I came up with this last night...when i was really upset...
And yeah...I dont feel that the title goes up with the poem...so if any of you have a suggestion...feel free to drop in^_^
Hope you like the poemXD
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Submitted: Aug 12, 2008
Reads: 91
Comments: 10
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The memories of you
I hold so dear
Are now haunting me
Stealing away my every night sleep.
The sweetest memories
Have now taken
The form of evilness
Killing me again and again.
I plead to you
Not to do this to me
Not to take away the only thing i have
Reminiscences of you and me.
Let everyone turn their back
I just don't care
Let everyone ignore me
I just don't need them.
How could you?
Why did you do that?
You can't ever ask me to forget you
Forgetting you is like forgetting myself.
You never listened
You carried on...
Moved on along..
Laughing at my pathetic soul.
You think of me as a liar now
And God knows why?
I would rather kill myself
Than ever lying to you...
I trusted you with all my heart
And I still do...
Though I know now
You took me for granted.
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Comments:
HA! im first at the comments XD
*happy*
the peom is sad and beautiful. its honest and i like the structure of the stanzas too.
it seems someone one hurt you wuite badly form the sound of the poem :S [[hope your heart mends quickly-be happy ^^]]
and noww *drumroll* for my favourite awesome lines:
"The form of evilness
Killing me again and again."
a great way of showing how painful they are
"Forgetting you is like forgetting myself."
a really honest ad caring way of showing how much you loved that person.
amazing nuttyz
simply LOVE it
the title "memoirs" is good mind you. ill think of one if you still want one hehe. when i come up with it ill tell you ^^
take care friend ^^
xxxxxxx
Posted: Aug 12, 2008
I LOVE this!!! The emotion is as powerful as the message! Great job on this one! ...but it is very sad... : [ It reminds me of a quote i have on my page..
"Love is giving someone the chance to destroy you, ..and trusting them not to."
But anyways, WOW< amzing job.
Would you mind checking out some of the poems on my page? thx abunch girlly! : D
Posted: Aug 12, 2008
LOVE IT!!!
this poem is both sweet and beautiful i really like it!!
there's just so much emotion in this piece you are one talented cookie!!
xoxo
DOMM!
XD
Posted: Aug 12, 2008
Great poem. Sad though. You should write a more brighter poem.
Posted: Aug 13, 2008
There's lot of hurt and pain in ur poetry.
Very beautifully written and expressed.
Hope u heal soon from it...:)
Posted: Aug 18, 2008
Wow. Lots of thoughts here that make someone really think about what they do to someone else. I hope your heart heals.
Posted: Aug 18, 2008
Wow nuttyz, you continue to amaze me. Their is some awesome aura here that just elevates this poem. I love everything about it! Take care, Regan
Posted: Aug 22, 2008
Totally A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!!!!! I absolutely love it!!! Wonderfully spectacular JOB!!!
Posted: Sep 12, 2008
This is EXACTLY how I feel right now...
Posted: Nov 14, 2008
This is truely great and I can relate to it.
Beautiful word choice.
:D
Lidsā„
Posted: Nov 26, 2008
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