The End of the World

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Science Fiction  |  House: Contently Deranged Travelers


A young girl living on the planet Toliman posts a short story online that touches upon controversial history and provokes a heated discussion. Sequel to THE LAST OF THE NSHEOS. Continues in
REDEMPTION.

Submitted: May 21, 2016

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THE END OF THE WORLD

 

Short Story by: psychocatlovr51

Genre: Science Fiction

Submitted: May 21, 2666

 

This was the end.

A huge shadow hovered over the entire planet, black like the heart of a child murderer, distorted like the scream of a demon. It was as if Big Mama’s wrath had fallen upon an unfortunate abode of sinners. There was no escape. Sylvana knew that, but nothing could extinguish the burning hope in her heart.

“Quick!” Rhaymond cried out, clasping her gentle, delicate hand. His grip was masculine and reassuring. As always, it made Sylvana feel safe – even now, before the impending doom.

They leapt over a crevice and onto a larger rock towering over the desolate craggy coastline. From there, they could clearly see the outlines of a gigantic malevolent face, gazing upon them like an incarnated nightmare. They stood there, terror-stricken, awaiting their imminent death, saying goodbye to everything they had loved, prepared to be smitten by the horrifying hands of the enormous alien creature.

“Sylvana…” Rhaymond said, turning to her and gently placing his strong hands on her shoulders. “I’m so sorry…”

“Don’t be,” she spoke softly, caressing his handsome face. “We’ve done what we could. We’ve warned everyone. We’ve fulfilled our duty in the eyes of Big Mama. She shall welcome us in Her heavenly kingdom. And most importantly, we’ll stay together…”

“But this…” Rhaymond desperately pointed at the once proud City down in the valley, now lying in ruins, heavy smoke concealing its desecrated splendor. “They haven’t deserved that! There were little babies…”

“The Nsheos had babies as well,” she whispered, tears welling in her beautiful eyes.

Rhaymond was silent. He thought of the horrible destruction wrought by those who had claimed this planet as their own over five hundred years ago. He thought of the well-planned, flawlessly executed total extermination that had befallen the local inhabitants. And he knew that, for the sake of Big Mama and all of Her creation, for the sake of the entire cosmos, there had to be retribution and justice.

They embraced one final time, before the menacing beast raised its colossal foot and stamped on the ground, squashing the rocky surface and extinguishing the lives of the young lovers.

 

 

 

COMMENTS

 

Mike D: This was a pretty good story. I like the atmosphere, and there are almost no grammatical errors (I think?) Good read, thanks for the invite.

Author Reply: Thank you very much for your kind comment, Mike! Your feedback means a lot to me.

 

BeautyDarlingPrincess: OMG, that was like AWESOME! Ur so talented girl, keep on writing. Kisses xxx xxx xxx

Author Reply: Thank you so much, Nancy! And don’t be sad, Dennis wasn’t worth it, plenty of other fish in the sea :-))

 

Zhao Xiaorang: So that’s what we’ve come to. Sucking up to dead Nsheos. You bitch, sucking up to their filthy Big Mama makes you feel good, right, you traitor? You should’ve rotten with those accursed sorcerers, you alien-loving whore. You’re not worthy of your race. We don’t want such scum on this website!

Author Reply: I’m speechless… What have I done to deserve such hatred?

 

BeautyDarlingPrincess: Don’t pay attention sweetheart, he’s just a troll.

Author Reply: :-((

 

Obtuse_Serendipity: Undeniably, your talent is evident, albeit fragmentary. Your propensity to mythological hyperbole divulges your inclination towards expressionist decadence. As Forsythe R. Gainsborough put it, “The bacchanal of carnal lust is but the mirror of a decaying psyche”. Be well.

Author Reply: Thank you…

 

jcqwzxgrf:  Hi can u pls read my new story, its called “Vampiric Super Bikini Fighter Girl Ayatollah”, i really need feedback, thx a lot

Author Reply: Sure, I’ll get to it as soon as I’m done replying to the comments!

 

Yaniv Horshan: Psychocatlovr, I understand and respect your point of view, but I have to say that it is very biased in favor of Nsheos. Virtually all modern historians agree that there was no “genocide” to speak of. It is true that some Nsheos were wrongly accused of sorcery, but one cannot deny that in many cases their telepathic abilities were used to harm humans. As in most wars, atrocities were perpetrated on both sides. Please take that into consideration before you decide to falsify history. Greetings, Yaniv.

Author Reply: Hi Yaniv, I’m grateful for your insightful comment. However, I must ask you a simple question. You mention modern historians, and I ask you – whose historians? All our historians are human because there are no more Nsheos on the planet. Do you know why? Because we’ve killed them all. There is just no way around it, Yaniv. We have to confess to what we’ve done before it’s too late. Sometimes I wonder, what has happened to us? The first humans on Toliman were heroes. People like Jack and Harmony Lewis, Virginia Addams, Eli Horshan – I’m guessing you are his descendant, you must be so proud of him. And I’m sure he would’ve been horrified by what happened in those five hundred years if he were alive today. He was a friend of Nsheos and himself a master of telepathy. How come everyone keeps forgetting that?

 

smellydude: Rhaymond and Sylvana? This is so gay lol.

 

Goth_Despair~12^78: What’s with the Big Mama thing, are you promoting a cult? Such things shouldn’t even be allowed on this website. Religious propaganda should be banned from everywhere, I’m sick and tired of people like you who want to take away our liberty and force us to worship some non-existing entities worshipped in backwards societies.

Author Reply: There is no religious propaganda. I’m not forcing anyone to believe in Big Mama… I believe in Her because the holy books of Nsheos that describe Her are filled with kindness I haven’t seen among my fellow humans. They teach that Big Mama loves us and will save us if we love each other. Sorry if I sound harsh, but what do you have to offer that is better than that?..

 

Goth_Despair~12^78: Well, for once I don’t delude people with empty promises and fairy tales. Have you ever seen this Big Mama?

Author Reply: Have you ever seen your thoughts? Your feelings? Have you ever seen love, hope, faith? You can’t see those things. They are just there. I’m sorry you can’t feel it. I will pray for you.

 

JackLewisRocksMySocks: Wow, ur like 15 and u write so well. Congrats. U look real hot on ur profile. Do u have a boyfriend? Sorry no offense I don’t mean to be rude just want to know if u would date me. w00t.

Author Reply: Haha, no offense at all, but as a matter of fact I’m taken so… wish you good luck :)

 

Josh Krishnalinga: Passionately written and thought-provoking. The descriptions tend to be somewhat contrived in a few places. Also, “leapt” is archaic, the preferred past tense of “leap” is “leaped”. A bit too sentimental for my taste, but overall very impressive, especially considering your age. Keep on writing.

Author Reply: Thank you so much, Josh! I always appreciate constructive criticism!

 

Massage_Sexy_Cheap: Please e-mail me at massage_cheap_sexy@cheap_sexy_massage.com

 

Human Berserker: U R A DISGRACE TO UR RACE. U SHUD B PUNISHED 4 THIS SHIT ITS CALLED SLANDER LOOK IT UP, UR SPREADING LIES ABOUT OUR RACE WE KILLED THE ALIENS CUZ THERE SORCERY WAS DANGEROSE, UR 2 STUPID TO NO THAT GO LEARN HISTERY!!

Author Reply: It wasn’t sorcery. The Nsheos had telepathic abilities. They could read minds and create unique memories by connecting with humans. Eli Horshan learned telepathy from Nsheos and used it to help people. Other human beings, not Nsheos. It was only much later, when humans built the City and started living in it, that they neglected that spiritual connection and relied on technology. Then, naturally, we began to call those unique powers “magic”. We could not understand them anymore. When we humans don’t understand something, we always say it must be bad. We became suspicious. We severed our brotherly ties with our fellow creatures. And then, because of a stupid misunderstanding, an unfortunate incident for which both sides could be blamed, we’ve unleashed our newly acquired technology on an entire race. They were unprepared, and we’ve slaughtered them all. So what, exactly, is a disgrace to humanity here? I want us to acknowledge what we’ve done because I love my race. Does loving someone mean tolerating that person’s crimes? Sorry, that’s not my idea of love. If I love someone, I want that person to be GOOD. I’d do anything in my power to make him good, because only being good can make you happy.

 

Celsus Lucian44: You are a sentimental fool if that’s what you think.

Author Reply: Then I’m happy to be a sentimental fool.

 

freedommonkey: Can't anyone see what it's really about? It all started on Earth with the Templars, they discovered Solomon's secret treasure that was actually a Nsheo instruction on telepathy, that's why the Crusades started and then it was taken by the banks because the Jews control everything, Nikola Tesla tried to discover that but was killed by Freemasons who later became Nazis and also Presidents of the US, that's how the Gulf War started and later also the atomic bomb in 2121, guys go to www.theonlysecretplacefortruth.com, it's all there I'm telling you

Author Reply: I'm not that familiar with the history of Earth, sorry...

 

Yked2647: The outdated ideas expressed in this story astonish me. Your heroine is completely relying on the stereotypical man to comfort and save her. Look at the adjectives you are using for Sylvana – “soft” and “tender”, but always “strong” and “masculine” when you are describing the man. There is no credibility in your story at all, it’s ridiculous.

Author Reply: Rhaymond is based on somebody from real life... I prefer men that are masculine, is that wrong?

 

Patricia Roosevelt: You openly state your belief in a pagan deity. Interesting. I guess tradition means nothing to you. I thought you came from a Christian family?

Author Reply: That’s true. I don’t see a contradiction here. Nsheos believed in Big Mama, the loving Creator of the world. That’s God. There is no difference. Whoever loves has the Spirit of God. That’s my faith, and I don’t care how you call it.

 

dollface#: You’re so mean. You want everyone to die? That’s what you want? You want a giant alien monster to come here and destroy everything? That’s what you describe in your story. You must be a really mean and ugly person.

 

qwertyuiop: Who the hell is this girl, she shouldn’t be allowed online. We should report her. She is a real Nsheo sympathizer, I thought they died out?

 

Human_Pride_Forever: This fucking cunt and her fucking stories about human-killing sorcerers, let’s find out who she is and teach her a lesson! Human pride forever! Visit our website, www.humanprideforever.org

 

Yaniv Horshan: Please everyone, act civilized. She is only fifteen years old. Let’s try to calmly explain to her why she is wrong. Swearing will just push her further into delusion.

 

Patricia Roosevelt: She is not answering the comments anymore. Maybe she feels ashamed of her stories, but then she should delete them.

 

Celsus Lucian44: Hey folks, hate to be the party pooper, but is everything ok in your part of the City? Here in the Western District the sky looks really weird, it’s much darker than usual, and the color is strange.

 

qwertyuiop: Same here, I just looked out of the window! There are some strange shapes in the sky

 

Yaniv Horshan: Calm down everyone, it’s not the end of the world

 

dollface#: vefvbygyerfg

 

Celsus Lucian44: carp

 

Patricia Roosevelt: omg

 

THE END

 

 


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