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Polar Opposites; Outside Looking in

Poem By: OHSHCKaori
Young Adult


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Submitted: Sep 26, 2008    Reads: 30    Comments: 5    Likes: 1   


I’m on the outside

Looking in at her

She is the one

My parents always wanted

She is the one

My parents really loved

Like a porcelain doll

She is protected

Cared for

Sheltered

Becoming one of those

Ice princesses everyone hates

At least in high school

I watch

As she gets handed everything

On a silver platter

While I have to fight for oxygen

For the very air I breathe

Because I am

Un cared for

Not sheltered

Becoming one of those

Loners, standing on the outside

Of society- unwanted

Because I

Am a polar opposited

On the outside looking in


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Comments:

What a sad Poem Kaori. I can't imagine how anyone could overlook such a beautiful Soul, it is certainly their loss.

I know that it is "old ladies music" but take a listen to Neil Sedaka's song "Standing on the Outside' or "Standing on the Inside" at http://au.youtube.com/watch?v=zX7JYAE8cAQ

Lyrics = http://lyricsplayground.com/alpha/songs/s/standingontheinside.shtml

Perhaps you will find something there that is worth thinking about.

Kindest regards,
Susan

Posted: Sep 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh thanks. I love music. I'll definitely listen
~Kaori

THIS IS SO SAD...Kaori, sweetheart u know something...the kids which toil hard to get a sky on top of them and a strong soil beneath their feet are the ones who face all the turmoils in life with a brave front and also take care of others...

Trust me when u would have kids, you would be their darling MOM...

Posted: Sep 29, 2008

Author Comment:

AWWW THanks so much Pratibha!!! You always make me happy with your sweet comments.
~kaori

nelly
(not registered user)

i like it brooke and i can definitely...agree...no...um... relate there we go relate!

Posted: Sep 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol. I'm so glad you can relate to it. . . geez i can't even spell that. . . -.-
`Kaori

this is so sad, but i understand the emotion... great poem, enjoyed it a lot!

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, it's about my little sister and who she's growing up to be.
~Kaori

Yay you and me in the reject group yes! lol i'm that way too ya know lol. We'll stick together lol.

Posted: Oct 9, 2008

Author Comment:

YAY!! We can definitely stick together.
~KAori



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