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Submitted: Jun 24, 2008    Reads: 45    Comments: 5    Likes: 1   


I feel the rain pitter pattering against my back

It doesn't matter

I am left forgotton in this place of no return

I believed that the symphony would keep me forever

I had busted keys

So what

Wasn't I good enough

The rain picks up

Before the symphony

I belonged to a girl

She yearned for the times that her father would play notes

She would dance around the room

Never skipping a beat

He would tenderly press down on my keys

I would make woulderful sounds

Dawn approaches

The Rain continues to fall

I start to think about my immortal songs

Says I the piano of this forgotton land


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Comments:

very good i liked it =]

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you!!!

Nicely done from the piano's point of view. Good read

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks

some great images here, you can almost feel the old notes of the piano playing back to an empty room, Wonderfully writen piece

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you so much

i loved it.

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

love love love the imagery...
very well done!

Posted: Sep 24, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you



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