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With Unbroken Love

Poem By: Keepers River
Young Adult


Tags: unbroken, love

This don't end the way it starts,
And I promise I won't break your hearts!

(ps: This is my first long rhyming poem, yippie!) View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 28, 2008    Reads: 23    Comments: 2    Likes: 1   


With Unbroken Love,

she played the part of mirror.

***

With Unbroken Love,

she showed you that which was not clear.

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With Unbroken Love,

she looked away.

***

With Unbroken Love,

she said it'd be okay.

***

With Unbroken Love,

she watched you fall.

***

With Unbroken Love,

she tried to stand tall.

***

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But you didn't want her anymore;

you cast-off the life-boat with her still on the shore.

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She tried to understand,

but you spit upon her helping hand.

***

Once upon a golden time,

you were happy to let her play mime.

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But some high temptress a-whispered in your ear:

Darkly clouding the ivory clear.

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Off with the temptress you gladly set sail,

Only to find yourself pushed off the rail.

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So you find youself a-sinking in the deep dark blue,

Now you are knowin' that you never had a clue.

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You rejected she who was truest of the true,

And then realized she never once rejected you.

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She stood by you in the bad hours,

Not even tempted to go off and sniff the flowers.

***

When you came home bloodied from a fight,

she was there, the humblest sight.

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She never once looked at what you had done

and at once attemped to shun.

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She loved you with every ounce of her heart,

always rushing to do her part.

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But isn't too late

to save your love so great.

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So go,

and don't waste time running slow!

You've a true love to catch,

a damsel to fetch!


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Comments:

I really liked that whole poem, except maybe the last two lines. A little kitchy; could just take them out. I really liked the message and the images though. The man not realizing the gift of a women he has in front of him. I particularly liked him getting pushed off the rail. Tee hee. He deserved it! Now should she take him back or not? I think there needs to be lots of groveling and declarations first!

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for the advise! I'm delighted you enjoyed it!
KR

Ahhh..the true world of love. Elegantly shown. Good job, love it. Love is not just about passsion, it's about responsibility adn seeing what is right in front of your eyes.
Ahhh.....good poem, soothes the soul and makes it reasts

Posted: Jul 12, 2008

Author Comment:

heeheeheeheee!!! sorry if my last few responses are kinda oddball or somefink!!! I'm having having a hard time thinking of things to say that I haven't said before but HEHEHEHEHE I'm glad you like it!!!!!
With A LETTER OPENER,
KR



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