Fate's Plaything

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Fantasy  |  House: Booksie Classic

In life people make choices, some hard, some easy.
Some are made in favor of oneself, some in favor of others.

What if you have the skill or knowledge to help those around you, are you obligated to act in their favor?
Is it truly selfish to choose one's own life over those of others?

Table of Contents

Endings

Chapter One - Endings I was playing in the wind over the dunes. There was a hard onshore wind blowing steadily the ocean to... Read Chapter

Tears

Very little dialogue in this chapter so hang in there.
I hope it does not make it slow. Read Chapter


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Recent Comments

Shawn "Critta" Nyquist

Great start. Only got hung up on a few spots with the wording. Looking forward to the rest.

Wed, September 14th, 2016 4:33pm

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Thank you for reading!
The wording is something that has bothered me. I'll run through everything again to try and improve that!

Wed, September 14th, 2016 11:04am

UnicornMom

First of I want to give you a great round of applause. Even though your first language is not English, I feel your writing is remarkable probably better than some people that have used English their entire lives. Secondly, you have a gift for creating mystery and suspense. You didn't give everything about "the Touch" right away as some do have the tendency to do that. You held back and showed great restraint. While I do agree with the above commentator that some wording was a bit confusing, it didn't detract my overall enjoyment of the story. I will admit it did start slow, but after finishing the chapter I understand why. I do hope you continue as I want to know more about Cian and what happens to him. Great job hun

Wed, September 14th, 2016 5:00pm

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Thank you so much for these wonderful words!
It was very much my intention to let the flow of information be natural. Not introducing some hermit who shares all his knowledge. That far too convenient. So it makes me happy it is appreciated!

I will try to find the parts that are confusing and correct them. With that i hope to improve my writing skill! So thanks again.

Wed, September 14th, 2016 12:03pm

B Douglas Slack

This is a great first chapter, Rorick. I can clearly visualize what you want to say, and your command of English is very impressive as a second language. I stopped editing after the first paragraph and simply enjoyed the story.

I will send you a PM.

~Tom

Wed, September 14th, 2016 9:56pm

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I really appreciate that you read the chapter! and thank you especially for the 'Icomments' in the first paragraph! It's already a big help! I hope i will improve my vocabulary more and more and use it to improve my story telling!

Thu, September 15th, 2016 7:49am

merryday

Read the first chapter, it was nice. Good English. If you want you can take help of grammarly.com to check your punctuation marks or some other errors.
I am new here too. I wrote an article. Read it if you want--------- Negativity and Positivity.. Hope you like it.
Your book is very good will read other chapters too :)

Thu, September 29th, 2016 3:09pm

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Thank you so much for reading and the tips, i'll be sure to check grammerly more often.
I know of it, but still need to get more familiar with the correct usage, so it will definately help!
I'll be sure to do so!

Tue, April 11th, 2017 11:55am

Miss Midnight

Phew, what an emotional roller-coaster. Your writing is easy to follow and doesn't feel forced. The chapter is a decent length and kept my interest throughout, no painful incoherent babble just to make the chapter longer, hooray, lol. I'm very curious to see where this all leads to and what Cian's magical power is. Excellent chapter!

Mon, January 23rd, 2017 10:03am

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Thank you so much! Glad to hear that. Having someone enjoy your writing is what most of us are aiming for!
I've uploaded the next chapter, but for a while i'll stop there and work on the continuation of the story.
Thank you so much again!

Tue, April 11th, 2017 11:52am

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