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The Remembrance

Book By: simonlove123
Young Adult


5 year old Rielle is not your average 5 year old. For the past 2 years, she's been recalling memories-of a blonde girl name Holi who was murdered at age 48, 5 years earlier. When these memories start happening, Rielle must find the courage to fight whatever has been, and what could. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: May 18, 2008    Reads: 61    Comments: 3    Likes: 3   


Why, do I feel this way? Who am I? I am not blonde, I am brunette. What are these...memories?

That's all 5 year old Rielle could think about for the past 2 years. Every night her dreams were haunted with memories of a young woman. This young woman was awekwardly familier, as if Rielle knew her. This blonde woman was just the begining of The Remembrance.

That night, Rielle woke up sweating heavily. Her heart was pumping. She could feel it in her head. This was unusual for a little 5 year old, but she laid back down. Slowly, she shut her eyes and soon drifted off to sleep. The young girl was asleep, but....she didn't seem so. She kept twitching, and every now and then her eyes would burst open- but her eyes were a foggy grey instead of her normal bright blue.

"Rie-Rie, wake up!" Her mother's shouting, an alarm, and the smell woke up the young girl. She quickly ran and grabbed her doll, and stumbled down the stairs. The smoke intensified, wrapping it's hands around Rielle's body. Coughing, the girl fell to the floor. She crawled as quickly as she could to the door, but stopped dead in her path. The fire had reached the door. A thought arose in the 5 year old's head, the same thought that saved the blonde woman from a fire. She grabbed the dolls head, and slammed it against the window along with her whole body. She was sent flying through the 1st floor window. The glass shattering and the grey grass was the last she saw.


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hi! simon. Reads interesting. Is the theme one of reincarnation. ;-)

Posted: May 25, 2008

This is a chapter book right? If it is, please update soon!

Posted: May 25, 2008

i like it though if this is about reincarnation bubbly i think that twist is pretty predictable.. if Holli died when Rie is already alive because 5 years ago doesnt really mean that when Holi died, Rie is not yet alive since she is 5 years old and it means shecould already be alive for some months at the most. so Rie could have just accidentally witnessed it when she was a baby and stucked in her memory and the fact that she sees it in her dreams when the brain is actually on hyper mode except the seat of logic which makes the ideas go wild and giving the room for that memory to be shown to her. I got the idea cause the reincarnation idea is so predictable and it looks like his a criminal trying to lead us detectives to the wrong trail.( just call me a sherlock holmes/ detective Conan fanatic) hehe.. and yeah if my idea is right and right now i'm pretty much destroying your element of surprise.. so sorry for that.. my bad..

Posted: May 27, 2008



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