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Poem By: ixluvx2xwritex2
Young Adult

Just a love poem that I wrote while in study hall. I hope you like it! View table of contents...

Submitted: Apr 18, 2008 Reads: 83 Comments: 8 Likes: 6

You see the darkness ahead,

but I see the light.

You dwell in the past behind us,

and I see our future that’s bright.

As the rain pours down,

I can feel you here with me.

As the storm rages round,

I know we’ll never be free.

So I need you here

to see that I love you.

And as this storm will fade,

I’ll hear heaven call your name.

You were sent here, my angel,

I will never be the same.

As the wind whips us around,

I can feel you here beside me.

As the skies fall to the ground,

I know we’ll never be free.

So I need you here

to show you I love you.

Times together will be hard,

but we know how to face it.

As much as they say ‘No’,

we’ll do it anyways and make it.

As the storm crushes us down,

I can feel you here with me.

As the darkness wraps us around,

I know we’ll never be free.

So I need you here

to tell you I love you.

You know that, I love you.

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Comments:

tin2twinkling

wow! good poem!!!!! =) i like it

Posted: Apr 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. I just wrote it during study hall, and thought of it as a love song. I might use it in a story sometime, so just keep looking!

Lacey Cummings

This was really pretty. I especially love the very first stanza. Lovely job.

Posted: Apr 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much. I really enjoyed writing it, and just loved what came out of my head. Thanks for reading!

hi, a really lovely poem. i love the storm metaphor, it represents life and the notion that we can't walk alone, whether thats spiritually or secular. Either way it works well and is beautifully written

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. I just kind of wrote it during study hall, and...Ta da! I'm so glad you liked it!

bubbly

hi! (so u luv 2 write0. ur poem starts on an optimistic note, develops into love and ends in despair. quite a range of emotions. ;-)

Posted: May 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks...I guess. I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for commenting. It started out as just a poem, but I've been trying to write music to it. I'll try to post it here if I ever get it recorded.

Pratibha

i have read so many poems on TRUE LOVE...but urs has that "SPECIAL" something....
i have one request - please keep me informed when u post a poem or short story...

I loved the rhythm and lovely comparisons and imagination and the best part was that - this doesnot seem 'fake'...each and every word was true....i could 'feel' it...
cherish that love buddy....NOT everyone around you is lucky...

Posted: Sep 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. I wish I had a love like this, but alas, this love is in my head. It is what I wish for most, and someday, I know that I'll find it.

Of course, I can keep you posted on new short stories and poems. Thanks for taking such a liking to them!

Thanks for commenting. Happy reading, and good luck!

StaceyWatts

Very beautiful poem. It is breathtaking.

Posted: Sep 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. I'm really glad you liked it that much! Thanks for commenting and happy writing!

dreaming of you

a fabulous poem . really appealed to this hopeless romantic .

Posted: Sep 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. I'm glad that you really liked it. I am a hopeless romantic myself, if you havent noticed. Thanks for the comment, happy writing, and good luck!