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Submitted: Jun 20, 2008    Reads: 25    Comments: 5    Likes: 2   


My heart is molten gold.

poured into a shape,

it beats.

~

But then,

someone takes it,

claiming it for

itself.

~

It wore my heart

on it's sleeve

like a mere

piece of prettyness

instead of my heart.

~

Then it cut a slit

in my heart

with its foul tongue.

It took the most pure

and beautiful bits on my heart

and sold them to the rest

of the world.

~

But still my heart beats

of its own accord,

bound not

to beat to someone elses whim.

They cannot change

nor destroy

the beat,

yet they can, and they've tried,

to dim the rhythm

beating in my heart of

molten gold


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The imagery is beautiful.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Author Comment:

imagery... interesting...
With INTERESTINGNESS,
KR

I agree, beautiful imagery. I was imagining a golden locket given away in love and then abused by the new owner; cut up, pieces shaved off, etc. Good one!

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Author Comment:

you all flatter me, stop it! (kidding, kidding. I like being flattered. I think.) But I still love you all.
With LOVE,
KR

hi! amy. one can be killed but cannot be changed. good work. ;-)

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

Author Comment:

thats how I roll! hello to you too, bubbly!
With distraction by means of really wanting to finish a book,
KR

keepers River I know about writing on scraps of paper! What a brilliant and evocative opening. Thanks for coming to my page so I could "find you" - I read your profile and see you are such a young writer but already with such beautiful things to say. I hope the love of writing stays with you because there is talent there a'plenty.

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Anna! I know I'll enjoy your comments and you'll enjoy mine!
KR

Interesting........................really. Okay, NOW I GET IT!!!! Hahaha,my brain has finally processed your poem, it was complex(in a very good way). It's like the world taking away innocence but it's still there, it never dissapears, no matter how the world tries to tug and pull. It flits like a shadow- golden in stature and worth, always coming and never staying. MMMmmmmmmm......Okay, out of dreaming mode! My own weird intepretation of your poem. Does it hit close?
Good job, this poem makes a person think and I love those types of writing. :)

Posted: Jul 12, 2008

Author Comment:

the more I get to know you the more I like you!!!! Hit close?, sorry, but no one who's commented on their opinion got it right but they were all close, you too! Thanks Anita if I have time I'll check out some of your stuff too OK?
With GLASS CLEANER,
KR



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