JOURNEY OF AN AUTUMN LEAF

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

Gust of wind begins to blow
Severing my ties with nest
Plummet I to ground below
My last journey on the planet.

JOURNEY OF AN AUTUMN LEAF

 

Scorching is the sun

And dry is the win’

I am left the last one

Of my kith and kin.

 

I’m born a green speck

On my mother bough

I am not to bedeck

Like sister flowers I love.

 

Though born before

Sister flower is the one

Endowed from times yore

With all hues under sun.

 

Always provided food

To my entire family

Scorched by sun I stood

But I served affably.

 

None granted a favour

Nor did I ask for any

Dignity, I saw in labour

Comfort? I care tuppenny.

 

Scorching sun takes toll

Dries up my abode

Hanging by thread of soul

Watching spirits erode.

 

Parched and dry is my skin

Crackling is my voice

Nary a brother nor a kin

To prance, sing, and rejoice.

 

Not much time left for me

To give up and let go

Sibs on branch, I don’t see

Withered they have, Lo!

 

Gust of wind begins to blow

Severing my ties with nest

Plummet I to ground below

My last journey on the planet.

 

***

... by Shyam Sundar Bulusu

 


Submitted: September 10, 2016

© Copyright 2021 shyam sundar bulusu. All rights reserved.

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Archia

I loved the way you described a leaf falling in Autumn, and you made it seem like something so much more. The rhyme was nice but I think because you kept switching which lines rhymed it didn't keep a strong flow. Each stanza had rhyme but you switched between the first/third lines rhyming and the second/fourth and you did do this in a pattern but it each time it changed it broke the flow. Even though you have a consistent pattern of first/third lines rhyming and then second/fourth lines rhyming it's too difficult of a pattern to allow the mind to just flow along with it easily. A small thing to note; you mentiond the scorching sun a couple of times but I believe leaves dry up and fall in Autumn because there isn't enough sun. A scorching sun doesn't really suit an Autumn feel. Regardless though this was a lovely poem. I enjoyed so much seeing the journey of the leaf and how you gave it a life so much more complex than just a leaf. It was really beautiful for that.

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