like your themes you often write about. your poems normally have a nice dose of passion though i found this remarkably more passionate than some of your other works! you write with such confidence in your words and speak through your heart and soul making a very lovely piece :)

i thought combining the challenges is an interesting idea. i personally wouldn't have done it, but hey. you had writers block. what better way to handle it than combine them all? ^^ so that way its a real smack-down to writers block! haha ^^

i love the symbolism you used with the butterfly and jewelry box - the comparison you made with it. very clever indeed! i wouldn't have thought of it! kudos to you my friend :)

you used your words wonderfully! i knew you could do it!!! i'm proud of you!

though i believe you mentioned you wanted to try the challenge again? i'd be more than happy to give you another set of words, another subject and setting as well. though i'd like to add one more thing - i'd like to challenge you and see if you can write it solo without combining other challenges! i'll go a little easier on you if you want ^^ but i know you are capable of it! i believe in you!! what do you say? are you up for it? let me know ^^
if you do decide to reenter simply comment on my Alice's Challenge and i'll hand it out there :)

once again - i just wanted to say how wonderful this poem is. i'm impressed with it and the passion just strikes the reader so strongly! i could feel it!

keep up the great writing pratibha!!! ^^

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

That was so great! I am amazed that you took so many challenges and combined them. Thanks so much for including me in this! It was great!

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

OH MY GOODNESS,,,,,,,,,,,,
they have almost all said it: WOW!!!!!
fantastic Pratibha, this IS the best peice of writing!
unbelievable how you have expressed this.
truly I am speechless. you have outdone your self lady ^_^ give your self a pat ont he back ^_^
2200 thumbs up lol

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

This is the best one!!

Posted: Jul 23, 2008

I think this is wonderful Pratibha, your use of the theme words, thoughts all.
I agree with Urja also about "'people living in palaces' - not all of them use others for fulfilling their never ending ambitions; many of them rise up from nothing and acquire riches through sheer hard work and will power (I know many such people)." Pratibha I have known two types of prejudice in my life - one as a child from a poor family and (perhaps more so) as a successful and reasonably wealthy (compared to some)business people. We hurt no-one only worked hard and long (still do) so why should there be prejudice?
Sorry to get on my soap box here too!
I am actually supposed to be taking a "self inflicted" break from booksie but no-one seems to have read my news that tells people so!

Posted: Jul 23, 2008

Pratibha - This is obviously a subject you feel passionate about and you expressed that passion wonderfully. I thought you did a wonderful job with the words given to you for the challenge too. Hopefully your writers block is a thing of the past now? Great job!

Posted: Jul 23, 2008

I loved this!!!! That was very powerful, emotional and I can see you that you seem pretty passionate about this issue. I especially love the way you put in the Maroon 5 lyrics from 'She will be loved' - (one of my favourite songs ever written) I could actually imagine it being played in the background as the poem is being read. These soldiers risk everything to fight for their country and most don't even know what they are fighting for... the door should never be closed on them.

Keep up the great work, Pratibha.

Olola.

Posted: Jul 23, 2008

Prathiba...this is emotionally genius. I loved it.

Posted: Jul 23, 2008

Wow
This is really good
I loved it!!!

-Krystina (a.k.a Pocorox)

Posted: Jul 23, 2008

Very, very, very well done! You did an amazing job putting all of those challenges together!

Posted: Jul 23, 2008

This was so passionate, Pratibha! War is such a sensitive subject matter but I think you handled it well, and your poem was touching as well as true. And I loved the intensity of the pictures you chose to accompany your words! I thought it was so interesting and beautiful the way you combined such the harshness of war with the delicate image of a butterfly in a jewelry box. Wonderful as always!

Stephanee :)

Posted: Jul 23, 2008

hi, this is a wonderful poem, and amazing the way you used all the challenges and words you were given. The message you give is so profound. In the end no-one wins from wall, all loose, even those who think they gained something from it. Beautifully written

Posted: Jul 23, 2008

In some ways its easier to delcare war than to let a butterfly free. A butterfly is beautiful and as humans we are attracted to those beautiful things. It's human nature. How sad it is that we put a higher value on items of beautiful outside appearance than the lives of human beings.

War is terrible, it kills everything and no one gains from it. Even the victors experience loss, and it takes years to rebuild their economy as well as the defeated. It's stressful.

Beautifully written. So much insight into something most don't even think about.
~Kaori

Posted: Jul 24, 2008

oh my!
Pratibha!
I'm so impressed and proud of you....this is a sure-fire step up the writing ladder.

Yay you!

Posted: Jul 24, 2008

I think you have outdone yourself here Pratibha, you have managed to make a political statement that's both powerful and delicate. I have no idea how?! You bring the subject to reality using with pretty metaphors. I think I'm just very impressed right now. :) I love the butterfly metaphor, it worked really well. I'm not a very political person so I will just say well done, you did a grand job! ~ Nixie

Posted: Jul 24, 2008

You've written a little gem, Prathiba! A meannful read from beginning to end.....Jerry

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

You've written a little gem, Prathiba! A meannful read from beginning to end.....Jerry

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

This was sooo wonderful,beautiful,so touchy.And sad.
It was really inspiring.With a lesson in it.I love your poem.I cryed a bit,lol...Reallly so beautiful poem!
I was better mood when I read it.
And just keep it that way.Winners way.

:)

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

Wow! Simply superb! No words to express........................you have an amazing talent, you write on any topic given to you, with so much passion and this one specially is very, very powerful and apt topic to know more about, it is a very delicate issue, you have outdone yourself, honey! GREAT WORK! KEEP GOING! I LOVED IT!

The line which impressed me the most ( of course the whole of it) but the one in particular to think about always is " Can these power hungry monsters walk a mile in the shoes of the soldiers who................."

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

Wow....very nice poem..........Powerful words.......Nice tribute to soldiers...........

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

wow....this poem was definitely a step outside your regular stuff and i loved it...that one line "NOTHING AND NO ONE EXCEPT GOD...ALWAYS watching from sky with tearful and frail eyes..." really caught my heart....beautiful and meaningful stuff as always pratibha...I am soo sorry I haven't been around....i've been super busy and suffering writers block too...idk i just haven't found the inspiration to write some new poems....anyways i hope all is going well and keep writing as always :) love zia

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

I agree with the other comments Pratibha, your writer's block is out of the window. This is an amazing tribute to your beliefs on the subject. They are expressed so clearly and so eloquently. This is another great poem from one of my favorite writers! Take care :)

Regan

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

i like how the others stated how passionate this poem is, because it is indeed very inspirational.

wars happened in times where our parents, grandparents, great-grandparents and so on were not yet born. it's part of our lives, indicates we human had never been successful in running our countries without causing any pains. we are imperfect in any way and the fact wars happen should humble us. God allows these things to happen but not because He liked it. we ourselves chose this path, we rather rule the nations with our own wisdom rather than God's. there will be time when God takes all matters into His hands and there'll be no stopping Him. great poem as always Pratibha:) take care

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Preach it sista! THiS IS OUTSTANDING! War is just too much to bear, it destroys so many lives and I really can't fathom why war would be the way to solve problems.
I'm happy you've gotten over your writers block, and when a writters block ends you realise you have all this new found energy to put into your work. A new soure, a new light. I can see that throught your new peice of work.

Will I eva be disapointed by what you write?
I don't think so.
Your amazing pratibha and don't you forget it.

xxx

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Mom, this is a classic :)

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Gr8 work di...every bit of wat u've written is so very true...and wat writers block ru talkin abt??? Keep it goin... :-)

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Hey Princess! Sorry for the delay in reading your poem. If I knew how you'd stepped out of the box with this one I would have been chomping at the bit more than I already was. I think You did a great job doing what you do best which is putting your emotions to words. There are some really pretty phrases in there and this poem had alot to say as well. I think that you did a good job.

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Wow Pratibha. I have to agree with every single word of this. It's so true and full of honesty. I actually just read a book, All Quiet On the Western Front, and it helped me relate to your lines about the soldiers even better. It really is true when people say it's easier to fight then to try and keep peace isn't it. You should be very proud of this :) ~ Susan

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Wow, That was unbeliveable, very, very nicley done. I see the ...mile in someone's...yeah the soldiers shoes. I am sory for the belated comment I honestly thought that I had already commented on it. I was glad to get the chance to read it again. It was better the second time though. Thanks for sharing and my Mom is the same. Thank you for asking and I took your advice and brought two of my children to see her. It went pretty well. I will bring them again, maybe, just maybe she will respond. There is always hope. Thanks again, Take Care, Ted

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

Hello stranger.... My you've been prolific since I've been away.

I really love the blending of the themes, Frankenstein style, but more beautifuly composed. I feel I should slightly disagree with Urja and Anna as plenty of wars, death and destruction have been caused by people in those Palaces for reasons no more advanced than personal gain. Just because you work up from somewhere does not magically give you the wisdom to remember where you came from or use the power you have accrued wisely.

Still the mark of excellent work is the cause of debate so that in itself is something to be hugely proud of.

There are so many points I would like to make about this as it's so ecclectic, but I fear I would do others injustice by mentioning individual ones. So to sum up your legion of work, they blend brilliantly.

:-D

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Great Job.It Touches All Bases Of War.The Only True Winner In War Is Death.I Agree With That.You Done Really Good On This.Keep Up The Good Work.Excellent.

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Great!! No words..

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Pratibha, as always another great piece. Coming from you I don't expect anything less.. This poem was an eye opener and truly thought provoking. Thank you for all the passion you put into this work of art.

Posted: Aug 3, 2008

hm, never in my time here have i read something so....brilliant, excellent, fantastic....everything!
This is a wonderful piece!
~LeAnne

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Style has a way about it - comes across

Posted: Aug 14, 2008

You are a powerful writer. Great work! - D.Azir

Posted: Aug 16, 2008

Holy Sweet pea. This was amazing. I think you have great talent. Keep at this you'll make great progress


-DD

Posted: Aug 18, 2008

wow, this is so beautiful and brilliant! I loved it so much! Full of meaning, i love it! you're always so amazing! Keep writing! :)

Posted: Sep 8, 2008

I Love when you put challenges together because then it seems just right. Yet another amazing work! Tjis touched me deeply because I believe that war is the most terrible thing. Also, because my good friend wants to go to war and that devastates me. Why most so many lives be lost? May god bless all the soldiers in war, or not in war. Almost made me cry, very touching. Great job!

Posted: Sep 15, 2008