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Falling For Hate

Novel By: sam316547
Young Adult


Ryain is having an unusally good day, from the minute she wakes up things go the way there ment to. She even passes her math finals.
On a roll her best friend Megan's mom invits her to join them at a local fair that she helped oragnize. Something goes horribly wrong......People start getting masacared by the fairs hosts.....Who seemed to be blood thristy vampires.
While running for there life Ryain and Megan run into the preson who set up the intire disater.
What happens when a vampire takes intrest in you?


:)I'll update the summary later, I hate spoiling....
PS I'm having trouble with the name if you have an idea plez comment. I'll give you creit. View table of contents...

Chapters:

1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23

Submitted: Aug 7, 2008    Reads: 1088    Comments: 47    Likes: 11   


CHAPTER ONE

It was another one of those days where nothing really seemed to make sense. For instance I didn’t even have nightmares last night, I couldn’t have slept more peacefully. My mother even made a real breakfast, normally we ate cold cereal and milk, and today she made bacon and eggs.
Somehow everything was going perfect, but of course it has to end sometime. Most likely now. Math was my worst subject, currently I was barely passing with a D. Today we were getting back our scores for this quarter’s finals. There was absolutely no way I passed. I'd most likely have to redo the tenth grade.
Mrs. Jades was on the row to my left, and quickly making her way towards me. I stole a glance towards my friend Megan. She always aced math, this time she had tried to help me study, I don’t think it worked out.
I smiled as she received her test back, she grinned. Her smile faded into a panicked mask of confusion. When she was sure Mrs. Jades wasn’t looking she held her test up towards my direction so I could see her score.
It was beyond shocking, she had a perfect score. Her smile returned quickly and she mouthed the words ’Got ya’. I shook my head; she loved making fun of me.
Mrs. Jades was only two seats away from me now. I crossed my fingers; God let it be at least a D-.
Mrs. Jades smiled warmly before lying the test face down on my desk. Oh what was that for? Did she enjoy it when her students failed?
I quickly flipped my test over, expecting the lowest grade possible.... Only to find the highest. I had gotten a perfect score just like Megan. It was impossible; there was absolutely no way this was right. My eyes searched frantically for the owner’s name.
There it was my name sketched in my own bubbly writing. Ryain Senoia, the first the only and the last.
Through my panic I hadn’t even heard the bell ring, it was Megan who made me aware that class was over.
“Oh, Ryain, it can’t be that bad. If you have to go to summer school, I’ll come with you. You know I love school and....” She stopped speaking immediately when she noticed the grade on top of the packet.
“Oh my god that’s...Great! See I told you that studding helps!”
This had to mean that the worlds going to end any minute, any second. My days never got this lucky.
“I almost forgot could you come to my house after school? My mom wanted to know if you could make it to the fair. She’s hosting one of the rides and can get us in free.”
Yep. The world was going to end today; there’s no doubt about it.
“Ahh, Let me check with my mom real fast. As soon as were off campus I’ll call and ask.”
“All right, let’s get out of here. Being in a math classroom longer than an hour will fry your brain.”
“Got it.” I carefully got out of my seat; I somehow always find a way to fall out of chairs. I didn’t need to push fate any further than it already was pushing it’s self.
I actually managed to not trip over my own combat boots.
“Umm. Meg. I don’t remember hearing about a fair is it last minute or something?”
“Honestly, they’ve been planning it for a week. I don’t know maybe you missed the ads or something. Mom’s been really excited; she hardly ever sits anymore!”
We were by the gate now, so I fished for my cell phone in my over-sized coat pockets. I always bought my jackets from the men’s section; they were oddly warmer then the women’s jackets. Besides the design was way cooler. It had the band ’Escape the fate’ written across it’s front in blood red letters, it looked awesome against the black background.
“Hello?” Her voice was muffled like she had just woken up.
“Hi mom! Do think it’ll be okay if I hang out at Megan’s house for a little while? Her mom wants to take us to the fair?”
“What fair?” She yawned.
“I dunno, her mom helped plan it and she’s hosting so...”
“All right, just call to check in every hour or so.”
“Mm k mom. See you later tonight mom. Bye!” I flipped the phone shut and throw it back in my pocket.
Thankfully Megan’s house was much closer to the school than mine. We were there in less than 10 minutes.
Her house was nice, it was a cute baby blue color and a white pick-it fence surrounded it. They even had a little garden off to it side. I swear they grow every vegetable known to man. In front there was a large white oak porch that even had a pretty white swing. It reminded me of an old 50’s movie, just how peaceful it looked. I swear if I see a humming bird fly by I will violently vomit. I’m the type of person who’d rather die than wear pink. It was hard just to look at Megan’s house let alone be around it.
Weird enough, it felt like the house was radiating love and I swear to god it smelt like Mrs. Drean was baking sugar cookies.
“It’s all right; it’s not that bad. We won’t be here that long. The fair starts in less than an hour.” I sighed, might as well get it over with after the fair I be able to always spend the night in my closet. (It’s much easier than walking to hot topic.) I followed her up to the house, before Megan could even reach for her key the door opened.
“Why, hello girls! I was just on my way to pick you guys up!” Mrs. Drean was smiling way too wide. Sometimes the lady really got under my skin; well I guess even fate has its prices.
In exchange for the best day I’ve had in a while, I have to spend the remainder of the day with the lady that makes Mrs. Claus look like an evil vampire. I had to hold my laughter at the thought of Mrs. Claus hunting the elves because they didn’t finish their work in time for Christmas.
“Well, I suppose there’s no point to go in, might as well head right to the fair. You’ve gotten permission right, Ryain?” Behind her shinning words there was a threat. The woman really needed help.
“Of course I called my mom before we left school.”
“All right, let’s go then.” We walked quietly to her car; it was one of those new hybrids that suppose to be really good on gas. It was a really Barbie pink. Yuck, poor car, poor me. I’d defiantly need to sleep in my closet; there was no getting around it. Megan and I gladly took the back seats. It was shocking, I didn’t know seats get that pink. It’s the Barbie-mobile.
“I’m sorry girls, I won’t be able to stay with you the whole night, and I’ll be really busy.”
Yes! Fate is so on my side to day, nothing can possibly bring down now.
Apparently the fair was set up near the board walk where the circus use to be. About three years ago something bad happen to the audience, it was one of the worse massacres in California's history. I’m not really sure of the details but of what I have heard, the clean up wasn’t easy. It’s weird how hard it is to find information on the subject, it’s almost like it never happened. Half of me wants to believe that it’s just a story to scare the younger kids.....But my other half knows that it’s not.
“Is that really all that safe mom? I’ve heard...” Megan’s mom cut her off mid-sentence.
“Yes I know Megan about those silly little rumors. And that’s simply what they are. Rumors, no need for alarm.” Both Megan and I sighed, it was a lost battle. The drive was longer than I would liked it to be but that’s just how things go. The fair’s set up was defiantly original. I couldn’t even tell that it use to be home to a circus. There were several rides and games, like any other fair. At least I’d have a little fun, I’ve been over depressed lately and a little adrenaline that only a roller coaster can give you would be more than enough to cheer me up. The fair it’s self was surrounded by a giant chain mill fence, I guess to keep out the people who didn’t pay.
“Megan, Ryain? We’ll meet up later at the house of mirrors, it’s the ride I’ll be hosting. if there’s anything you need let me know, all right?” She quickly handed us each a neon orange bracelet that read Redwood county fair.
“These will be your passes, their good for all the rides. Don’t loose them, there special, only hosts can get them.”
“Thanks Mrs. Drean.”
“Thank you mom.” As soon as Megan’s mom was gone I turned to Megan.
“So what’s our first stop?”
“Oh I don’t know something fast.” She grinned at me, obviously we were both on the same page.
“Roller coaster.” We chimed in union.
It wasn’t hard to find the largest roller coaster because it also was the largest ride. It was an understatement to call it huge.
“Are you sure we should ride the biggest first? My mother told me that it took them three days alone to build the ramp, all together a whole week to complete that one!”
“Yes I’m sure, Megan you’ve got to loosen up a bit.”
“All right.....But if we die.....” I couldn’t help but laugh at her.
It really must be Armageddon, there was a very short line for this ride. (Or maybe everyone else is just too chicken to rise a roller coaster.) There were only five people in front of us, what a surprise they were all guys.
I rolled my eyes, they’d probably all scream like babies. I’d have to laugh at that, only because they all look like there tough and macho men. Most likely trying to impress there girlfriends.
The host was super attractive in a weird way I wanted to huge him, it’s just something was pulling me towards him. He smiled warmly at Megan and i as we showed him our wrists.
“Are you guys a set?”
“We do everything together, BFF’s for life.” Megan answered as I looked dumbfounded at his facial features. He had deep green eyes and the pale blonde hair that was sort of spiked. As are most guys he was at least 6ft tall.
The ride it’s self was an indescribable rush. as expected the guys were screaming at the top of there lungs. I was still laughing when I got out of the seat.
“Something amusing miss?” The host asked as I stumbled behind Meagan (who looked like she was going to heave.)
“Oh just everyone who was screaming.” He rolled his eyes and mumbled under his breath something like ‘adrenaline junkie’. I snickered, who cares?
Iwould have came up with a smart remark but Megan’s gagging distracted me. As she blew the garbage can apart I held her corn silk hair out of the way. She had really pretty hair, for a brief second I wondered how she kept it so soft. It wasn’t easy to keep her hair out of the way, she was taller than me. I was only 5’7, she was at least 5’9. I remember when we were younger in grade school. We were always the tallest girls in all of our classes.
It’s too bad she’s always been the prettier one. Her green eyes put my blue ones to shame and my hair’s always been to dark. It really didn’t bother me though, I'd rather be invisible than be noticed by the pigs at our school. Megan has dated almost all of them, and I know some dirt that always has held me back from dating. As I’ve said pigs.
“Thanks Ryain. Can we avoid the fast rides my stomach’s had enough, how about the carousal?”
“Yeah okay.” I wasn’t practically found of that ride but what would it hurt?
The next few hours were nice, but of course I got to laugh at more guys. Though it was getting annoying how all the hosts were drop dead gorgeous but rude as hell. It was odd, they all somehow looked familiar like they were related, but at the same time they were all very different. The only real thing they all had was the same lame host’s vests that were gold and red. It’s strange, I don’t remember seeing Mrs. Drean wearing one.
We were on our way to the mirror house when I heard it. An ear-piercing scream. It sounded like someone was being ripped apart. Soon after the first another scream ripped through the air and right in front of us, from the top of a roller coaster a girl came hurtling down to the ground. I could hear her bones crunch. I gasped in horror, what was happening?
I couldn’t process much more than that, because the fair suddenly became a pit of panicking people running in sorts of directions. At first I didn’t understand why, not until a woman was taken down in front of me. One of the host was ripping her apart.....at the neck. He didn’t eat the flesh...He was drinking her blood. Megan screamed, and pulled me by the wrist in the opposite direction. Was he a.....Vampire?
“Where should we go!?” Megan screamed. I shook of my shock and pulled myself together.
“The gate we have to get out of here!” She froze.
“What about my mom?” Something in the back of my head told me she would be fine for reasons unspeakable. Did she have anything to do with this? Megan said that she helped plan this.
“Um. Meg. we can’t waste time, she’ll be fine. She’s much better off than we are!”
“All right I hope she’s okay.” I’m sure she’s much better than okay....


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*speechles*

one word...
WOAH!!!

this is so awesome and amazing and brilliant and excellent and original!!!
*gasps for breath*

omg i love this line!--->"I’m the type of person who’d rather die than wear pink."
loool im like that too hahaha XD

i love the way you write its addictive, and i absolutely love the part where the massacre begins, its just soo.....GREAT!!

keep me posted when when put up new chapters ....i must reeeaadd!!
:D:D:D
love it!
[[hope you dont get bored reading all this hehe]]
take care xxx

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Nope not bord. THNX much for your comment. :) :) :)!!!!!
*SMILE SO WIDE IT TOUCHES MY EARS.* I will keep you updated.

Really good.I enjoyed this story.Just when it gets interesting with the action it ends.I was really getting into it.Great job.

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) Thank you very much. another chapter will be up really soon. :)

Its great, but the only little thing I would change is use "Justify" instead of "Center" when deciding how lines will align.

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

HUH? Ok..... Will do. THNX

hmmm. interesting. i like all the action. maybe, instead of, 'was he a vampire?'(which seems a little abrupt--most people wouldn't guess that right away) something like, 'oh my god, what is he doing?' but, i don't know...maybe it's part of the character or part of the plot for her to guess right away or something...but other than that and a few typos, good job! :)

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) THNX. I'm always fighting with the typos. I'll just try harder. LOL

xD I LIKED IT A LOT! keep working on it though! BUT I DO AGREE WITH CATHIRINE! u can put a little suspense and make the reader want more therefore making ur novel more interesting and popular! xD i learned these tecniques!

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) XD Hehe I know. Frist chapters are always the hardest though, as I've said the second is going to be much better.....I have HUGE plans. *Rubbs hands together* Whahhahah!
THNX for your comment.

WOAH AWESOME!!! UPDATE IT AND LET ME KNOW!! woahh i love blood in stories =D The vampire attack just like came outta nowhere but awesome!!!!

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) THNX for your comment I will let you know when I update. :)

LOL im quoting XxDeathXxKissxX couldn't have put it better myself

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) LOL.

a very good start gorgeous , i'll be wearing garlic around my neck tonight . i see you are being offered a few writing tips in the comments section , all pretty good and well meaning advice i'm sure . the only advice i will give is , be true to you .if you believe it , we will too.
terry

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) THNX very much.
Will do.

It's really good. Keep writing. I'm hooked.

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) I will. THNX.

That was great. I loved the vampire foreshadowing, but I would have to agree with your other commenters by saying not to expose that they're vampires right away. Put a little more suspense into it!! Other than that, great job!!

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

THNX. It's just that the point is she's really smart, catches on fast. it's part of her character. I'll tone it down a bit. THNX for your comment. :)

the massacre was random! and took me by surprise but in the beginning you can sense something was going to happen at the fair. keep me updated perty please!

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) Will do. I love surprises.. HEhe. THNX for your comment.

AHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!! iiiiiiiiiii love it:] update soon plez

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:)

Wow! Keep me updated on the story!

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) Will do. I'm glad you like it.
THNX for your comment. :)

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!!!!!!!!!!!!! +Hecate+

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) i will......RIGHT NOW. hehe. i'm going to have photos.
THNX for your comment.

OH MY GOD! YOU HAVE TO UPDATE! This is really good. Great story! Please Update soon!!!!!!!

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

I will THNX :)

YAY!

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

!!!!!!YAY!

Great story. Well written. I am hooked :-)

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

YAY! I'm glad you like it.
THNX for comment. :)

I like the direction you are taking the story. It's different and original. The only this I didn't really like was the rush into the action. While this is direct and should be introduced quickly, that was a bit quick for me. However, the suspense is a killer! More please! XD

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

:) More is on the way...*Typing* Chp.3 will probley be up tomorrow. :)
THNX for your comment.

"What happens when a vampire takes interest in You?"

Clever! {I am taking interst in your novel} I have thoroughly enjoyed it so far... now going to see the next chapter.

Feeling lucky!

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

:) THNX. I'm glad you like it! I'm always happy to know someone is taking intrest in my writing. :)

good story line, and i know how bad maths can be :( , but there is a way, like how i sit next to the draws where the answer sheets are kept!

WWWWWWOOOOOOOOOOOOOPPPPPPAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

:) Haha. LOL. THNX

This is a great begining to a great story I'm gonna move to Chapter 2 and Comment there.

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

:)

Ok Ok comment time again. Hi again by the way.
First I need to warn you that the first person writing match is my pet hate. Writers struggle to personalize the piece.

Today your writing style is a little odd to me. Your sentences are very modular. They don't really flow from theme to theme. Instead you have these idea jumps with commas instead of other forms of conjunction.
This kind of compartment writing put me off a bit since everytime I was getting decently sucked into the writing bang ',' new idea. Try and avoid stop startish writing.
A prime example is:
'Through my panic I hadn’t even heard the bell ring, it was Megan who made me aware that class was over.'
Look at that comma of doom. It completely stunts your current sentence and plows on to the new idea of Megan coming over. Personally I would have rearranged this a little to something like:
'Megan had to share the fact that the class was over by tapping me on the shoulder since my little panic had made me blank out.'
Another:
'I rolled my eyes, they’d probably all scream like babies.'
I would do this:
'I rolled my since they'd ...'
This one is a slighter change but I am sure you see the difference.
NOTE: THIS IS HOW I WOULD PUT IT. IT IS NO MY REPRESENTATION OF HOW IT SHOULD BE.

I would also suggest you watch for those little quirks that youngsters use when speaking and avoid them.
For instance:
'Somehow everything was going perfect,' you mean perfectly. This kind of thing is common as people write the way they speak instead of full blown good old fashioned english.
If you want to use this kind of language you need to personalize the whole thing. Instead of just first person writing whip out the whole deal and make the narrator into the story teller with every aspect and facet of thier personality.

Which brings me to my next issue. This piece is very well general. The writing has little uniqueness. There are alot of phrases and sentences that are commonplace.
Make no mistakes I don't mean to demean your writing but its not YOU. Nothing that sets this piece out.
Remember that great writers are not made only by plots. Its how they put it.

This is a narrative. So your narrator needs to be the one who we understand and relate to. His/her personality should show in your words. Triats and cynicsms should be explosed in the way they tell the reader story.
Keep that in mind.

Plot wise:
Good start. The standard oddly good day thing is old but I can live with it. All in all good work.

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

:) THANK YOU SOOOOO MUCH. I really do appracate your help. ^^ I have always had the problem of writing like I speak. I was hoping no one noticed, thanks for pointing that out.
Your advice is welcome, I will try my hardest to fix my mistakes and learn from them.
Thanks always.

wow good job im definatly hooked!
wouldnt mind if you read my stuff either

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Ok. I will. THNX for your Comment. ^^ :)

kaylalebreton
(not registered user)

oh oh oh !
is her mother a vampire? or is she working with them?

Posted: Aug 9, 2008

Author Comment:

:) Not a vampire.....
Oh....I wish I could tell you but not yet. i plan to tell everyone in chp.4 sorry.
THNX for your comment though. :)

Great idea's, you can see where you want to go with the whole thing although I'd try to slow it down. When the first scream cut's to be followed so quickly by others, there seems to be an instanious panic by all, let the panic grow and spread as the people run into onlookers and build them like the crest of a wave all heading for the door.

The piece 'frome the top of the rollercoaster' you missed out on a great way to assasinate your nightmare colour, the body could have been torn apart, the head seperated, as the torso and legs hit the ground, the head bounced into a cotton candy machine, to be mixed in, as the paddles spin, squeezing the blood from the head, spreading throughout the candy, it's colour becoming darker, richer, red. The death of pink.'

It's very hard at times to catch yourself running away with a tale, you just have to try and remember that sometimes, the tale isn't for you. It's a trap I very often fall into and then have to spend hours trying to find new explanations for the scene i'm trying to portray. It's an awful fact, beyond ourself we have to generalise our idea's, that where we start to learn. I am.

Will keep it in the reading list and check out how you will no doubt find a suitable end for the barbie mobile!

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

HA! I plan to burn it to the ground....No worries though. I'm not going too fast the fair isn't the set for the story it's just helping the plot. No worries the real story's about to begin. The scene you described is pretty cool, I like the last part 'The death of pink' Ha! Nice one...
THNX for your comment. :)

It would help if i could splell instantanious!! you see what happens when you rush!!

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

HA! I like that word! I wasn't paying attention. Your luckly i'm not spelling things backwards. LOL. :)

This is amazing! I would love to read more, but I have to go... :-(
I will read the rest later, I PROMISE!
LOL
♥,
JFM98

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

:) I'm glad you like it. :) THNX for reading...

of course i am loving it i will comment on every page just 4 u lol

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

:) THNX. LOL.

This was an enjoyable read! Please notify me when there is more. My only fear is that it seems a little rushed. Take your time, you have all the time in the world. Other than that very good.

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

HA! I wish people would stop saying it's rushed! This is only a sliver of the storyline.....
NO WORRIES.
THNX and I will.

wow this is really good and original i would go read the other chapters but i'm so tired from a road trip, anyways i like it so far this is a really good start awesome work!!! XD
the one suggestion i do have is to check your spelling, because that was the one thing that was distracting me, but other than that this was enjoyable and quite entertaining!!

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

THNX! so much. I know I have horrible spelling I trying though. It's alright I understand, last summer I took a trip across country and I was sooo tired when I got home. I slept for like two days straight. :) Happy rest.

I think Anne Rice might have some competition. I enjoyed it.And keep the"that came outta left field" thoughts coming.

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

:) OK. THNX.

I like it =]

Posted: Aug 13, 2008

Author Comment:

:) I'm glad you do. THNX for checking it out.

sick!!!!

Posted: Aug 21, 2008

Author Comment:

LIAR!!!!!!!!!

I just started reading it and it looks pretty awesome so far...I like how you actually made vampires kill people instead of having a girl run off with a guy she barely knows to find out he's a vamp, then she'll have special vamp powers too, etc. I'm home alone and it's night now so I guess I shouldn't read this story any farther, until my parents come home :)

Posted: Sep 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha....That's cool. i'm glad you like. I really hate the stories that try to mask the truth about vampires. Just as Ann Rice intended. I don't belive in the whole oh I'm a good vampire I only hunt animals.....It bugs the crap out of me!
LOL. Look now I'm ranting.....*Shakes head and rolls eyes.*
THNX again. :)

wow! wonderful story!! i like it a lot!! and im soooo going to read it all =D i bet its something cool =D

Posted: Sep 5, 2008

Author Comment:

so I've been told....
:) thnx

Awsome story!!
Sorry it took me so long to get back to you.. but i can promise ill continue reading and commenting your work

Cami

Posted: Sep 8, 2008

Author Comment:

:) Thanks! No worries, you never have to read anything I ask you too! Though I am really happy you like it!

wow this is just wow its really good so far adn srry it took me sooooo long to get back 2 u

Posted: Sep 21, 2008

Author Comment:

oh that's ok. I don't mind. I'm glad you like it though. You don't ever have to read anything I ask you to....No chains i swear! :)

I LOVED IT!!!! You know i am very picky about grammar and punctuation stuff. It seemed to me like it had just perfect punctuation. There were one or two typos in it but they were really minor. It was written so beautifully and perfectly. Ahh... Have you used micrsoft word? :P

Posted: Sep 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Yep. I always use microsoft word....
Thank you I'm glad you like it. Falling For Hate was my second novel so....The grammar gets better. I love ppl who give advice here on Bookise they can do wonders to one's skills... :P

wow...this is really quite interesting, and unique (in a good way)...it's nice to have something that's not exactly like every other story out there. Great start :)

Posted: Oct 2, 2008

Author Comment:

:) thank you!

Hi, I am new around here and yours is the first novel I have started reading. It is a very good piece of fiction with a very good pace. In the beginning, it started like just another day but I couldn't see the connection between this being Ryain's best day in life and the vampires entering the scene at the end of the chapter. Maybe, its something for us (readers) to look out for in the forthcoming instalments. The only time I looked away from my screen was when I saw the comments starting.

Don't go by others telling you that the story is very fastpaced, I, for one, liked the pace very much. I wouldn't bargain the pace of this story for anything.

Posted: Oct 21, 2008

Author Comment:

THANK YOU! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'm honored that you chose to read my novel frist! It does become a little clearer on the connection later on, I just seem to struggle a bit with first chapters...
And thanks for not minding the pace, I just didn't want to waste too much time with the background layout in the very first chapter, the plot's much too big. :)
THANK YOU.

oh my gosh...i really really like it...i like how you got straight to the point and plot of the story instead of taking a long time for th estory to actually get interesting.....well i really like it!

Posted: Oct 26, 2008

Author Comment:

:)!!! THNX so much! I hate having to read a ton before the actual story. LOL. :)

Are you still having trouble with names, the best way to find unique ones is to type "baby names" into your search engine, then go to the sites that show up. ;>.D good luck.
Sidhe

Posted: Oct 27, 2008

Author Comment:

:) no I'm good. THNX though! :)

Omg, I just read the summary and I'm alreayd frekaing out lol! This is SWEET! I'll have to check it out later kay? =P Well, if you wanna know how i found you thow I saw ur comment on Fangs profile. Lol, i'm not being nosy or nothing but it caught my interest...og course anything that has to do with that does anyway.
Yeah, I'm christian and fangs is my friend, I belive gay, bis and les are equal, haha I luv em! I relaly respect the struggle they face every day ;) but I also respect you. Strange maybe but its true. You say you belive in a god (or the God I'm not sure) you just don't worhip like the others, that (in my eyes) means your genuine. Anyone who just goes with the flow in beliving this or that has no belief at all. Hope we can talk more ;) bye ill try and check up on this story...well...actually ill read it now...count this as my commment, caudse I know its gonna be wicked!

Posted: Oct 27, 2008

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You're awesome. I like you already. I defanily wanna be ur friend. LOL. I believe in God. I think he's pretty awesome, Thanks for respecting me and I think (Even though I don't know you yet, I feel like I do) that you're really nice. :) And THNX for reading my story. I'll have to check out some of yours! :)

hi! sam. so, ryian and megan r good friends and ryian gets good grades much against her expectations. hmm. miracles do happen. and finally the vampires strike deadly at the fair. so, where's her mom. a thriller, actually. and a good start. lol. ;-)

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Bubbly. Yeah....I guess the start is sort of like a thriller. lol.

good story i like it it was thrillingg

Posted: Nov 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. :)

Kiara
(not registered user)

ahaha
your so funny! i love it
i will patiently await updates!

Posted: Nov 22, 2008

Author Comment:

ha ha. Thank you! :)

Um. i just wanted to thank everyone for the awesome comments and stuff. I also wanted to let everyone no, that i'm in the process of posting edited chapters of what i have so far....I have the first three chapters re-posted. So before you chew me out for spelling and grammar, I have improved a ton and you can now compare. lol. Thank you.

Posted: Nov 22, 2008



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