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Cabin Key

Novel By: c00kies
Young Adult


Accidents can be horrifying. But can you imagine haveing to rebuild your life on something you don't realize happened? Beth can. Can't I should say. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 3, 2008    Reads: 96    Comments: 6    Likes: 0   


Chapter 1: Tomboy

I'm your typical tomboy. I hardly ever wear pink, I hate shopping, and my best friends are mainly guys. But, unlike most tomboys, I'm popular, extremely stylish and I have the greatest guy in the school on my leash. Life couldn't be any better.

Maybe a typical tomboy is popular, but most don't have boyfriends. My boyfriend, Jared Betch is the most amazing person ever. He's always there for me, he loves me and who wouldn't wanna date the best guy in school?! He's a bit mysterious though. I never really know what he's up to. For all I know, he could be recording rap with Elephants in Russia!

Another problem is that I'm obsessed with being perfect. No hairs, grades or dirty clothes out of place for me. Jared is the opposite. He still gets perfect grades, don't get me wrong, he's a genius, but his room looks like someone spilled the earth's garbage in there!

So this weekend when I went to Jared's house, I was in for a major surprose. I walked in, since Jared's family knew me enough and ran up the stairs to Jared's room. When I went in I stopped mid-walk and toppled over. I slowly peeled myself off the freshly vacuumed carpet and stared in awe, my jaw literally dropping to the floor.

"WHat did you do Jared?" I asked in pure shock and amazment.

"Well", Jared said, "I've spent the last two days cleaning out my room. What do you think?"

I still stood in the same spot with my jaw laying on the ground, unable to speak. I pushed my jaw closed only to find it fall down again. I calmly clamped my mouth and replyed,

"It's absolutely amazing, what inspired you to do this?"

"I've decided to take you hunting with me. I was looking for a camoflauge vest for you, and I couldn't find one. I only have like, a million. Then I realised that my room was a tornado zone!"

My mouth fell to the floor for the third or fourth time. He really did go hunting all those weekends. Good, no elephants! I quickly shut my mouth because it was rude. (Not that I really cared all that much).

"I... I'd love to go hunting with you. When are we leaving? What should I bring? How long are we staying?" I inquired, "Wait! Don't tell me yet, I need to get my planner."

This is temporarily done. Ideas from this novel are being used in Diary Of A Runaway Girl!


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Comments:

i thought this was going to be a story i havent read:(
love ya hon

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

sorry!! I came up w/ a name tho... what do u think of it? I will be putting on a new story once I have all whatever chapters of this one... :)

A little bit hard to understand. is the story just about her boyfriend and her? try to explain things a little more. But great job. Keep it up!!!!

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

it's about both of them. It's hard with just the first chapter. I will be putting more on soon! :)

Hey Hon,

Great begining, but like the last user said, it's a little hard to understand. Just let me know if you want help editing it!!! I'll be more than happy to!!

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! It's a little bard to get it now because I haven't had any time to add more. I will soon though! I promise that much to you! I'm not sure exactly when that is going to be, but hopefully soon. I'd love your help editing! I need to write this in word first because right now it is in a green and pink journal in my school locker! I'll show the journal to you asap! let me know when! I'll show you gladly. You will need a pencil or bright marker for corrections, because I wrote in pen!! :)
c00kies

Lots of promise. Please keep writing.

Posted: Apr 9, 2008

Author Comment:

I will. I left my book somewhere, so I can't continue until I have it.

what happen to the rest you already had written? you need to update it soon i want to know what happens next. it's an asome story so far.

Posted: May 16, 2008

Author Comment:

i decided to change it, so it's the same story line but I hadn't even gotten this far. thx!! :D

I will wait to comment until I read more. I know there is stuff missing but I am sure it will be resolved in your late chapters.

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Ok... here's the problem. I published like 8 chapters, but @ 1st it was a book, not a novel, so it like, doesn't publish anything else but the 1st chapter. See my dilema?! If you know any way to fix this, please let me know! Thanks for reading, and thanks for the comment.



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