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The Pain He Caused

Novel By: XxEmoHeartxX
Young Adult


When Kat is kidnapped and sold as a sex slave she thinks things can't get any worse, but when she meets he new Master she is proven wrong. View table of contents...

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Submitted: Sep 11, 2008    Reads: 2742    Comments: 29    Likes: 11   


It had been a year since the day I was told my boyfriend had died in a plane crash. Even though it had been an internet relatioship, and I had never actually met him in person, I loved him more than anybody else. His name was Josh, and my heart belonged to him.

Since then I had been concentrating on my school work. I was 18 years old and a week away from graduating highschool, top of my class. I never went to parties, or anything like that. I had always been the good girl, never one to cause trouble. Josh was the only man in the world that had ever thought I was pretty. He had been my only boyfriend. I was going to give my virginity to him.

I was walking home from the park, at about 10 at night. I had gone to take pictures of the moon, and the stars. All of a sudden red lights flashed and a short siren went off from behind me. I turned around and saw a police car pulling up along side of me.

I took in a deep unsteady breath as a male officer, that looked to be in his mid-thirties, got out of the driver side and walked over to where I was standing.

"Miss, are you aware that it is past curfew?" he asked as he shone his flashlight on me.

"I'm 18 officer," I managed to say without having a heart attack. This had been my first encounter with a police officer.

"May I see some id please?" he asked in an impatient tone.

I nodded my head as I started to dig through my purse. I finally found it and pulled it out, handing it to him.

He stared at it for a few seconds and then said, "Come on, I'll give you a ride home." He opened the back door and waited for me to get in.

I got into the car without a second thought.

"I'm sorry, I can't let you ride in the front." he said as he got into the drivers seat and closed the door.

"It's alright, " I said quietly. I smiled as I thought about the heart attack my parents would have when I arrived home in a cop car.

"I have to make a quick stop at a friend's house to drop him off a package is that alright?" he asked as he started to drive.

"Sure," I said as I stared out the window. If only I had known what he really had planned for me...


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Comments:

this is really good i cant wait to read more when u get it updated

Posted: Sep 11, 2008

YOU MUST POST ASAP OR.......OR.....IDK YOU JUST HAVE TO POST ASAP CUZ I LIKE WHERE THIS IS GOING

Posted: Sep 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha otay i shall

OMG...OMG!!!! YOU HAVE TO UPDATE, JUST HAVE TO PLZ PLZ PLZ
LOVE THIS CHAPTER AND CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT ONE
VERY INTERESTING JUST LOVE IT

Posted: Sep 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha thank you and I will

LOVE it update soon plez

Posted: Sep 12, 2008

April :)
(not registered user)

Update sooon. I'm like excited about this story :)

This is my first time on booksie and i already read 2 of your stories and they are absolutely amazing!

Posted: Sep 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Awe thank you! I'm glad you enjoy my work!

Okay she is really innocent. Even my 7 yr old cousin knows if there are not blue lights, they have no power over you...no I am not training her to be a bad girl that young! I like where this is going!

Posted: Sep 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha

uh oh ......i love it so far

Posted: Sep 12, 2008

ooo! really good! i like the way u right! u rock!

Posted: Sep 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Hehe thank you very much

please update

Posted: Sep 13, 2008

☺ Please update soon!!!!

Posted: Sep 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Will do

Can't wait to hear more.

Posted: Sep 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you

I love your suspense stories. I am in love with suspense lol. So please update soon!! I can't stand waiting!! lol really good start!!

Posted: Sep 14, 2008

Oooo...Can't wait for the next part!! I've always loved your novels!! Please updating soon!

Posted: Sep 14, 2008

wowwow
cant wait for the next chapter♥
loked it ☺

Posted: Sep 14, 2008

creepy, now i want to read more.

Posted: Sep 16, 2008

getting suspicious...who would suspect a police officer ?? poor girl

Posted: Sep 17, 2008

not needed
(not registered user)

All ur stories are getting so monotonous. Same old. A girl kidnapped. A master. Some horrid descriptions of sex and then? incomplete. do't you have a better job?I don't think you are a good writer.You have got a narrow mind and very narrow thinking.Please STOP writing

Posted: Sep 17, 2008

Author Comment:

That's your opinion... i'm not going to stop writing because i love to write. I honestly could care less if anybody likes my work... i write for myself.

Sounds Brilliant! Can't wait to read more

Posted: Sep 18, 2008

Excellent writing. It sure took me in a state of mind. That was great.

Posted: Sep 28, 2008

anonymous
(not registered user)

damn... that was a little harsh ^^
personally i think you are an amazing writer and i love all your stories and it really pisses me off when i see smart-ass ppl cut writers down.
Keep writing you have a wonderful gift and im not just saying that :)

Posted: Oct 10, 2008

jeez that comment above really was "not needed".!.
ii really lyk the style yu riite iin and ii cnt fiind many others that riite lyk yu do.!.
keep up the gudd work.!.

Posted: Oct 13, 2008

Author Comment:

That's cause every author has his/her personal style. Thanks for reading :D

The only thing I would say is to watch your spelling and grammar. Words such as "all of a sudden" should be changed to "suddenly". Hyphenate "high-school", use commas and spaces, etc.

Overall, it's pretty good. The opening needed a little bit of work, but you introduced the character to us and it made me want to read more.

Posted: Oct 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for the tips... sorry about the errors

No, no need to apologize, friend. It's a good story so far. For me, I only want to give constructive criticism to help the writer become better. I never would want to degrade someone's work. Sometimes we writers can't see some things that others can. Keep up the writing! The important thing is that it was interesting enough to keep me interested. And that's a big plus :)

Posted: Oct 20, 2008

XxEmoHeartxX,

Loss and grief is painful. Oh how life's challenges scare us sometimes, as things can be so unpredictable. Where can we turn you ask? Well, I turn to the Holy Spirit, the Comforter, in my times of need. Quelling my pain, the Holy Spirit is my only fluffly pillow when I can't bear the frustration and anxiety. We all find such love from the undying, unconditional love of the Creator. When my husband can not understand, the Holy Spirit can.

Joh 14:26 But the Comforter, which is the Holy Ghost, whom the Father will send in my name, he shall teach you all things, and bring all things to your remembrance, whatsoever I have said unto you.

Sabbay :)
AdventistWheat.com

Posted: Nov 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Sadly... that confused me some what.

Makino_Tsukushi
(not registered user)

hey!
i love what you have wrote so far
its great. i want to read more of it. please update soon!

Posted: Nov 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Will do

when are you going to the next chapter? I liked it.

Posted: Nov 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Soon, hopefully some time today

just started reading your story, it's excellent so far, beautifully written

Posted: Nov 24, 2008

Author Comment:

:D

I like it im going to read more =3

Posted: Nov 24, 2008

Author Comment:

:)

is this an inapropiet story eairther way im going to read it

Posted: Dec 2, 2008



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