End Of The Story (Zombie Apocalypse)

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Action and Adventure  |  House: Surviving the Apocalypse

The Zombie Apocalypse is here, and this time, it features characters from the Fairy-Tales and Stories you might have heard or read as a kid. Thanks for reading and feel free to comment some characters you want to see in the book.

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The Longbow

Chapter Two: The Longbow ‘The Boys are amazing builders’ Red says. ‘That shed over there was built by Zack and Mark.’ Red c... Read Chapter

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RyanDye

wow that chapter was awesome

Tue, October 4th, 2016 9:04pm

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Thanks you so much Ryan, I really appreciate you reading it. Your comment really makes me want to continue writing :)

Tue, October 4th, 2016 10:17pm

FictionReader

So far for your first chapter its not bad I enjoyed reading it and have done a reading session on it with me reading it into a mic Overall great job keep it up!

Wed, October 5th, 2016 12:21am

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I am really happy you enjoyed it, I didn't even expect anyone to even read it to be honest, even less to enjoy it and take the time to comment :)

Tue, October 4th, 2016 10:16pm

Hsien W Lou

Hi Nickosaurous, I think you have something going here. It is an interesting read but needs more description to the environment and the characters. Personally, when I go into dialogue, I tend to break it up so it's easier for the reader. I would describe who the protagonist is - he sounds like he is a father - roughly 28+ years old and get the reader comfortable with him and some of his thought processes. Also, it's a war- zombie zone so a good description would to compare the previous peaceful surroundings with the current deteriorated area - like the supermarket was once filled items (you could write groceries or other stuff in the supermarket) but now it is empty. We are stuck inside, afraid to go out. I think you could definitely continue this and make it more vibrant to the reader, making it seems like they are in the situation.

Sat, October 8th, 2016 8:41pm

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Hello Hsien,
I Really appreciate you taking the time to comment, and your comment helps me out a lot.
I Think you are completely right in what you are saying.
This is my first try at writing a book so I'm trying to figure as much out as I can while I'm writing the story. I will try to make things a bit more detailed and explained. The characters are supposed to be learned more about the further into the story you get. That is also why the name of the protagonist is kept from you in the begin.
Once again, thanks so much for the tips. :)

Sat, October 8th, 2016 1:58pm

devonandrew

First thing, it is great. It really draws you in, butttttttt. Next issue I'm hoping to see you mix up the word zombie, it is used quite a lot in this chapter, and you should space out your writing in paragraphs to make it a bit easier to read, the story is spot on I really like that aspect very creative :)

Sun, October 9th, 2016 12:00pm

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Thanks for reading, commenting and above all, the advice. I don't know how I can improve the Conversations the most, but I will try to make it more clear. I will try to make people use different terms for 'Zombies' as I think you are completely right with that advice. Once again, Thanks for the tips and the motivating comment :)

Sun, October 9th, 2016 5:50am

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