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Etched in skin...

Poem By: poet 3
Young Adult


Tags: pain, suicide, death

Dont know why I wrote this one...I guess my inspiration was a story of a girl who commited suicide and no one cared till she was gone. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 11, 2007    Reads: 76    Comments: 4    Likes: 0   


The pain is easy to see,
Etched across her skin,
She stands in a sea of moving graves,
Her never ending scowl,
Leers in the minds of her ghosts,
Her pain is easy to see,
Yet no one notices,
No one understands,
She sits in a corner,
Blood running down her arms,
To fall in a puddle all around her feet,
No one seems to see it,
Or maybe no one cares,
No one see's the pain,
Etched so clearly in her skin,
They pass her by like she's a statue in a park,
And with an Angel wing's,
She fly's away,
Now they care and now they see,
That the pain she etched so deep into her skin,
Was more than she could take,
They all cared just a little too late,
And with an Angel's wings,
She flies above,
Leaving only a note,
In a puddle of blood


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Comments:

i really love this work and i love the visual stimulation in the poem i find my self being able to see the characters actually quite clearly. and i think there is maybe a question everyone has asked themselves once "what happens and who cares if im not here?"

Posted: Aug 11, 2007

Author Comment:

Yeah... It seems alot of people ask that question but most never get an answer, It seems some are so desparate for the answer that they try it out,

I'm really glad you liked it and thanx for reading!
^_^! *Peace!*

ok that gave me a image of a blond girl standing on the roof of a tower with cuts on her wrist, and the wind is blowing and it raining and behind her is a puddle of blood with a note in it. is that what it was suppost to or am i way off?.

5 stars (i would give it 2 hundred million, but i cant:()

Posted: Aug 14, 2007

Author Comment:

Actually, that was really close!! Except at the begining she was sitting in a corner as the ppl walked by her and then she climbed the building!! (Except she wasn't supposed to be blonde! She was supposed to have Black hair! :)!)
I'm really glad you liked it!!

That was very deep and sad, I thought it very nice and can sympathize with it wholeheartedly. Its sad when people don't feel as if they truly belong or should even live. well done. five stars. :)

Posted: Nov 4, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank You!
I read this at my school and the teachers hated it!
They said it was a lie, that ppl dont ever feel that way!
Except the Health teacher, she liked it!

wow!
I imagined it actualy ina park.......... wiv ppl walking past her while she's slitting her wrist and no1 cares but u no........ thats just me lol

well done its great

sophie
XXXXXX

Posted: Nov 24, 2007

Author Comment:

Yeah, I know what you mean!
Alot of ppl here also said they say her in a park with ppl passing! :D
So your not alone in that one!
Thank You for the comment!



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