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Out of the Darkness

Poem By: nuttyz
Young Adult


i tried to write a long poem...i dont like this one though:S...plz. let me know if you like it
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Submitted: Jul 25, 2008    Reads: 73    Comments: 6    Likes: 5   


She closed her eyes and ran away

Dazed, everyone made way

Tears rolling down her cheek

Blank about her destination

******

Soon, very own darkness hugged her

Her footsteps echoed

In the deadening silence

She sees light far ahead

******

She quickened her pace,

Determined to reach there

Turmoil of the voices pulling her back

Breaking the silence

******

‘No!!...I don’t want to go back!!!’

She screamed out stridently

Hugging herself tightly,

As the cold darkness pierced her flesh

******

She sure recognized the voice

It’s none’s, but his

His voice slapped her

While his words pierced her

******

She was bleeding…

Her breath growing shorter by time

Legs becoming more wobbly

And her body, too heavy to be carried

******

“I won’t give up so easily!!...

You hear me??!...Never will I give up!!!”

She screamed again

And his voice laughed evilly

******

Her anger boiled up

Giving her more strength to move ahead

She gathered herself up

Trying to ignore the pain till she reaches the light

******

Her wounds all too fresh,

Filling her whole body

In a throbbing pain

Fighting back, she headed towards the light

******

Sighing with relief, for she reached there

She stepped out of the darkness

The very golden sun smiled

Wishing her the best morning ever

******

 For a new day…

For the beginning of a new life….

Darkness left far behind

His evilness out of her life

******

Never will he be able to haunt her again

For she wont ever repeat the mistakes

It’s buried and forgotten

Though the scars would still shine, yet forever…

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Comments:

Not a bad poem. Good visual, rhythm, rhyme and choice in words. If you plan on making it longer, you may want to alter the odd stanza so it doesn't get too repetitive.

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks!^_^

but i guess i'll just let this be the same. will try to write another long poem.

thanks a lot for your comment! :)

there is a very good visual within this poem i really like it, and nice choice of words!!
AWESOME!!!
XD

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much! I guess I didn't do such a bad job after all! haha!
I'm glad you liked it!^_^

Don't worry at all regd this poem...this is ur best one if u would believe us...

really awesome...

I loved each and every line of it...the hope, the energy just flowed from it...and could really encourage a depressed soul to fight hard...and emerge victorious...
even my poems are long and i wish i could also write short ones...

But honestly, the length of this poem is it's beauty

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Author Comment:

wow, really??!:D
Thank you soo much Pratibha!!
So glad you liked it!^_^

y dont you like it??
*gawps*
its A.W.E.S.O.M.E!!
its a rly great story, actionized and i love the last paragraph, especially the last line XD
honestly its great :D
take care ^^

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

Author Comment:

YAY!!! So am I glad you loved it!!!
Thanks a zillion!!..*how many zeroes does a zillion has by the way???*
I gotta figure that out for sure!!
haha!!!..take care!

ooo not bad :) honestly nothing jaw-dropping but it was definately like-able ^^ dont be so hard on yourself :) the last line, with the scars - whew! that was my favorite line! it definately was a nice way to close it ^^

keep up the great writing :)

Posted: Aug 3, 2008

Author Comment:

aaah...thanks Alice!!^_^

WHOA!!!!!!! TOTALLY AWESOMENESSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I ADORE IT!!!!!!

Posted: Sep 12, 2008

Author Comment:

*waaaahhh*
ME HAPPY!!!XD
Thanks a lot!



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