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The Old Friend

Poem By: elegantbleeding
Young Adult


This is a short poem about one of my old friends (obviously), but as the lines suggest, we aren't exactly friends anymore... I'm sure there will be a few of you out there who can truly relate to this. This is the first poem I've submitted here, and I would love some of your feedback. Thank you! View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Nov 27, 2006    Reads: 108    Comments: 2    Likes: 1   


She keeps one eye hidden
So no one can look through her.
I guess it might work half the time,
But I can still remember
Every word she told me,
So I realize she hasn't changed.
It's almost a comfort
Found in such monotony,
Yet I find myself quite discontent-
Because we both know
That she still wants revenge
And my apologies weren't meant for accepting.

I catch her gaze
As cold as ice
And feel bad karma run straight through me.
I wish I could go back
And change all we went through,
But that's nothing short of impossibility.
So I return the favor
And glare back at her,
Soon afterward realizing my mistake.
I've worsened the problem
Things will never get better.
For this, I am the one to blame.


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Comments:

I can relate to this poem. Each word describes the feeling of such a situation clearly and perfectly.

Posted: Nov 29, 2006

Author Comment:

Thanks Jean, I appreciate your feedback. =)

I really feel like throughout times of my life this poem was you just writing my mind.
being a teen in this horrible world can suck especially with friendships are always coming and going.
This is a good poem I really enjoyed it!

Posted: Apr 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you!



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