The Descent from Paradise

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Fantasy  |  House: Booksie Classic

Faced with a prophetic dream that might change the course of destiny of her world forever, Cerefin Lastiana, an angelic goddess, must break the rules of the angels and went down into the realms of mortal, to finally discover the truth behind her vision, and the dark forces behind them. Although what she will find there is not certain, new experiences and feelings of love like that Cerefin had never felt before will be sure to await her.

* I owe my thanks to The Unicorn for coming up with this wonderful book cover for my story! You can view her other works here: https://www.booksie.com/475136-book-covers-for-free-chapter-58

Table of Contents

Prophecy of the Harbingers

“This above all: to thine own self be true,  And it must follow, as the night the day,  Thou canst not then be false to any man.”  -William Shakespeare, Hamlet
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The Realm of Naphrael

“God hides the fires of hell within paradise.”
- Paulo Coelho, By the River Piedra I Sat Down and Wept
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The Journey Through Duscairn

“If I had a flower for every time I thought of you...I could walk through my garden forever.” 
-Alfred Tennyson
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The Bustling Forest Roads

Despite the fact that a day had passed, Cerefin still could not stop thinking about that kiss, the kiss she had with William.  ... Read Chapter

The White City of Sinolas

“It was love at first sight, at last sight, at ever and ever sight.”  -Vladimir Nabokov, Lolita
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An Uprising of the Damned

“I was walking among the fires of Hell, delighted with the enjoyments of Genius; which to Angels look like torment and insanity.”  - William Blake
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The Fallen Angel

“We be light, we be life, we be fire! We sing electric flame, we rumble underground wind, we dance heaven! Come be we and be free!”
- Kate Griffin, A Madness of Angels
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The Goddess of Naphrael

“Love does not begin and end the way we seem to think it does. Love is a battle, love is a war; love is a growing up.”  - James Baldwin
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Hymns of Heaven and Earth

“Hope
Smiles from the threshold of the year to come,
Whispering 'it will be happier'...”
- Alfred Tennyson
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Recent Comments

Katherine M

Hi! I'm a new member of the review chain and I saw that you had posted your book....

First off I'd like to say that I really enjoyed this chapter and how you opened it with Cerefin's vision thus foreshadowing future events in the book. I'm wondering if she will be the "Divine goddess who moves earth with her mind," or just the character whom brings the group together and sets her own prophecy into motion? Based off of her having to knock the guards out and sneak through the door I'm guessing that angels aren't allowed to meddle with the fates of "lesser beings?" I'm betting she winds up in trouble for this...I can't say that I like Lylevin much, he's obviously up to something!
Your descriptions of the land and people are marvelous, especially the Grand Divinator.

I hope you don't mind but I left a few grammar related comments throughout your chapter. Nothing major just a few suggestions that you're more than welcome to discard if you do not agree with them.

One thing I wasn't sure about was when you switched from Niveron's viewpoint to Cerefin waiting to knock out the guards. It took me a second to realize that you had swapped characters and locations. Maybe add a "Meanwhile a few halls down...(I'm guessing that the gate is located in the same building.) Or have it where Niveron and Lylevin hear a disturbance and pick up with Cerefin causing the disturbance and jumping through the gate in front of her brother?

Thanks for the read I really enjoyed it! And feel free to let me know if I left something out of the review, it's my first one for this House. :)

-Katherine

Sun, October 9th, 2016 10:38pm

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Thank you so much for the review, K. M., I truly appreciate your feedback! It is really nice for you to point out the grammatical errors that I have made in the chapter, for I just realized how many mistakes I have made and looked over lol. Your compliment on the story's introduction had really made my day, and made me remember why I had started writing in the first place!

Wed, October 12th, 2016 1:15am

Alba Regia

S'up, dude! Is everything ok? So... I'm fron review chain group and I saw your post about this and you were asking for a review, right?

Well, I liked it pretty much overall. I loved the way you describe the scenarios and the characters clothing. I also think the names you give them are pretty creative. I think you should keep that up.

But some things bothered me a little bit: Sometimes I have some difficulties to understand where the talking begins and where it ends. You use quotation marks and since i read things quickly, sometimes i just doesn't see them, and... Well... I have to go back and read again

Anyway, I'll keep reading the other chapters and post some comments on them. I really liked it

Sun, November 13th, 2016 11:34pm

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Thank you so much for the feedback, Alba Regia. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter! I will definitely keep up the good work.

Sun, November 13th, 2016 7:03pm

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