The End of the World

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Science Fiction  |  House: Contently Deranged Travelers

A young girl living on the planet Proxima Centauri b posts a short story online that touches upon controversial history and provokes a heated discussion. Sequel to THE FORCE, INJIL IN JOULES, and



Short Story by: psychocatlovr51

Genre: Science Fiction

Submitted: May 21, 2666


This was the end.

A huge shadow hovered over the entire planet, black like the heart of a child murderer, distorted like the scream of a demon. It was as if Big Mama’s wrath had fallen upon an unfortunate abode of sinners. There was no escape. Sylvana knew that, but nothing could extinguish the burning hope in her heart.

“Quick!” Rhaymond cried out, clasping her gentle, delicate hand. His grip was masculine and reassuring. As always, it made Sylvana feel safe – even now, before the impending doom.

They leapt over a crevice and onto a larger rock towering over the desolate craggy coastline. From there, they could clearly see the outlines of a gigantic malevolent face, gazing upon them like an incarnated nightmare. They stood there, terror-stricken, awaiting their imminent death, saying goodbye to everything they had loved, prepared to be smitten by the horrifying hands of the enormous alien creature.

“Sylvana…” Rhaymond said, turning to her and gently placing his strong hands on her shoulders. “I’m so sorry…”

“Don’t be,” she spoke softly, caressing his handsome face. “We’ve done what we could. We’ve warned everyone. We’ve fulfilled our duty in the eyes of Big Mama. She shall welcome us in Her heavenly kingdom. And most importantly, we’ll stay together…”

“But this…” Rhaymond desperately pointed at the once proud City down in the valley, now lying in ruins, heavy smoke concealing its desecrated splendor. “They haven’t deserved that! There were little babies…”

“The Nsheos had babies as well,” she whispered, tears welling in her beautiful eyes.

Rhaymond was silent. He thought of the horrible destruction wrought by those who had claimed this planet as their own over five hundred years ago. He thought of the well-planned, flawlessly executed total extermination that had befallen the local inhabitants. And he knew that, for the sake of Big Mama and all of Her creation, for the sake of the entire cosmos, there had to be retribution and justice.

They embraced one final time, before the menacing beast raised its colossal foot and stamped on the ground, squashing the rocky surface and extinguishing the lives of the young lovers.






Mike D: This was a pretty good story. I like the atmosphere, and there are almost no grammatical errors (I think?) Good read, thanks for the invite.

Author Reply: Thank you very much for your kind comment, Mike! Your feedback means a lot to me.


BeautyDarlingPrincess: OMG, that was like AWESOME! Ur so talented girl, keep on writing. Kisses xxx xxx xxx

Author Reply: Thank you so much, Nancy! And don’t be sad, Dennis wasn’t worth it, plenty of other fish in the sea :-))


Zhao Xiaorang: So that’s what we’ve come to. Sucking up to dead Nsheos. You bitch, sucking up to their filthy Big Mama makes you feel good, right, you traitor? You should’ve rotten with those accursed sorcerers, you alien-loving whore. You’re not worthy of your race. We don’t want such scum on this website!

Author Reply: I’m speechless… What have I done to deserve such hatred?


BeautyDarlingPrincess: Don’t pay attention sweetheart, he’s just a troll.

Author Reply: :-((


Obtuse_Serendipity: Undeniably, your talent is evident, albeit fragmentary. Your propensity to mythological hyperbole divulges your inclination towards expressionist decadence. As Forsythe R. Gainsborough put it, “The bacchanal of carnal lust is but the mirror of a decaying psyche”. Be well.

Author Reply: Thank you…


jcqwzxgrf:  Hi can u pls read my new story, its called “Vampiric Super Bikini Fighter Girl Ayatollah”, i really need feedback, thx a lot

Author Reply: Sure, I’ll get to it as soon as I’m done replying to the comments!


Yaniv Horshan: Psychocatlovr, I understand and respect your point of view, but I have to say that it is very biased in favor of Nsheos. Virtually all modern historians agree that there was no “genocide” to speak of. It is true that some Nsheos were wrongly accused of sorcery, but one cannot deny that in many cases their telepathic abilities were used to harm humans. As in most wars, atrocities were perpetrated on both sides. Please take that into consideration before you decide to falsify history. Greetings, Yaniv.

Author Reply: Hi Yaniv, I’m grateful for your insightful comment. However, I must ask you a simple question. You mention modern historians, and I ask you – whose historians? All our historians are human because there are no more Nsheos on the planet. Do you know why? Because we’ve killed them all. There is just no way around it, Yaniv. We have to confess to what we’ve done before it’s too late. Sometimes I wonder, what has happened to us? The first humans on Toliman were heroes. People like Jack and Harmony Lewis, Virginia Addams, Eli Horshan – I’m guessing you are his descendant, you must be so proud of him. And I’m sure he would’ve been horrified by what happened in those five hundred years if he were alive today. He was a friend of Nsheos and himself a master of telepathy. How come everyone keeps forgetting that?


smellydude: Rhaymond and Sylvana? This is so gay lol.


Goth_Despair~12^78: What’s with the Big Mama thing, are you promoting a cult? Such things shouldn’t even be allowed on this website. Religious propaganda should be banned from everywhere, I’m sick and tired of people like you who want to take away our liberty and force us to worship some non-existing entities worshipped in backwards societies.

Author Reply: There is no religious propaganda. I’m not forcing anyone to believe in Big Mama… I believe in Her because the holy books of Nsheos that describe Her are filled with kindness I haven’t seen among my fellow humans. They teach that Big Mama loves us and will save us if we love each other. Sorry if I sound harsh, but what do you have to offer that is better than that?


Goth_Despair~12^78: Well, for once I don’t delude people with empty promises and fairy tales. Have you ever seen this Big Mama?

Author Reply: Have you ever seen your thoughts? Your feelings? Have you ever seen love, hope, faith? You can’t see those things. They are just there. I’m sorry you can’t feel it. I will pray for you.


JackLewisRocksMySocks: Wow, ur like 15 and u write so well. Congrats. U look real hot on ur profile. Do u have a boyfriend? Sorry no offense I dont mean to be rude just want to know if u would date me. w00t.

Author Reply: Haha, no offense at all, but as a matter of fact I’m taken so… wish you good luck :)


Josh Krishnalinga: Passionately written and thought-provoking. The descriptions tend to be somewhat contrived in a few places. Also, “leapt” is archaic, the preferred past tense of “leap” is “leaped”. A bit too sentimental for my taste, but overall very impressive, especially considering your age. Keep on writing.

Author Reply: Thank you so much, Josh! I always appreciate constructive criticism!


Massage_Sexy_Cheap: Please e-mail me at



Author Reply: It wasn’t sorcery. The Nsheos had telepathic abilities. They could read minds and create unique memories by connecting with humans. Eli Horshan learned telepathy from Nsheos and used it to help people. Other human beings, not Nsheos. It was only much later, when humans built the City and started living in it, that they neglected that spiritual connection and relied on technology. Then, naturally, we began to call those unique powers “magic”. We could not understand them anymore. When we humans don’t understand something, we always say it must be bad. We became suspicious. We severed our brotherly ties with our fellow creatures. And then, because of a stupid misunderstanding, an unfortunate incident for which both sides could be blamed, we’ve unleashed our newly acquired technology on an entire race. They were unprepared, and we’ve slaughtered them all. So what, exactly, is a disgrace to humanity here? I want us to acknowledge what we’ve done because I love my race. Does loving someone mean tolerating that person’s crimes? Sorry, that’s not my idea of love. If I love someone, I want that person to be GOOD. I’d do anything in my power to make him good, because only being good can make you happy.


Celsus Lucian44: You are a sentimental fool if that’s what you think.

Author Reply: Then I’m happy to be a sentimental fool.


freedommonkey: Can't anyone see what it's really about? It all started on Earth with the Templars, they discovered Solomon's secret treasure that was actually a Nsheo instruction on telepathy, that's why the Crusades started and then it was taken by the banks because the Jews control everything, Nikola Tesla tried to discover that but was killed by Freemasons who later became Nazis and also Presidents of the US, that's how the Gulf War started and later also the atomic bomb in 2121, guys go to, it's all there I'm telling you

Author Reply: I'm not that familiar with the history of Earth, sorry...


Yked2647: The outdated ideas expressed in this story astonish me. Your heroine is completely relying on the stereotypical man to comfort and save her. Look at the adjectives you are using for Sylvana – “soft” and “tender”, but always “strong” and “masculine” when you are describing the man. There is no credibility in your story at all, it’s ridiculous.

Author Reply: Rhaymond is based on somebody from real life... I prefer men that are masculine, is that wrong?


Patricia Roosevelt: You openly state your belief in a pagan deity. Interesting. I guess tradition means nothing to you. I thought you came from a Christian family?

Author Reply: That’s true. I don’t see a contradiction here. Nsheos believed in Big Mama, the loving Creator of the world. That’s God. There is no difference. Whoever loves has the Spirit of God. That’s my faith, and I don’t care how you call it.


dollface#: You’re so MEAN. You want everyone to DIE? THAT’S what you want? You want a giant alien MONSTER to come here and DESTROY everything? That’s what you describe in YOUR story. You must be a really mean and UGLY person.


qwertyuiop: Who the hell is this girl, she shouldn’t be allowed online. We should report her. She is a real Nsheo sympathizer, I thought they died out?


Human_Pride_Forever: This fucking cunt and her fucking stories about human-killing sorcerers, let’s find out who she is and teach her a lesson! Human pride forever! Visit our website,


Yaniv Horshan: Please everyone, act civilized. She is only fifteen years old. Let’s try to calmly explain to her why she is wrong. Swearing will just push her further into delusion.


Patricia Roosevelt: She is not answering the comments anymore. Maybe she feels ashamed of her stories, but then she should delete them.


Celsus Lucian44: Hey folks, hate to be the party pooper, but is everything ok in your part of the City? Here in the Western District the sky looks really weird, it’s much darker than usual, and the color is strange.


qwertyuiop: Same here, I just looked out of the window! There are some strange shapes in the sky


Yaniv Horshan: Calm down everyone, it’s not the end of the world


dollface#: vefvbygyerfg


Celsus Lucian44: carp


Patricia Roosevelt: omg



Submitted: May 21, 2016

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B Douglas Slack

Wonderful, Oleg! Simply wonderful. The story itself was great, but the comments that followed were the highlight of the post. The usernames seemed very apt for their respective comments. You even slipped in soem spam, something we have to deal with here occasionally. Throughout is all, you "author" kept a calm face toward the naysayers. I loved it.


Sat, May 21st, 2016 6:46pm


Thank you so much for your kind feedback, Tom! I'm glad you liked it. I suddenly had this weird idea to write a story in a "Booksie format", with a "story within a story"...

Sat, May 21st, 2016 7:05pm


Brilliant story, Oleg! The way you wrote it as a post complete with comments was really original. And I have to say, some of those comments were so realistic! Pretty philosophical there too, with the invaders becoming the invaded. Can I give it 10 out of 10?!!

Sat, May 21st, 2016 8:42pm


Thank you so much!.. This is my most unusually structured story so far, and I'm really afraid people won't like the format... so glad you enjoyed it!

Sat, May 21st, 2016 7:02pm

Amy R. Beckett

A great concept for a short story. Personally I really like the structure, although is there any way you could format it a little differently, just to separate the story from the comments a little more? I just feel I wanted it a little more spaced apart...

The content is very thought-provoking and shines an interesting light on ideas of faith, creativity, and online forums, among other things. The twist at the end was brilliant :)

Another brilliant short story. Well done!

Sun, May 22nd, 2016 7:04am


Thank you for your kind feedback, Amy! At first I italicized all the comments, but it was really hard on the eyes... Maybe just a bigger space between the story and the word "COMMENTS"?

Sun, May 22nd, 2016 12:12am


This was a pretty good story. I like the atmosphere, and there are almost no grammatical errors (I think?) Good read!

But seriously, you've quickly risen your way to my list of favourite authors on booksie, and this story is sublime. It's very experimental, and maybe it's not some people's cup of tea, but I think it worked brilliantly, and I think being on a similar site as psychocatlovr perhaps helps us relate that much more. I've never seen anything like it, writing a fictional story inside a fictional story and then the protagonist replying to fictional comments...genius! And again, the lore is extensive and complex, and I only wish I have read more of you stories so that I could be more involved in them, for example to see who's side I am on; is this girl right about the Nsheos or is she deluded? It's hard not to take her side when the majority of comments are as they are, but then is this an unfair bias on my side, since majority does not equal right or wrong...and now I'm starting to sound like Obtuse Serendipity.

Moving on, it was great how you injected a different personality into each commenter, full with their own set of beliefs. Again, it's quite relatable which makes it all the more humourous when we see the spammers and the trolls and the people with anger issues, and you can't help but sympathise with her when you see some of the messages.

I also liked how the plot slowly developed, starting from her getting compliments (from people she seems to know) to attacks and then more information being revealed through the debate in a way that seemed completely natural and yet let the reader understand more.

My only criticism would be the end. That was the only part that didn't seem believable to me. It's possible that some people would actually do it, but if it was 'the end of the world', or at least some calamity going on outside their windows, I don't think many people would still be on their computers talking about it, perhaps to find out more information about what it could be, but not to write things redundant like 'no nonono' and 'oh crap'.

There was one other thing, but it's not for you. Unlike Mike D, I found one error in her story, where 'The' should have been 'They'. I was going to tell her, but I think she's been through enough.

This was a great read, and very refreshing, it makes me want to experiment more with styles, despite the fact that after reading this I think I'm not going to be able to write a comment without thinking of this story and which personality I am invoking!

Sun, May 22nd, 2016 11:30am


OMG, u r like AWESOME, ur comment rulz lol :p

Seriously... I don't know how to thank you fir this amazing comment, it's definitely the longest one I've received (so far? :)), and honestly I didn't expect such praise for this very experimental work. I'm very grateful.

Bummer about the ending, indeed; I've edited it many times, yet I agree, it couldn't match the rest in quality. In my defense, I have to say that their comments were posted BEFORE the monster actually attacked the planet. They were surprised to see the weird sky and were just beginning to realize something was very wrong.

As for the Nsheos, you can derive fragmentary information about them (and about the humans she mentions) from my short story "The Force". A short response would be: the girl is mostly right, and her accusers are mostly wrong. It's not that simple, though. I'll definitely write more stories in this sub-setting.

Sun, May 22nd, 2016 5:21am

Erica Pensini

The start is promising, do you have an idea of how the plot will develop or will you let it unravel one turn at a time, without a completely defined map?

Sun, May 22nd, 2016 11:44am


This is not the start... It's the whole story :) If you are referring to my entire cycle of short stories, then yes, I so have a plan, but I don't always follow it ;)

If you want to know more about the planet Toliman and its inhabitants, check out my short story "The Force". I plan to write more stories in this sub-setting.

Sun, May 22nd, 2016 6:22am

Chris Green

Delightfully unconventional story structure, oleg and a narrative spiced with wit and wisdom and I absolutely love the running blog at the end. Some great comments. This is a first class effort. I wish more writers would break the mould and have a go at something different

Sun, May 22nd, 2016 2:22pm


Thank you so much, Chris! To tell you the truth, I was awaiting comments for this story with many doubts in my heart, because I wasn't sure whether the unusual structure really worked. The people here are very kind, and I'm very flattered to receive praise from first-rate writers such as yourself.

Sun, May 22nd, 2016 8:22am


This story was so full of suspense that actually gave me the chills while I was reading it, and I didn't want to stop.
Loved it! Very good job! :D

Sun, May 22nd, 2016 6:22pm


Thank you very much for your kind words, Ana! :-)

Mon, May 23rd, 2016 2:45am


First of all, I really loved your story. There were so many dimensions to it even though it was simply for the most part based on comments. But that's what made it so rich, I think. The dialogue reflects a lot of the personalities I see all over the internet today which I found humorous, philosophical and interesting. I love some of the authors counter arguments to the points people made. I see this type of stuff (i.e. defense of genocide) in society today and thought the author handled each comment with aplomb. This is definitely one of my favorites.

Sun, May 22nd, 2016 9:37pm


Your kind feedback is always appreciated, Dots. Stubborn denial of tragic historical facts seems to be a current trend in more than one country, and certain ideologies like rewriting history as they see fit. I plan to write more stories dealing with those issues.

Mon, May 23rd, 2016 2:45am


So is this like a future version of Booksie? And is that how we here one Booksie/internet in general would react if the world was ending? Kinda sad, how they spent their last moments making posts. I feel really bad for the author, though. Such a kind author. If you can't say anything good, then just shut up and let the nice people do the talking. That's what I live by. And I think that the way you wrote this is a truly remarkable and unexpected style...I like it! You can really feel the emotion of everyone online, and I'm scratching my head at how you managed to convey so much colour and feeling through trolling and comments. Thanks for the quickee, I enjoyed this a bunch. Seeya around! ~DJ

Sun, May 22nd, 2016 10:11pm


Thanks a lot for your kind feedback, DJ! I'm not sure whether this website is really Booksie in 27th century, since our Internet, as we know it, will be destroyed in the year 2121 alongside the entire human civilization, according to my stories. But of course I wrote it with our current reality in mind. It looks like humans never learn.

Mon, May 23rd, 2016 2:43am

Ethan Howard

The End of the World

The only time I have read a story close to this format was from the late, great, Richard Matheson.

Well done.

I like your premise. History is written by the victors and not the victims. And again you give the message that there is room for every religion as long as there is kindness and tolerance; which CLEARLY those posters were lacking.

The mix of such a serious subject with humor was an equally nice touch.

The ending was satisfying and gloomy.

Did the girl have a prophetic vison on what would happen or was she a messenger for a higher power?

Mon, May 23rd, 2016 2:05am


Thank you for your feedback, Ethan, always appreciate it!

The girl had prophetic vision, but she didn't know that. I'm not sure whether the real-life ending was exactly the same as described in her short story, but it was definitely complete destruction of the planet and annihilation of all its inhabitants (as confirmed by my short story "Redemption").

You reap what you sow. Commit a genocide like that and it's going to backfire sooner or later. Somebody tell that to Rex Tallion ;-)

Mon, May 23rd, 2016 2:40am


This is such a tragic piece! :( It was a suspenseful read, kept me at the edge of my seat the whole time. Beautiful execution of the story of Rhaymond and Sylvana :) Overall, this is a wonderful short story. Great job, Oleg! :)


Mon, May 23rd, 2016 9:46am


Thank you so much for your support, Big Bang. I don't know why I keep writing about tragic stuff - quite a few of my stories end with death, and those that keep bright tones throughout (such as "The Force", to which this story is a sequel), seem to be unpopular ;)

This must be the most tragic story I've written so far. Even in "Scarlet Beast", which describes the beginning of the nuclear war on Earth in 2121, there are survivors... but not here.

Mon, May 23rd, 2016 2:50am

James Kingston

A Very Nice and Gripping Story. The finale might have been rather negative, but I guess it fulfilled the purpose of the General Meaning. It was interesting and very pleasant to read. -James Kingston

Mon, May 23rd, 2016 5:42pm


Thank you very much for your kind feedback, James!

Mon, May 23rd, 2016 8:01pm

Megan Fox

Loved it, Oleg. I must admit to being a bit disconcerted when I started reading the comments; thinking it a slight deviation into tangential areas but by the time I'd read the first few I realised you were treating it as a full-blown cause and effect.
Galaxial domination necessarily comes with genocide of any species who may be a threat to the conquering tyrannies (I am reading Asimov's Foundation series and it fit in well with my current frame of mind). PS: There was no chance I understood a word he wrote when I was 15. The blog aspect revealed what I would consider to be a normal response on the world wide web in these days of twitter, snapchat etc. It was an interesting technique writing as a 15 year old girl in this instance with all the harsh realities of realistic replies. A friend's daughter wrote a short story, she is only 12, and was subjected to spiteful comments along these lines on another site. I was quite horrified and went into bat with some moderating and have steered the young lass in question over to Booksie where people generally tend to be more proactive and thoughtful in their commentary.
Well written, great comments. Nicely done

Tue, May 24th, 2016 5:17am


Thank you so much for your insightful comment, Megan!

Actually, what happened on Toliman wasn't a result of galaxial domination or anything like that. The humans on that planet were descendants of good people - a handful of space travelers escaping a nuclear war on Earth, who had no intention at all to harm - let alone exterminate - the Nsheos. Rather, spiritual degradation (which I intend to portray in one of my future stories) caused the descendants of those people to embrace the dark side. They had no practical reason for killing Nsheos; in fact, they lost their new spiritual powers because of that...

Mon, May 23rd, 2016 11:08pm


I adored the amount of originality that you brought with this piece. As strange as it may be, I think it shows that the end of the world would be similar to this; people communicated about it through the Internet.

Tue, May 24th, 2016 5:11pm


Thank you very much for your feedback! To be fair, though, they weren't communicating about the end of the world; even the author herself didn't know about it and was honestly convinced it was just fiction.

Tue, May 24th, 2016 7:53pm


Very original format. I loved it! It was a nice story and the comments were amazing. I love how you took the time to add spams in there! Ha ha. Really nice read, thanks for the invite!

Wed, May 25th, 2016 9:28am


I always appreciate your kind feedback, Chloe, and looking forward to reading more of your excellent work. Glad you noticed the spam ;-) I tried to make it as realistic as possible, so I've recalled some of the most common internet types - the polite, well-meaning individual, the aggressive troll, the cute best friend, the conspiracy nut, and more... including, of course, the omnipresent spammer :-)

Originally, I've inserted a comment written in Chinese, but Booksie won't display it correctly for some reason, so I had to remove it :-(

Wed, May 25th, 2016 2:43am

Teddy Kimathi

Wow!!!! A really awesome piece!!! It felt so real....I wonder, as your story ended, was that a Nsheo invasion? Did some Nsheos escape, then they embraced technology to fight back their slayers, us humans?

Wed, May 25th, 2016 11:35am


Thank you for your kind feedback, Teddy! I have't decided yet who or what that huge cosmic creature really is, but one thing is certain - it has nothing to do with Nsheos. Most probably, no Nsheos survived the human-perpetrated genocide. I'll be writing more stories about them; meanwhile, I hope you can check out my short story "The Force", where one Nsheo makes an important appearance with his mind-affecting abilities.

Wed, May 25th, 2016 6:14am

Mel Malo

That was beautifully depressing. I love how you compacted so much information in one short story. It makes me wish I knew more of the back story of the lovers and their journey up until that point. You portrayed emotion in a way I always strove for as a writer.

Wed, May 25th, 2016 1:16pm


Thank you so much for your kind feedback, Mel! Funny thing is, I never even thought whether the opening story was any good; for me, it was all about the comments. I also tried to make that story a bit sappy and overly emotional, the way I imagine a real 15-year-old girl would write it... I really have no idea about the background of those two young people, except that they are obviously based on the author herself and her boyfriend, that they are the descendants of human colonizers of Toliman, and that they were killed by a giant space monster, just as it happened in real life some time afterwards...

Wed, May 25th, 2016 7:18am

Mel Malo

And of course the "comments" at the end were hilarious.

Wed, May 25th, 2016 1:19pm

Chris Cross

How original! It's something of a performance to put oneself in so many people's shoes. I also like the story very much, the way you describe the characters and their feelings. As well as the ominous signs expressed in the last comments, which tend to prove once again that Nature imitates art...

Wed, May 25th, 2016 2:28pm


Thanks a lot for your kind feedback, Chris! I've always loved imitating other people's writing styles, mannerisms, accents etc., so I was rejoiced when I thought of the fake Internet comment format, where I could engage in boundless mimicry with impunity :-)

Wed, May 25th, 2016 8:41am


I really liked the ending! I don't know how many people will get very close & intimate with it... I tried an experiment of a similar style with a couple of my works, & found that all of my support and readers comments went away! I hope you get good reception!

Wed, May 25th, 2016 8:03pm


Wow, I'm surprised, I actually don't like the ending myself! ;-) I did try to create something chillingly horrifying, so thanks for noticing the effort :) Always appreciate your kind feedback, Spyguy!

Wed, May 25th, 2016 7:35pm

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