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.::Blood On Our Hands::.

Novel By: darlingILY
Young Adult


Ghastly events and provocative behaviors devastates a starting a family. Internal betrayal, unwanted lust, and distrust. Who is to blame for all this mess? Who could to solve it? Or will it be solved? View table of contents...

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Submitted: Jun 13, 2008    Reads: 310    Comments: 10    Likes: 6   


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Author’s Note: This story was also posted in Mibba, Quizilla, and some other places I can’t remember, last summer. So if you recall reading something like this, no, I didn’t plagiarized this story. {But no one probably read it there since it’s uber shitteh..T_T} This WAS a fan-fiction, but not anymore.

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-Haley's Point of View-

I woke up as the sunlight escaping from the windows blinded me.
The clock on the nightstand displays 7:35am.
Too early.
I stirred.
Sleep.
Sleep.
Close your eyes.
Just sleep.
I lied in my bed for a while, wide-awake.
Several thoughts running through my head.
I sat up, wrapped my arms around my bent knee and cradled back and forth.
I thought.
Thought and though.
I buried my head on my arms and thought.
Why?
What happened?
Could I?
I got to my feet then went to the bathroom.
I stopped in front of the mirror and stared at my reflection.
My sullen cheeks.
I wasn't like this before.
Then I peeled off my clothes.
I turned the nozzle and the first shower of water was cold.
Then little by little, it became warm.
Then hot.
I could see the smoke forming around me.
The boiling water left stinging sensation on my skin.
Burning.
I raked my fingers through my wet hair and shook it.
I stood there for a while.
Thinking.
Water running down through me like rainfall.
Burning me.
Thinking, again and again.
And a scream filled my ears.
'Oh my god!'
A familiar voice said.
It's the same person who screamed.
Lana.
'What happ-'
The second voice said.
I recognized that weak and soft voice.
It was Mike's.
But he stopped.
Maybe he saw something..
But what?
As I listen, two more voices added into the conversation.
'What's the screaming all about?'
The third voice spoke as the floor cracked.
Jason.
He's my friend.
'Look..'
Lana said.
Evidence of terror and anguish were in her voice.
'Oh shit- I'll call 911!'
The fourth voice said.
Strong and caring voice.
Ray.
I turned the shower off and wrapped myself with a towel.
My jet black hair dripping wet when I stepped out.
Clumps of smoke were clouding the whole bathroom.
I gazed at the mirror, but it was clouded.
Foggy.
I opened the door silently and stepped outside, without a sound.
One.
Two.
Three.
What are three people doing in my room?
"What's happening?" I spoke.
But no one seemed to hear my voice.
"Hey guys, what's wrong?" I spoke again.
But this time I made it loud.
Still no response.
I looked at each of them.
Lana's clutching her mouth.
Terror in her face.
Mike's beside her.
Shocked.
Jason's standing inches away from them.
Glimpse of horror is playing in his face.
I tried it again.
"WHAT THE F*** IS WRONG?" I screamed.
But no.
No one heard it.
Are they playing a joke on me?
For Christ's sake, it's 7 in the morning.
Why can't they hear me?
Why are they horrified?
What-
I looked behind me and screamed.
A body.
Limp body that is lying on the bed.
Dead.
Sheets stained crimson.
Crimson.
Wait.
Blood?
The left arm of the corpse was flopped on the side of the bed.
A huge gash on the wrist.
A pool of blood underneath it.
What the.
I walked towards the body.
It's..
How?
Lying dead on the bed, with wrist tore open,
Is me.


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Comments:

I like it a lot

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Weeee. Thanks.
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good start. almost poetic. look forward to hearing what happened.

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. I'm posting the next chapter in a bit.

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Ooooooooo!! This is kinda cool. I like the idea. And the way you made it all dramatized. Very cool.
Can't wait to read more.

~!~Megan~!~

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

~_~ I didn't try to dramatized it...Just came out like that. Looooooool. Thanks, btw.

awesome!
and i agree with megan how it was all dramarized.
i think your are off to a greaatt start and can't wait til you update
(tell me when you update)
:]

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Yaaaay. Thanks.

Nice concept but a little cliche. But that's not alway a bad thing. I like it!

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for reading and the constructive criticism.

Very good so far..I like how the beginning caught my attention right off the bat. Keep up the good work! :)

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thaaaanks. I tried to make the first chapters interesting so my readers won't be bored. Thx againnnn

oooooh, it's v. interesting. let me know when you update!

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thaaaaaaaaaanks

oh gosh. very choppy and unstructured, but somehow that makes it better. it was amazing [:

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

xD Yeah, I wrote this when I was 12..so :d It was terrible when I opened it..Edited a bit and walahh, still crappy. :d

I loved it!! You are an AWSOME story teller!

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

There's something I don't hear everyday ++ that makes me sooooo happy. xD Thanks.

this is very interesting. it's almost like a poem. keep up the writing. i'd like to hear more!

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Glad you found it interesting. =]



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