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The strange way love works

By: OHSHCKaori
Young Adult


The strange way love enters ordinary lives and exits leaving something extraordinary.

Based on personal experience.

Let me know if YOU think I should continue. Yes I'm talking to you, the person who reads but never comments. I'm asking your opinion.

~Kaori View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 12, 2008    Reads: 44    Comments: 7    Likes: 4   


I'd never admit it, but he changed my life more than I ever imagined possible. When I first met him I found him rude, annoying, and overbearing. It was like he was always on his guard, hiding behind an abrasive outer shell most found repulsive. But as I got to know him, that's not what I saw. I saw a teenager, terrified of the unknown future, honest to a fault, and most of all, a boy wanting to prove to the world and himself that he mattered. To protect himself and the little sentimentality he had left, he put up that shell. One of his other friends described it as a sudden change, one day- nothing there, the next, a large concrete wall blocking everyone out.

He was not a small boy - in both stature and intellect- he towered over me. Many times he could have used the top of my head as an armrest, yet he never did. Despite the advantage in height, he was slight, not skinny, nor fat. When he walked, he carried himself with such dignity and pride, without - it seemed- the weight of anything on his shoulders. It was something very few his age posessed. His intellect was a rare find in a school setting, where most kids suffered through a day filled with torturous learning, leaving it for a joyous reunion with their video games at home.  He was one of the very few people my age, boys especially, that I could have an intellectual conversation or argument with and not come out with a definite win. I had to work to win an argument, something I rarely had to do.  Light sandy blonde hair was kept neat, slightly short, and he remained constantly clean shaven. The most striking feature he posessed was his eyes. Beautiful orbs of the darkest blue I'd ever seen in my life, though they would filter into the clearest blue grey when he was sad or hurt. Looking him in the eye felt like he was digging deep into the recesses of your soul, searching for any hint of lies. It was almost uncomfortable to maintain eye contact for long.


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Comments:

DEAR KAORI, I feel u should 'continue'......
This is an 'intense' story and conveys the emotions of a teenager successfully.....
And I need a promise, u would keep me updated about all ur new posts....okay?

Posted: Jun 12, 2008

Author Comment:

I promise!!! One hundred percent! I'll always keep you updated!! You're my number one commentor!!

Thanks I'm glad you think I should continue, and I will! (Once again this is about my old boyfriend.)

~Kaori

Very interesting beginning to something truly beautiful. Definitely continue on this journey with love. Will you have actual dialogue, or will you continue with the reader's thoughts???
I do enjoy your style of writing. It's not forced, it's not broken up. It's very smooth and flowing with such ease.

MA

Posted: Jun 12, 2008

Author Comment:

I probably won't have dialogue, but you never know. Maybe it'll happen. I'm glad you liked it. I'll continue it just for you.
~Kaori

Ohhh..continue! Please! This was really good (:

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Okay I will. Let me collect my thoughts about this boy and I will continue and I will let you know when I update it.
~Kaori

who's the boy? do you like him. ooooo. you like him. lol.

Lydia_xxxx

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

He's my old boyfriend. and I still like him to the point that it hurts to see him. A lot of my poems are about him, whether I meant to do that or not. The response to Hiralarious' challenge is also about him.
~Kaori

lol...

continue
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plzzz
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message me when ever more come out ok?
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plz

.
x
tc

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Okay, I will
~Kaori

hi! kaori. love is always hearty to read about. and if u love him intensely, then carry on. u need no one's prompt to write further. it'll always be a pleasure to read about love. carry on. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Okay I will continue, it could take a while to get my feelings out though.
~Kaori

hmmm. Interesting. Why did you guys break up? He's a little like Brandon. Brandon was a different person until we gave him a make over then he changed his whole personality.

Posted: Oct 9, 2008

Author Comment:

We broke up because he said that he could never care for anyone who hurt themselves. That it was selfish and that he never really cared for me in the first place.



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