Broken Hearts Never End

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Poem By: justonenight
Young Adult

Tags: heart break, love, pain

Getting your heart broken over, and over can get old but I know he's out there. I want to find him. View table of contents...

Submitted: Aug 30, 2008 Reads: 33 Comments: 4 Likes: 2

Another sad day,

Just like the last one.

Each day is a pain,

Remembering that awful day.

You broke my heart,

And shattered my dreams,

Making them impossible to achieve.

My heart is in no repair,

My emotions jerked in utter despair.

Forgetting the memory,

That's almost impossible to bear,

Like being trapped in a locked door,

Suffocating in blazing hot air.

Your evil smile glances about,

Haunting my dreams without a doubt,

But one day this chaos will end,

And my heart will mend.

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Comments:

Jak Sylvian

It is true times heals all wounds, there aren't any time limits unfortunately and things can seem forever. I really like the the descriptive terminology you use and the way what you write can easily paint a picture.

You have quite a talent there.

Posted: Sep 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes, that's the feeling I had. You can never know when your heart is ready to move on, and sometimes you just want to give up.

Thanks so much! And thank you for the comment on my "talent". :)

XxDeathXxKissxX

nice one!
"My emotions jerked in utter despair." i especially like that line =]
the imagery is great and can feel the emotions you put into the poem.

i agree with jak about the time heals all wounds thing =]

nice job^^

Posted: Sep 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so so muchh! :) I like how you added your view on my work. It helps me see how people view my workk.

Thanks again!

bubbly

hi! j. time is a great healer. either u'll forget him and move on or u'll be with him forever together. only time can tell that. in the meanwhile, be in charge of ur life and carry on. don't miss out on life. for it is solely urs. lol. ;-)

Posted: Sep 2, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for the advice. :) and i'll sure be able to try and forget all of this.

Alayna Andrew

Sorry it took me so long to reply. I haven't logged into Booksie in a week or so. Oy vey! xD

Anyhow, the poem was good! Short. But, still good! (sorry, Im a sucker for long poems. haha)

I really liked it where you said...
"Like being trapped in a locked door,
Suffocating in blazing hot air."

I had to picture it and it brought back the actual feeling of having my heart broken in the past. Like you can't breath and when you do, its hot and unsatisfactory!

I loved this poem. Especially after reading it a couple more times. =) Nice job!

Posted: Sep 11, 2008