OOOOOOoooh Zoe.. this was...deep? Is that the right word? I dunno. Anyway..wOw.

I have to read it again... :)

Posted: Aug 9, 2008

it was so intense and sad....i hope u r better now...
Take care Zoe

Posted: Aug 9, 2008

WOW. I really love it. The emotions are so deep it really has you hanging on every word. :) If you can get inspration from rain......(Maybe I should try lol)
These are my favorite lines :)
Tears as black as night that fall down cheeks filled with wounds that never seem to heal
Scared with marks that reek with lies spoken from the tongue of the person who you thought would never go away
*speechless*

Posted: Aug 9, 2008

"And then I am fully lost in this breeze full of angry words thrown at me from all angles that never seem to disappear" Wow. This has got to be my favourite line. So true.
This has been the deepest poem I've read of yours. Perhaps that walk with the rain called to something deeper inside of you.
So beautiful.
~Kaori

Posted: Aug 9, 2008

really beautiful, i love this poem keep up the good work.

Posted: Aug 9, 2008

Your words are very intricate.
Beautiful.

Perhaps the conscience speaks of something you fail to see? It is telling you to let it out.
Great poem you have here.

I am new to booksie. Do check out my poems sometime.
Keep writing.

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

WOW! Z-CRANE THAT WAS AMAZING! *hugs*

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Thanks for telling me to check this out. I'm so glad you did. I wouldn't want to miss reading this poem. I think it's very deep and beautiful. You definitely put everything you could into it, and you make it sound like there's really no way out of this. I really enjoyed it, I hope you can get some more inspiration to write something else as deep and enchanting as this poem.

Who knows, you could get enough inspiration from walking on a cloudless day to write a novel with your luck.

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

wow-I am amazed at the depths of your soul that you were able to reach into, then pull them out and put into words to describe everything you feel in this poem-it is very powerful, I think a lot of us can relate to it so I liked it
xX*Meg*Xx

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Hey BrokenHearted :) I love this poem. Your style is unique and I find that you write very good poetry. Your pacing is perfect and your word choice is awesome. I loved these lines: "For the moon and the stars to say goodbye, And for the sun to break through the darkness that it has put us inside" Beautiful. Take care, Regan

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

holy sh!!t. you're amazing [:

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

Oh, wow. I read on your profile that you were 13, and you openly welcomed criticism. I thought, "Okay, no big deal. I'll read one of her poems and I'll point out everything that's wrong with it."

I was expecting some sort of immature love poem that basically said, "Oh, I love him. WHY DOESN'T HE LOVE ME?!" But I started reading this and I was... stricken... by how deep and meaningful it was. It's just lovely. I wouldn't change a SINGLE thing about it. It's just amazing, Zoe. Keep it up. ;-)

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

that was really good and deep i dont think any of mine would ever be as good as this one i cant wait to see the rest of your poems.

-Seanpaul

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

Wow. All i can say is wow.

Its like i've found myself in this poem.

Its simply wonderful.

No, wonderful isnt the right word

A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

wow this is really deep,but it has alot of meaning to it!! excellant job it is very very very very well written!!

Posted: Aug 13, 2008

really deep!
and truly amazing
awesome work
:]
lovedd it

Posted: Aug 14, 2008

=0
...wow...b-e-a-utiful. i really like this poem. its really...deep. i wish i could think of a better word, but im not good at that kind of thing, so ill just go with what everyone else said. fantastic job! keep up the good work =D

Posted: Aug 17, 2008

Wow,this is soo great!Dark,and deep.Full of great imagination,and its GREATT!I like it a lot!
:)

Posted: Aug 19, 2008

That was so sad. I hope you don't really feel that way *cries* No one should ever feel that way. ::hugs::

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

Nice..... i would like to know how it should be read so then i could really feel what you felt and this awe you have with yourself for writing it cause im sorry it didnt touch me the way it did you. You really sound like a person trying to find yourself.:) You should fall in love it really helps everything, all thoughts like that. It gives you new things to concentrate on and takes you out of your head a little more. Keep flowing BrokenHearted i hope some day someone comes along and tapes your heart back together Then you can call yourself MendedHeart or something.... coolio poem still

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

wow that was incredible! I loved it keep it up!

Posted: Sep 10, 2008

:o
goodness! i think i just fell in love! *clutches beating heart* XD this poem is breathtaking zoe. seriously. i'm blown away by this. very deep and dark with a loud cry. i honestly wasn't too fond of the sentence long lines, but you made them work, so it wasn't too distracting. but just watch out for those length lines ^^ otherwise fabulous! keep it up :)

Posted: Oct 26, 2008

please don't be hurting. :( your emotions are so vivid its just incredible that someone can write this way. people care. if you fall, i fall with you, remember? besides, falling from such a high point can be dangerous;)

Posted: Nov 13, 2008