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The Dark Days Are Here

Poem By: MelancholicXxXOptimist
Young Adult


The dark-days are coming

They won't just dissapear... View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 25, 2008    Reads: 53    Comments: 10    Likes: 3   


Gnarled trees waiting on barren land,

Drooping over cracked ground,

Scarcely touching the dry earth.

 

Cruel ocean waiting impatiently,

Ready to sweep away swimmers,

To pull them down into nothingness,

To crush their hopes and dreams.

 

Suffering unexpected hurt,

Preparing for the worst,

Still praying for the best.

The dark days have come,

And they ain’t going no-where

Not moving an inch

Not ‘til they’ve taken lives.

 

World stumbling to a stop,

Darkness overpowering the light.

Frightful thoughts raining from every soul.

 

The dark days have come,

And hope backs off into the trees,

Never to be found again.

 

Memories fade to black,

Tears crash down,

Life ceases to exist,

Dreams turn to muck.

 

Doomed.


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Comments:

Wow.
Very dark and very good.
Wonderful.

The flow (I think)was interrupted a bit in some places.

But still, over all-- great job!

x

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

Author Comment:

thankyou, Melly :)

i'll work on it.. sometime... lol

ily

This is really good.Great actually.Yea dark days just dont stop coming.It reminded me on the fluds,and tornados,earthquekes(I know I wrote it wrong but nvm,lol)...And all that things.
Great.
And the ending was strong!
:)

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

lol. thankyou for your feedback :)

DUDE! thats like totally wicked! dark mysterious. thats how i like it! right more dude!

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks :) ok, sure :) :) :)

me likey!

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks :)

I loooooooooooooved it. You know I loooooooove dark poetry He he.

Way to go!

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :)

haha, I sure do know :)

this is so depressing-but I know it's supposed to be ;]

Posted: Aug 31, 2008

Author Comment:

lol (?). Thanks :)

wow
that was
awesomee
darkly awesome
:]

Posted: Sep 6, 2008

Author Comment:

thankyou :)

wow :D
its dark and i like it =]
the poem is just awesome and i especially love the last stanza, and then the word 'Doomed' as the conclusion.
i just love dark poems >< :D
great work ^^ [*clicks the 'i like' button*]

Posted: Sep 7, 2008

Author Comment:

thankyou very, very much =) lol, i like dark poems too!! :)

thanks!! :)

^_^

Dude this is like wicked awesome!!!!!Awesomely fantastic Job!!! keep it up :D

Posted: Sep 20, 2008

Author Comment:

thankyou! I'll try my best to! ^_^

Hopefully i'll get to comment on some of your writing soon (in about a week because i'm going away) But i promise i will. ^_^

thanks for the comment!

Holy Crap!
I reread this.
Larnie...this is freaking A-M-A-Z-I-N-G-!-!-!-!!!!!!
SERIOUSLY!

Posted: Sep 28, 2008

Author Comment:

lololo thankyou Melly ^_^



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