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Poem By: poet 3
Young Adult


A poem about a special friend who lives across the country. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Sep 2, 2008    Reads: 39    Comments: 7    Likes: 3   


Thinking of a boy,
So far away,
In every way.
I want to be there,
By his side,
To sit and watch the tide.
Californian beaches,
Make the perfect scene,
To a troubled teen…
I want to be there,
By his side,
To sit and watch the tide.
I want to help,
Be a friend who knows,
And be with him when he goes.
I want to be a pedestal,
To hold him steady,
Until he’s ready.
I think of the boy,
So far away,
In every way,
Whose company I seek,
When things go wrong…
I think of the boy,
So far away,
In every way,
I want to be there,
By his side,
To sit and watch the tide.
 Thinking of a boy,
So far away,
In every way.
I want to be there,
By his side,
To sit and watch the tide.
Californian beaches,
Make the perfect scene,
To a troubled teen…
I want to be there,
By his side,
To sit and watch the tide.
I want to help,
Be a friend who knows,
And be with him when he goes.
I want to be a pedestal,
To hold him steady,
Until he’s ready.
I think of the boy,
So far away,
In every way,
Whose company I seek,
When things go wrong…
I think of the boy,
So far away,
In every way,
I want to be there,
By his side,
To sit and watch the tide.
 


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Comments:

AH! Young love, new love, it's a true love, a love not muddled with resentments and the struggles of survival.
I miss that kind of stuff in my life. Adults however get things a bit messed up and love gets turned into so much other stuff. The feeling seems to get lost easily then.
Good thoughts Poet 3. It gave me a short ride back to when I believed in things more, a fleeting memory of when life just felt better.

Posted: Sep 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha, thanks Robert! :D

I guess I kinda made a little mistake.
I forgot I gave this guy the link to my page....

I hope he doesn't read it! :O

i liked it :D normally the repetition would bother me but it actually sounded really nice in this. it almost gave it a lyrical quality and i liked that touch to it ^^ very nicely written apple and very sweet :)
curse ye distance! i know how it feels to have a special friend so far away -.-

a great poem apple :D i enjoyed it muchly!

Posted: Sep 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.
Haha, lets hope he doesn't red this.
(He doesn't know!)
Haha.

Mmm, yes, CURSE YE OLE DISTANCE!

~Apple~

AHA! Apple has a boyfriend *pulls funny face making kissing sounds*

"I want to be a pedestal,
To hold him steady"

I adored this line...very refreshing.

When are you leaving?

Posted: Sep 2, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks so much Bunny.
And, he's not my boyfriend.
Though I totally wish he was sometimes! :D

And I am not totally sure when I am leaving... It all depends on when I finish my novel... But I'll let you know when I get close ok? :D

~Apple~

hey Apple, i honestly thought this was a little repetitive, Otherwise i LOVED it, as usual. I hope something works out for you 2. now i have to think of a smart way to end this comment....

ummmm

Have a nice day(or night) :)

~Reaper

Posted: Sep 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for being honest Ben! :D
I think this was actually the first time you have said you din't like something in my work! :D Yay, your getting better at noticing mistakes and defining your styles! :DD

~Apple~

You're a very caring and sensitive friend. I hope you can get your wishes. Sweet poem.

Posted: Sep 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks devilrod.
I really appreciate it!

~Apples~

awe, this is so cute! great poem! i missed you this summer, but i'm back now, lol.

Posted: Sep 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Yay! Your back! :DDD

Thanks, I had tried to make it cutish with the rhyme scheme I guess... :DDD

He just turned 18! AHHHHH!
What do you get an 18 year old for his birthday?!?!?

~Apples~

Nice , your friend has a great friend !

Posted: Sep 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! :D
Hahaha.



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