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I was their Friend

Short Story By: Eternal Night
Young Adult


This is a short story about the death of this guy's friend, and the events that occur before and after it. It is extremly short. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 15, 2008    Reads: 42    Comments: 2    Likes: 1   


Ali was the girl who lived next door. Dan was her brother. I was their friend. We use to do everything together, but not anymore.

See Dan was blamed for somethig he didn't do, and they expelled him. Parents couldn't afford to send him anywhere else.

Dan became a street urchin. Ali didn't like that. I didn't like it either, he was me mate. He started to do drugs, Ali was scared. Ali pleaded with him to stop, but he was addicted.

One day, when he was high, he was driving and Ali was with him and so was I but Dan was on a high, and we didn't know, well that was until he started driving. But Dan wouldn't stop.

Then, five minutes later, we were stopping anyway. Except the car was upside down and Ali's head was through the glass. Dan wasn't hurt, well not physically anyway. He never took drugs again. But it was too late, too late for Ali and too late for him.

Ali was the girl who lived next door. But she doesn't live there no more. She lives in the clouds. Dan was her brother, but how can you be a brother to someone who's dead. I was their friend. We use to do everything together, but not anymore.


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Comments:

Is the use of alliteration deliberate? This piece is very dark and yet when you read it's a rhythm to it almost like "rap".

Evelyn

Posted: Apr 21, 2008

This is a dark piece! Very... I don't know, the person telling the story seems innocent in a very solemn way, I like it. It's almost brutally telling us what had happened and making us feel bad for the person telling the story. I really like it :P

Posted: May 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Yay, it had the right effect. And also yay to the fact that you liked it. I'd wright more but my hands are numb and about to freeze off from playing netball in the rain :(. But anyway thanks for commenting. :) Eternal Night



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