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Kidnapped...

Novel By: XxEmoHeartxX
Young Adult


This is a story about a girl named Kandi who has found true love, and then she loses it all when she is kidnapped and forced to be a pleasure slave to a man she has never met. View table of contents...

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Submitted: Jul 13, 2008    Reads: 926    Comments: 43    Likes: 1   


"Are you going to be a good girl or so I have to restrain you?" Master asked in a cocky voice as he started to undress.

I looked away and out of fear of getting a punishment I said, "I'll be good..." I felt empty as I said it. I felt like my spirit had been taken from me. He smiled at me and pulled me into a kiss.

The urge to fight back was overwhelming, but the fear of punishment was stronger. So, I sat there with my eyes squeezed shut trying to hold back the tears as he touched me.

I felt him push my naked body back on the bed, and his hot breath on my beck. I felt him force my legs open, and that's when the tears started to escape my eyes.

Then I heard it. The normally frightening sound was musicto my ears. I heard the gun shot and then I felt the weight of Master's dead body ontop of me. I layed underneath him crying. I was too afraid to look to see who the shooter was. I heard voices, but they sounded so distant and I couldn't make out what they were saying. I felt Master's body being lifted off of me. I felt myself being picked up bridal style and carried out of the room.

I felt some one dressing me, and then some one hugging me. I was still too afraid to open my eyes.

"I'm sorry I didn't tickle torture him to death," I heard a familiar voice whisper into my ear. My eyes shot open and I looked up to see Jake. He looked down at me with a smile on his face. I smiled back at him and hugged him tightly.

"How?" I said through my tears of joy.

"Well...the guy at the hotel is very open for sharing information when he has a gun to his head," Jake said with a smile on his face.

I giggled a little bit and then asked, "How did you get my first Master to tell you where I was?"

"Tickle torture!" he said jokingly and then gave me a wink.

"Seriously Jake how did you manage it?" I asked as I tried to put a serious face on.

"I don't know...people are just very open when they have a gun to their head," he said as he chuckled a little.

As we walked out of Rafiel's house my only thought was that I was finally free!

THE END


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Comments:

Ahh, man it's over?!

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Author Comment:

it's over

dat was kinda anticlimactic but it was a great story n i liked it alot.

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

that is litterly how it ended?? i thought you where going to hold it hostage and then when your friend got ten good comments you where going to give us a long ch?? i love it though plez say there is a second one.

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Author Comment:

My friend got more than 10 comments and instead of a long chapter i decided it was a good point to end it

dannyrules not signed in
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hey great ending i'm so glad she made it through keep writing ok aso can u read my story delusional plz!

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

WOW. This is the first story I just read, and I think It is amazing. Will you give me an idea to write about? I don't know what to start, and I want someone to tell me what they want to read.

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Hopefully Jake takes her to get those tatoos removed first thing. I like this ending:)

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

dis was unexpected ..
nd uber cute!!..
xlolx..

jus soo sad it's over..
=[..

nehoo..as per our wedding..
since mii lyf has become very boring l8ly..
im goin 2 write mii own vows 2 yooh.. [& anna of course]... nd post dem up as soon as possible..
=D..

ps~.. read my dang storii torii...
[lol it rhymes!]..
... dnt make me come ova der!!..
xlolx..
xox

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Ooo can't wait to read the vows! :D

IT IS OVER?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

DON'T, DON'T LET IT GO, IT'S NOT THE EEEEEEEENNNNND
WHOOOHHH GIRL. YOU. KNOW. IT'S NOT SO BAD IT cAn'T BE THE EEEEEND WHOOOH YOU KNOW IT'S NOT THE END
WHAT WILL I REEEEEEEAAAD NOW

One of my fav. songs on Simple Plan's new-ish album (I hate that ppl are saying that It's brand new 'cause it came out like two months ago)..... anyway I thought that this song kind of applied to how i feel about this being OVER :(

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Grr...don't throw simple plan songs at me because i haven't gotten the chance to listen to their newest album yet!!!

wow YAY she is free ..the end was really good ...ahhh jake saved her ..... ya i agree with Nita Eads
i hope she gets those tatoos off ...FAST ...well i really enjoyed reading this it was really good ..all of it.

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

I WAS EXPECTING A LONG CHAPTER!!! I LOVED THE NOVEL, BUT I'M SAD IT'S OVER!! ON THE BRIGHT SIDE, YOU CAN NOW WORK ON HE IS JUST TOO STRONG AND BLUE TEARS , PURPLE BRUISES!!!!! :D

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol AND I can add a start a new novel...3 is a good number ;)

==" very good while it lasted... r u goin 2 have another story jus like tis?!

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

such a great story!!!

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

greattttttt but sad its over but greaaaatt

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

i luv the hole thing awesome man.
and i like your friends story tooo.
tillz

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

guess me!!!
(not registered user)

ending wasnt too exciting......could have been better!!!!

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Um...ok, thanks for the constructive critism

the-n's story reader
(not registered user)

**Jumps up and down** thank you thank you for the happy ending Tori your the best yay *gives you a hug still jumping around**

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

ohh... YAY!! I knew it was Jake... YAY!!!! =]

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

FFFFFFFFFFFFFFIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNAAALLLY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! how long did it take for him to notice she was gone cause u wrote about 2 whole days until now u take many peaples ideas and finaly kill one of her masters all im asking is was that so hard? and also thak uuuuuuuuuuuu sooooooo much for bringing jake back

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

hmm 8/10 for a short story. Still think you could have added more detail to it and made it richer. But still not bad.

Keep Writing

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for reading. This is the unedited version, so if I end up getting it published which i hope to do then it will have more detail and she won't be so submissive as she was.

this was an awsome story! thanks for writing it!
~Lemon

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

omg. you are an awesome writer if you ever write that book again you could get it published!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!YOUR AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Well it was okay, but it needs more description to some things. Like when she was first kidnapped and other things, it just reads very amateurish. No Offense! The storyline is good but like I said, more description.

Posted: Jul 17, 2008

Author Comment:

No offense taken

love it ur story was great and i'm glad jake saved her it was a great story and always will be love ur other stories

Posted: Jul 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much! :D

huh!?

its over????????????????????????????


well i guess author's the god here?!

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Um...yeah? Sorta...IDK

its all over yeah
i realy liked reading this and only now have put a comment about the story it was great :)

Posted: Jul 21, 2008

...
that's it???
they just walk out???
jake killed someone and the others are like..."well now that there's a dead body, and a big mess to clean up, oh yeah, and that boy with a gun did something illegal...i guess i'll just leave and live a normal life now..." XD
i loved the ending...i'm sorry to say it, but i laughed. it was a good ending, and i liked its abruptness XD
great job

Posted: Jul 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha yes that's exactly what they did cause everybody hated the fucker

a the-n reader
(not registered user)

What...the..heck?!?!?!?!?! ha ha

I would have loved to have read more but I enjoyed it anyways! It was a great story! X]

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

YAY A NICE ENDING! *is happy* is there a sequel? *hugs you*

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

nope

otay

Posted: Aug 2, 2008

Author Comment:

I fergot what I said

sad story happy ending!!! LOVE IT!

how you finish stories i will never know...i can't seem to lol

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha just post another chapter to that one novel and i'll be happy

Awww!! I can't believe it's already over. I knew Jake was gonna save the day!!! I still can't believe that's the end!!!

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha sowy

WOW great story =)
now i cant wait to read more

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha thanks

I shall attempt to add another chapter...

Posted: Aug 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Yay!

OMG THAT WAS THE BEST BOOK EVER. my friend Paige told me about this story adn said it was sad but bc i like sad books i read it anyway. wow this was the best i can't believe it. i got a huge smile on my face when Jake aid the tickle torture thing after killing the new 'Master' this was so good.


~Abby B.

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Hehe thanksies

Alexia
(not registered user)

Just a kind of random question--how come you write like .....abuse stories??? I like them though, i just find it different 'cause most authors find it depressing to write about abuse....

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

I write about stuff that most authors don't dare to write about. I'm different like that

OMG!!!! She's finally free!! That makes me very happy, I thought this master was going to be worse and get the best of her like the other dude did. I'm glad he dies!!! YAY!!!! Great ending by the way!

Posted: Sep 4, 2008

AHHHH! *Runs screaming*
Just kidding. I liked it! The end seemed a little abrupt, but that's ok. the rest of it was absolutely AMAZING!

Posted: Sep 10, 2008

Author Comment:

I always seem to have trouble with abrupt endings...
Hmmm...

Ah well Haha

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO it CANT be over! I was so waiting for like 100000000 more chapters! Good sotry though

Posted: Sep 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha thank you

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO WHAT HAPPEN TO ARE EXTRA LONG CHAPTER MAKE A 2ND ONE AND KEEP YOUR PROMISE HER JAKE TURBES STRAIGHT THEY HAVE A KID AND SHE GET KIDNAPPED BY THE GUY OR A NEW GUY I DONT CARE JUST MAKE A NEW ONE

Posted: Sep 25, 2008

that was good I hope you continue writing.

That really helped see the other side of the world.

i liked it alot.....:)

Posted: Oct 21, 2008

Vampire Lover
(not registered user)

That was crap. (No offense) I liked the beginning and the middle but, its nothing like a bad ending to ruin a story.

Posted: Nov 7, 2008

Ahh, it was a great ending, but I'm REALLY REALLY and thrice times REALLY sad that it's over.....aw, well, that's life for ya.....
HopeXP

Posted: Dec 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Hehe, well a sequel is in this novel's future



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