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Tough Decision

Short Story By: poet 3
Young Adult


A story of a High school kid who decides one time to not get into trouble with his friends... And it ends up one of the worst nights of his life. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 13, 2007    Reads: 77    Comments: 5    Likes: 1   


God, this is so boring. The sub has no clue what he is doing. He stutters through the equations like they're a foreign language to him.  Damnit, why did Mr. Hawkins have to be gone today of all days? I really  needed  the points on this test, I cant even understand what this guy is saying. Another test down the drain, I'll never get an a on this one. I guess I could  look a my notes quick, I've still got ten minutes.
"Jake, what are you doing?" asked the sub
"looking at my notes."  replied jake.
"you should be paying attention to what I'm saying."
"I would, except I cant understand  a thing your saying."
" well, maybe if you  had listened to Mr. Hawkins then you would  understand." the sub sighed.
Well, I guess he is kinda right.  Maybe I should just  keep my mouth  and listen to the teachers.
Yeah, I'll do that. No more talking in class, not for me. I'm just going to listen to the teachers from now on.
" all right guys, take out a pencil and start working on the test." the sub blurted out.
"hey jake, are you actually gonna take this test?" asked the kid sitting next to him.
"I was thinkin' about it ."
"why?"
"cuz I need the points"
"Ah, your no fun!"
"alright, I wont do it then!"
"great!"
So much for not doing anything outrageous. Now I have to lose these points too. Oh well, I never would have been able to get anything higher than a D anyway. I guess I could make it look  like  I'm doing something. Hmmm, lets see what could I draw? Ha ha ha, lets see, we need a body and a head. There we go. Now lets add some blood and a noose,  ok there we go. Now all we need to do is add a name, hmmm, how about,
" All right, I'm coming around to collect the tests."
Jake scribbles something on his paper.
" Jake, what is this?"
"I don't know."
The sub takes the test from jake and looks at it.
"Jake, this is not funny!"
"I thought it was."
"No it isn't!"
 "ask them, I bet they will tell you its funny."
The Sub holds up jakes test and shows the class the drawing of him on it.
" do you guys think this is as funny as Jake thinks it is?"
The entire class bursts out laughing.
Well, I guess I won back the favor of my fans, but I think this sub hates me now. Great now he'll tell Mr. Hawkins and I'll get suspended. It wouldn't  be the first time I guess.
But I really did want to take this test, man why cant I just say no? It would have boosted my grade a little. It really would have helped, GOD I'M SUCH A COWARD!
I can't even say no to a strange kid I barely know, so how am I ever gonna say no to a friend? That's right I wont be able to, So when they ask me to join them I will...
The bell rings and Jake gets up to leave. The sub walks over and asks him to stay after for a while.
"Jake," The sub begins when the class is empty.
"Why didn't you take the test? It would have brought your grade up to a D." He finished.
"I was thinking about it, But something came up." Jake said on his way out the door, not waiting for the teacher to finish the lecture. He headed out to the parking lot after school and stopped in front his car, hoping to get out of there before his friends showed up.
"Hey Jake, wait up!" Too late... Jake turned around as Ben and Dylan showed up.
"Hey, we're headed out to the lake, let's go, you gotta come with us!" Dylan said excitedly.
"Yeah, Dylan's older brother left his I.D. on the counter, so we got enough beer for ten!"
Ben said looking at Jake expecting a yes.
"I don't know guys, I got a lot of homework to do..." Jake started to say.
"Homework? Jake The Ditcher is gonna do homework instead of come drinking with his two Best friends." Ben exclaimed.
"Alright, I'll go. What time?" Jake said exhaustedly.
"Great! We're Leaving for the beach at Ten!" They shouted over their shoulders as they walked away. Man, I know I shouldn't have said yes, Maybe I just wont go, Yeah that's it, I just wont show!  Jake drove home and told his mom to tell Dylan and Ben that he wasn't here if they showed.
"All right, But why? Are they getting into trouble again?" She asked as Jake was climbing the stairs to his room.
"Of course, They always do, and I'm not going to be a part of it this time." He said as he shut door to his room. He laid down on his bed and fell asleep ten minutes later.
At around midnight his cell phone rings. He stands up from bed and digs around on his desk in the dark for his phone.
"Hello?"
"Hey Jake, It's Katie." Says a small voice on the other end.
"Hey Kate, What do you want?" Jake asked.
"I need you to come here and take Dylan and Ben home, They are totally trashed! But you have to hurry, cuz we cant stop them from taking off much longer." Kate sounded tired.
"Sure Kate, I'll come pick them up now." Jake rushes down the stairs and heads toward the door.
"Jake, Where are you going?" His dad asks quietly.
"I have to go pick up Dylan and Ben, They are completely trashed"
"Well, hurry home then. And be careful" His dad sits back on the chair again. Jake slams the door on his way out and tears out of the driveway headed for the beach. He got down to Claire Ave. When he saw the beach lights four blocks up ahead, He turned onto the next block and ran head on into an SUV. The last thing he remembered seeing was the lights of an ambulance parked near the side of a road and his mother screaming at the medics to hurry and get them to the hospital.
     ***
When Jake woke up two days later he was in a hospital bed lying next to Dylan and Ben, The drivers of the SUV.


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Comments:

wow, didn't expect the end. and u know my names ben,and my bro is dylan, so thats freaky.glad i read this one.

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Posted: Aug 17, 2007

Author Comment:

That I'll do, I didnt know your name was Ben, that is kinda cool!!!!
The ending wasnt supposed to be expected!!!
And I'll go, but you know, He can read this whenever he wants!!!

This is such a sad example of the reality of drinking and driving. Very nice ending. Great job and keep up the good work!

Posted: Sep 9, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank You, I just posted the fifth chapter in my novel!!
I am really glad you liked the story, It was difficult to write at parts, I was kind of stuck, But I am glad it turned out all right!!

Wow, it is a very short short story but it gripped me till the end. And as Reaper said the end was totally unexpected. I loved it!

Posted: Oct 31, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank You! I redid it a little and made it longer, I can post that if you want!

I like it just the way it is. :)

Posted: Nov 1, 2007

Author Comment:

I added more to the ending actually!
I kept the beginning the way it was!!!

Great examples of what not to do :
First: Have you own opinion!
Second : Choice better friends!
Third : Don't lose control of the situation!
Fourth: Don't drink a lot and take a car!
Fifth: Back home alive!
I think that most young missed the point , are being influenced by the media and all of those "New stars", very inconsequents one. I have watched by the MTV a report about Rap, and i asked to myself what kind of song is that we listen now? Where is the Public Enemy ? Where is those groups that made song for the exclude society , and tried to say things more solid about the rights of the people. The new generation is getting the worts part of the cake! All it is about money , cars , chicks and drugs .

Posted: Feb 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Hahahahaah!
Some people would prolly agreee with you on that. But I also think it is their own desicion, They dont have to choose to do those things, they can choose not to.
Glad you liked this! And I am going to be posting a newer revised version of this story today. It is a bit longer then it is now, and gives more detail after the accident. :DDD



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