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Poem By: jadey oneil
Young Adult


Another piece I wrote for my friend. She is already blessed loving someone who loves her in turn. BUT, someone else comes in and bares his soul to her. Lucky woman! ^^

He may have loved her. He may have adored her. But, he CAN'T do anything to make it grow. He just can't. Nor can she.

*This poem describes the relationship between my friend and this man*

"If I'd look for true love,
I could never find it in you"



Read on and leave your comments. Thanks! ^^ View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 1, 2008    Reads: 80    Comments: 14    Likes: 6   


When the sun sets down;

The night slowly crawls in;

Unable to catch a glimpse;

At the sight of the day.

* * *

When the moon’s up;

Illuminating in dark skies;

No matter how brilliant it shines;

Call it still a night.

* * *

For the sun doesn’t belong to the dark;

Nor the moon to the light of day;

There isn’t even a meeting halfway;

One exists when the other’s gone.

* * *

Light of the world;

Shining in the same sky;

With rays that radiate in all direction;

Together they don’t belong.

* * *

When the night feels cold;

Or even a bit colder;

In moments it turns warm;

The warmth won’t be from the sun.


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Comments:

jadey, we both know the story behind this piece of literature... this is so amazing.. i like the thought
and this is so perfect...
bravo!!!!

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

You do? Of course, you certainly do. LOL! Just teasing you a bit. I'm glad you liked it. ^^

Thanks for dropping by, my friend. ^^

omg this is really awesome. You are a really good writer

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm flattered. Thanks! ^^

Very interesting poem! Without the explanation, I wouldn't have known what this is about, but I loved the metaphor of the sun and the moon. Lovely!

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

I went all figurative here. They represented the characters in this piece. Thanks a lot, Em! ^^

Deep imagery and wonderful metaphors.
My goodness, this actually takes my breath away when I conjure it together with your introduction.

Stand up and take a bow, this is incredible poetry.

*applause

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Classy Peach,

Thank you!^^
Thank you!^^
Thank you!^^

Yes, I too had thought it made more sense when I read the intro. Still, as Peach said, it really fits well when you bring the intro to mind while reading the poem again. I really liked it. :)

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

I did include a li'l summary since I made this a bit figurative. This way, it would be taken the way it meant. Thanks for the comment, Angel. I appreciate it. ^^

WHOA!
i LOVE the symbollism of the sun and moon - a perfect choice!! absolutely beautiful jadey. this is such a great poem and wow. ha, i'm still knocked off my feet by the symbollism. lovely, lovely work here. you never fail to impress :)
keep it up! ^^

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

That's what I thought too. The thought that these two could never be with each other at the same time perfectly defined such relationship. It sounded pretty complicated, I guess. But that's just how things were. Ahh...controversial, if I may say. ^^

Thanks again, Alice! ^^

oohhhh this is sooooooo pretty! and i agree with alice, the symbolism IS perfect! its wonderful! i love it!!!!! =)
~Lemon

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Glad you loved it, Lemon! ^^
Thanks!

This piece is awesome...love the imagery and the whole thing. Cute

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks a lot, Deb! ^^

I loved the poem, Jadey, and you are so talented. Keep writing and blessing us.

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

I will. Thanks, Susan! ^^

Wow! As others said, the imagery in this is amazing. I love this poem..you did a great job on this. :)

~ Susan

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

You made me smile, Susan. Thanks a bunch! ^^

You indeed need a standing ovation sweetheart....the use of metaphors is brilliant and u have done a maginificient job.....

Sun and Moon can never meet....so true...and what a lucky woman to have two true loves in her life....

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

She really is. Well, she isn't just the typical beauty and brains. She is a beautiful person inside out and I'm proud of her. Thank you for taking time reading this, buddy. I always appreciate it. Godbless! ^^

Awwww this is really beautifuuuul!You described it very good! :)

Posted: Jul 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw, Thanks, Silvija! ^^

Great job...i love this poem! :) the metaphors and imagery were beautiful and the story behind the poem is very clear once you start reading. Great job! Keep writing you are really good...:)-zia

Posted: Jul 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh, thanks Zia! ^^

Aw, kind of sad really. It's as if the night is lonely, and maybe you're right? Thanks for a great read. ~ Nixie

Posted: Jul 6, 2008

Author Comment:

My pleasure.
Thanks, Nix! :-)



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