The Grim Rider: Issue one

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The story begins with a fight scene between three people two guys with angel wings, and a guy wearing a black leather jacket and hood wearing a Winter Soldier type mask and fighting with a big scythe. The guy with the scythe is our main character, Carter Gray. After the fight scene ends Carter has a flashback about all the crap that happened before his fight. Right now it is where he first gets his powers

Submitted: October 06, 2016

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PAGEONE (four panels)

Panel 1. The first Frame opens up to reveal a large canyon in the desert where news helicopters are all flying in the sky filming what appears to be 3 people fighting, they are surrounded by three different armies making a circle around the three warriors . One is made up of demonic looking creatures and monsters and another made up of angelic looking beings with glowing armour and weapons.

Panel 2. One of the three warriors is a teenager wielding a scythe, wearing a black leather jacket and a hoodie, a backpack, pants, black military boots, and a lower face mask with a skeleton design on it. The second one is a golden haired angel with white wings, wearing silver and gold plated armor and wielding a large sword. The third one is an angel with black wings and black hair, wearing dark colored armor and wielding a three pointed trident. All three are in defensive/offensive fighting stances.

Panel 3. The golden haired man is the first one to attack; he flies into the air, then comes speeding down and is about to strike, yelling as he comes down.

GOLDEN HAIRED MAN:

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH!!!!

Panel 4.Both the man and teenager’s blades strike, The teenager’s scythe has turned into a sword and he parries the blow from the blonde man’s blade, feints left, then strikes at the golden haired man. The man attempts to block and is knocked off balance. There’s sparks as the blades hit.

 

PAGETWO (five panels)

Panel 1. The teenager kicks the second man back and connects with a right cross to his nose.

Panel 2. He then throws a roundhouse kick to the man’s ribs, sending him flying a few yards away.

Panel 3. The Dark haired man then lunges at the teenager with a furious look on his face, his weapon ready to strike.

Panel 4. The teenager dodges the attack, and the man flies past him crashing into the canyon wall, causing it to explode.

SFX:
“FWU-THOOM!!!”

Panel 5. Now the blonde man is trying to stab the teenager in the back while he isn’t looking.  He is about to thrust his sword into the teenager’s back with two hands.

 

PAGETHREE (four panels)

Panel 1. The blonde man is standing there looking around with a face that says, “what the hell”, and a black shadowy shape is on the ground that is moving incredibly fast below the blond mans legs.

Panel 2. The teenager jumps up out of the shadow and leaps over the blonde man while placing an a metal disc on the blonde mans back while upside down. The teenager says something and the blonde man responds.

THE TEENAGER (distorted):
“You never learn Mikey!--”

MICHAEL:

“--Huh?”

Panel 3. A side view of the two, Michael says something with an amused/cocky smile as Carter lands on the ground low with both of his feet behind him and one hand out front of him with finger drag marks out in front of him.

MICHAEL:
“Was that supposed to do something?!--”

Panel 4. Carter pulls out a detonator and clicks the button with his thumb

SFX:

“CLICK”

 

PAGEFOUR (four panels)

Panel 1. An explosion blasts Michael away a few hundred feet.

SFX:
“KA-BOOOMM”

Panel 2. The Dark Haired man punches Carter in the face and says something.

DARK HAIRED MAN:
“Forget about me!--”

Panel 2. Carter uses his scythe to slow him down by stabbing it into the the ground.

Panel 3. Carter jumps all of a sudden appears in front of the Lucifer out of nowhere, he has turned his scythe into two roman Gladius swords and clashes them with Lucifer's trident. Carter has a furious look in his eyes and Lucifer has a cocky smile.

CARTER (distorted):
“How could I Luci, you only just made my life hell for a whole year!--”
LUCIFER:
“--You’re still mad Carter? You need to get over it.”

CARTER (distorted):
“Get over this asshole!”

Panel 4. Carter trips Lucifer then elbows him right under his chin.

 

PAGEFIVE (four panels)

Panel 1. Carter turned his weapon into a medieval long sword and put it under Lucifer’s chin and says something off-panel, Lucifer has a tense look on his face, Michael yells off-panel.

CARTER (OP)(distorted):
“You’re gonna pay, not just for what you did to me! To everyone you've hurt, Cain, Lilith! You have left a trail of pain and suffering behind you and that ends now.--”

MICHAEL (OP):

“--YAAAAAAAHH!!!”

Panel 2. Michael fly tackles Carter from the side

SFX:
“FA-WHUMP”

Panel 3. Michael is straddle punching Carter while he’s on the ground and is yells with an angry look on his face. There are some parts of Michael's face and armor that look singed.

MICHAEL:
Traitor! You have ruined everything! It was so simple the Seals break, the horsemen ride, Heaven and Hell have one last battle, we win, and then heaven on Earth. But thanks to you even more will suffer as the world burns. All because you couldn’t just play along with destiny.”

Panel 4. Carter catches Michaels fist in his hands and says something while his eyes are glowing a pale green color, coupled with an angry look.(not just his pupils, his entire eye).

CARTER (distorted):

“You didn't give me a choice! Now get the hell offa me!--”

 

PAGESIX (four panels)

Panel 1. Carter throws Michael to the side, with one arm Lucifer is charging in from the side with his trident aimed at Carter.

Panel 2. Lucifer tries to stab Carter with his trident, Carter dodges the stab and kicks Lucifer in gut.

Panel 3. Carter and Lucifer are fighting, Lucifer tries to elbow Carter in the face, Carter moves it aside and tries to punch Lucifer in the throat. Both of them have furious faces as the fight.

Panel 4. Carter punches Lucifer in the chest twice one shot in the diaphragm and the other one right in the sternum region.

SFX:
“WHUD-WHUD”

 

PAGESEVEN (four panels)
Panel 1. Lucifer uses a flat handed punch on Carter’s ribs, his eyes are wide and his teeth gritted.

Panel 2. Carter turns his scythe into a bo staff and hits Lucifer who is on the ground on one knee with it, he hits him first in the knee then the gut, and one blow to the ribs.

SFX:

“KRAKK!”

“WHUMPH!”

“KRAK!”

Panel 3. Carter turns the staff and then nails Lucifer in the face with the bottom end of it.

SFX:
“KUKK!”

Panel 4. Carter roundhouse kicks Lucifer sending him flying away and smashing into the canyon wall, where part of the canyon wall explodes.

SFX:
“KA-BOOOMMMM!”

 

PAGEEIGHT (five panels)

Panel 1. The teenager catches a blade between his left arm and torso his eyes are glowing even brighter now in anger.

Panel 2. He then uses the back of his head to headbut the blonde man. The blonde man's eyes are closed, and his nose is now bleeding; as he is sent backward he lets go of his sword.

SFX:
“KRAKK!”

Panel 3. The blonde man is stumbling around disoriented; he’s leaning down with his hand on his head. The teenager is charging him, his weapon now a scythe again.

Panel 4. He swings upward, impaling Michael through the chest, he has a stunned look on his face. The blade of the scythe is sticking out of the man’s back with blood on it; the teenagers eyes widened and eyebrows arched down.

SFX:

“TWHOK”

Panel 5. The teenager swings the blonde man over and slams him on the ground.

 

PAGENINE ( five panels)

Panel 1. Lucifer stands up to see the teenager pulling the scythe out of the blonde man's chest. The teenager has his foot on the blonde man’s chest as he pulls the scythe out, and the dark haired man has his hand is grasping his head in pain.

Panel 2. The dark haired man flying towards the teenager while screaming.
DARK HAIRED MAN:

“YAAAAHHHH!!!”

Panel 3.  He hits the teenager with the butt of his trident, knocking him down.

Panel 4. The dark haired man is shown standing above our hero, ready to stab down with his trident.

Panel 5. Is a frozen shot of The dark haired man about to stab the teenager, and the Teenager is down on the ground helpless. A stream of blood is running down part of the teenagers head. Above them is a square where the teenager is having an inner monologue asking everyone reading how he ended up here, and this is where he begins to tell his story.

CARTER (NARRATION):

“How’d I end up here, I’m about to get killed by this douche and that means the world's completely screwed. Where did I go wrong? You know before this started life use to be more simple for me.”

 

PAGETEN ( three panels)

Panel 1. A smaller versions of the last panel where the two people are blacked out and others are blacked out as well.

CARTER (NARRATION):

“Well…as simple as simple could get in my life. But not simple as a regular high school life should be. But then came who I thought was the cruel bitch know as destiny, came to knock my door down.”

Panel 2. It’s nighttime, and there is a large house out in the middle of nowhere in Nebraska. All the house’s lights are on , cars are parked outside, and a lot of people are inside and outside. There are still text boxes on top of the frame, along with  another one that says, Firth, Nebraska.

CARTER (NARRATION):

“It was a few days before the start sophomore year, so my friends and I were throwing a party at my buddy Dave’s place. All of our folks went in a radio contest and had one a three week long trip through Europe. So we threw a party so we can have one last bit of fun.”

Panel 3. Inside the house we see the same teenager from before without his mask and hood, he has brown hair is taller than the others and is very muscular. He’s sitting on the couch surrounded by people but is talking to four other people. Two of them are an Asian guy and girl both with black hair, and the other two are a white guy with light brown hair and a mexican girl with blonde hair. They are all smiling and holding red solo cups; there are chips and snacks set up on the table.

CARTER (NARRATION):

“See those people right there, those people over there, who’re just enjoying the party. They’ve been my greatest friend for pretty much all of my life.

 

PAGEELEVEN ( four panels)

Panel 1. Same panel but the teenager  is the only one colored, while everyone else is black and white.

CARTER (NARRATION):

“We all met during pre school. I was small, socially awkward, and didn’t talk much, an easy target for bullies. Then I met Dave and the rest and my life changed from there.”

Panel 2. Now the asian guy is the one that’s colored in.

CARTER (NARRATION):

“The asian dude to my left is Dave my best friend. He’s like my brother and one of the greatest people I know. Something you should know about him cause you could never see it, he’s gay. Nothing wrong with that and you tell by just talking to him.”

Panel 3. Both the asian guy and girl are now colored in

“Dave’s open about it, but living in Nebraska has made him more masculine than you think.The girl next to him is his twin sister Mia, don’t let her looks confuse you, cross her and she will make your ass regret it, overall a sweet girl, our groups mom.”

Panel 4. Now the guy with light brown hair and mexican girl with blonde hair are colored in.

“The guy who looks like he just walked out of  a Linkin Park concert is Vincent. You know who every group of friends has their likeable asshole he’s ours. The blonde mexican girl is Ana she’s nice but has a habit of fainting in stressful situations.”

Random girl: “HHHHHHHHHHHEEEEEEEEEEEEEEELLLLLLLLLLLLOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!”

 

PAGETWELVE (six panels)

Panel 1. A girl with red hair and glasses walks in holding a red cup in her hand walking around in a drunken manner. She walks over to the couch and plops down in Carter’s lap and says stuff and Carter responds and Dave says something with a sarcastic look. The girl has her cup out to her side spilling out a bit and is grabbing on Carter’s neck for leverage

VICKY:

“Heeeeeeyyyyyy Carter I’m on your lap now hehehehe.--”

CARTER:

“--Um, hi Vicky, what are you drinking there, cause you seem a bit... ”

VINCENT:

Shitfaced?--”

CARTER:

“--Not the words I would have used, but yeah that. And also how?”

Panel 2. Vicky brings her cup to Carter’s face, Carter says something then Mia gets up and walks to the right. Vicky still has a drunken smile on her face.

VICKY:

“Some of the college guys brought stuff they said was punch! They call it A Blue Hawaiian and it is amaaaaaaaaaazing! You should try it!--”

CARTER:

“--That smells like some heavy stuff? So how about we put this down, and Mia could you--”

MIA:

“Already there.--”

CARTER:

“--Thank you.”

Panel 3. Dave get’s up and asks Vicky something; she has reflective/impish smile and puts her finger up to her lips thinking and she says something. Carter has his eyebrows furled in an angry expression.

DAVE:

“How hot are those college guys.--”

VICKY:

“--Hmmm? They are hhhhoott.”

DAVE:

“That’s all I need to know.--”

Panel 4. Carter says something as Dave, Ana, and Vincent walk away, he has an angry look on his face. Vicky then says something as she’s drinking out of the cup

CARTER:

“Hey where are you guys going?--”

DAVE:

“--To take a run at some frat dudes.”

ANA:

“Same here.--”

VINCENT:

“--I’m going to keep Dave from getting punched in the face.”

CARTER:

“Great, thanks I’ve always wanted to babysit a drunk.--”

VICKY:

“--Heheheh haaaaaaaaa. You’re so cute.”

Panel 5. Carter grabs the cup out of Vicky’s hand and says something. Vicky has a pouty look on her face as she says something.

CARTER:

“Let’s put that down and talk.--”

VICKY:

“--Boo.”

Panel 6. Carter says something as he picks Vicky from under her arms, and then sets her down next him on the couch.

CARTER:

“Now I’ll just move you right over here.--”

VICKY:

“--ooohhh strong.”

CARTER:

“There you go. Nice and comfy?--”

VICKY:

“--I’m gonna call you “Strongmang” from now on.”

 

PAGETHIRTEEN ( seven panels)

Panel 1. The college guys ran from the kitchen and out the front door, one guy tripping on the way out. Everyone near them is staring at them as they’re leaving.

FRAT GUY:

“RUN BRO! SHE’S CRAZY!”

Panel 2 Vicky and Carter, Vicky is looking in the direction of the frat dudes. She says something with a proud look, and Carter has a bored look on his face.

VICKY:

“What happened to them!--”

CARTER:

“--Mia had a few words with them.”

VICKY:

“Hey can I tell you something.--”

CARTER:

“--Sure, go ahead.”

Panel 3. Vicky looks at Carter while talking, she gets a serious/ drunk happy expression. Carter now looks interested and serious.

VICKY:

“This is something I haven’t told to anyone, so don’t you tell anyone.--”

CARTER:

“--Okay, won’t tell anyone, promise, but why’re you telling me this.”

VICKY:

“Because you have a cute face and big arms. You’re Tom Hardy hot.--”

Panel 4. Vicky pulls Carter into a kind of huddle and whispers into his ear with a smile. Carter pulls away and asks why.

VICKY:

“I’m joining the Peace Corps after we graduate.--”

CARTER:

“--Why, didn’t you just graduate? What about college and your other plans?”

Panel 5. Vicky explains while brushing her hair to the side with her hand, she’s still smiling and her eyes are closed.

VICKY:

“I want to help out little children in Africa, it’s my purpose.--”

Panel 6. Carter has a confused look on his face as he talks to Vicky.

VICKY:

“My mom says that everyone has a purpose in life. It’s important because if live up to our destiny. It’s what the world wants us to do. If we don’t live up to it then we don’t belong.--”

Panel 7. Carter has an ashen look on his face as if someone he’d known had just died. He points his thumb behind him, and he says something.

CARTER:

“I’m ah… I’m gonna go.--”

VICKY:

“--Why?”

CARTER:

“Just stuff, go talk to the guys in the kitchen. I’ll just head out.--”

 

PAGEFOURTEEN (six panels)

Panel 1. Carter walks away with Vicky and everyone else at the party in the background, then he opens the front door. Vicky has her arms to her sides, and she has a sad look on her face. There’s more narration boxes in the frame where Carter is talking.

CARTER (NARRATION):
“She may have had more booze in her than a liquor store. But what she said had gotten to me. What does the world want from me? So…”

Panel 2. He closes the door, he’s still narrating.

CARTER (NARRATION):

“So I left. I needed time to clear my head.”

Panel 3. It’s still nighttime, a blue Ford pickup truck is driving on a dirt road; it has it’s headlights on and dirt cloud behind him. Carter is passing by a red barn and a small field, h

CARTER (NARRATION):

“There are some things you just can’t talk about with family. Especially mine. They’d get too overprotective. They’ve always been like that and they mean well. But I don’t need it, not now.”

Panel 4. Carter is driving his truck while music is playing on the radio, Carter is still narrating.

CARTER (NARRATION):

“I’ve learned a lot about fate and destiny. About how it works or at least how I thought it works. What I thought was, that you can’t control it or…”

Panel 5. Carter turns down a road, and there is a broken bottle of whiskey left out on the road; Carter’s truck closes in on the bottle the tire about to hit it.

CARTER (NARRATION):
“...how it comes to you.”

Panel 6. The truck runs over the bottle and pops the truck’s front left tire.

SFX:

“POP!!”

CARTER:

“What the hell!”

 

PAGEFIFTEEN ( seven panels)

Panel 1. Carter loses control of his truck, and he attempts to get back control. The truck is swerving to the left and right.

CARTER:

“Come on, come on dammit!”

Panel 2. Carter comes up to the ditch and has scared look on his face.

CARTER:

“Oh crap.”

Panel 3. The truck spins a full 180 degrees and lands a few yards away in an empty field of grass. It lands rear first, and the truck bed gets destroyed; it pushes up a lot of grass and dirt.

CARTER:

“SHHHHHIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIITTTTTT!!!!!!!!!”

Panel 4. Inside the truck Carter is knocked out with light from the radio on his face and his jaw is open. There is a box at the top left corner of the frame that says “twenty minutes later”.

Panel 5. Carter’s waking up, his vision is blurry and is disoriented and confused.

CARTER:

“What the-(mumbling)- what the hell is happening.”

Panel 6. He get’s out of the truck, he has his hand on his head. Carter is also hunched over and has his other hand on his thigh.

Panel 7. Carter looks around the area he is in, his hand still on his head in pain

 

PAGESIXTEEN ( six panels)

Panel 1. As he is regaining his composure, he cheers at the fact that he survived, then he looks behind him

CARTER:

“Heh-hey look at that I’m alive. Whooooo hoooo! Oooh aaah shit!”

Panel 2. Carter walks to the front of the car which has barely any damage. Part of the windshield is cracked and one of the headlights was knocked out.

CARTER (thoughts):

“Okay well this is good this here is perfectly salvageable. I can just fix the windshield and replace the headlight, completely reversible.”

Panel 3. Then he goes around the back of the truck, and he sees that the back is practically destroyed. The truck bed is twisted in ways you couldn’t think it could. He clasps the back of his head with both hands with an angry look on his face.

CARTER (thoughts):

“Son of a bitch! I just had the fucking shocks replaced. Oh god Grandpa’s gonna kill me, unless Mia murders  me first. Where’s my phone?”

Panel 4. Carter has his phone up to his ear with an anxious look on his face. He puts it up to his ear, waiting and mumbling.

CARTER:

“Come on, come on, come on. Dammit pick up you gossipy bitch.”

Panel 5. A side split frame where both Carter and Dave are talking to each other, Carter has a pissed off look and Dave looks concerned.

CARTER:

“Hey Dave..--”

DAVE (on the phone):

“--Carter dude, where’d you go? Vicky said that you just walked out.”

Panel 6. Carter is standing there with the phone to his head; he is also rubbing the back of his head with his left hand.

CARTER:

“That’s not important right now bro. Now before you I tell you about this I need you to not freak out.--”

DAVE (over the phone):

“--Sure that you’re okay, because I know whenever you feel bad about something.”

CARTER:

“Trust me I’m fine.--”

DAVE (over the phone):

“--Okay, so what happened you run out of gas.”

CARTER:

“Uuuuuuhhhhh, no, no no, not that at all.--”

DAVE (over the phone):

“--What then?”

 

PAGESEVENTEEN (six panels)

Panel 1. Carter is still rubbing the back of his head, but now his head leaning backward and he’s looking up. Carter is also gritting his teeth in anger.

CARTER:

“First promise me that you won’t freak out… oh screw it I crashed the truck!”

Panel 2. Dave is back at his house and everyone is looking at him as he yells in front of everybody. His eyes are widened to the limits of how wide someone's eyelids can widen.

DAVE:

“WHAT! WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU!?”

Panel 3. Carter is still there but has his phone farther from his ear with a stressed look on his face.

CARTER:

“I’m on Autumn you can’t miss it.”

Panel 4. Carter walking over toward the wreckage of his truck. The truck’s side door still open.

Panel 5. Carter is now rummaging behind the front seats.

CARTER:

“If I have to wait here. Then I’m going to do it in comfort…”

Panel 6. He pulls out a fold up chair, small table and portable radio. He has the radio set up and switched on the table.

CARTER:

“with my bonfire kit.”

 

PAGEEIGHTEEN (five panels)

Panel 1. He sets up his little camp thing and waits for Dave to pick him up. He looks up at the night sky with his head tilted back. He’s sitting in a foldable chair with a small metal table next to him with a radio on it, there’s a cooler down by his feet and he has a beer bottle in his hand..

Panel 2. A shooting star shoots across the sky, and Carter looks up with a slight grin.

CARTER (thoughts):

“Huh, look at that shooting star, guess I should make a wish.”

Panel 3. The star turns and flies in Carter’s direction.

Panel 4. Light shines down on Carter as he looks up with his eyes widened, eyebrows raised, and jaw dropped.

Carter: “What the…”

Panel 5. The light is shining incredibly bright on him, and he yells something and stands up with a freaked out look on his face.

CARTER:

“Whoa!”

 

PAGENINETEEN (five panels)

Panel 1. It is flying at him a few feet away.

Panel 2. He jumps out of the way just in time for the object to whiz right past him.

SFX:

“THHHHHHHHHFWOOOOOOM!!!!”

Panel 3. The shooting star flies right into his truck, causing it to explode in a large fireball. A flaming tire rolls out to the side.

SFX:

“BOOOM!”

Panel 4. Carter now has an angry look and is shaking his fists in the air as he is yelling

CARTER:

“Oh come on!”

Panel 5. He looks up at the sky and yells at the top of his lungs, and he has an angry look on his face.

CARTER:

“Thanks, thanks a lot, assholes, for doing this ! You know this is really what I need right now. You know I didn’t even like that truck, so you can have it and you can shove it clear up your…”

 

PAGETWENTY ( six panels)

Panel 1.Carter is still screaming, but stops after he hears a strange humming noise coming from behind him.

CARTER:

“Oh and another thing, I am sick and tired of all this cra…”

SFX:
“RRREW RRREW RRREW”

Panel 2. He turns around to see that there was something sticking out of  what used to be the truck’s engine block, a large and odd looking scythe. It’s made completely out of metal with an odd looking design for the blade, the shaft is bound in dark brown leather, and the butt has a larger blunt end with a symbol carved into it.

CARTER:

“A scythe? What?”

Panel 3. Carter starts to walk toward the scythe while inching to the weapon. Even as the mysterious object glows a pale green color, he’s still narrating.

CARTER (NARRATION):

All the warning lights in my head were lighting up like a christmas tree. Telling me not to go near the scythe from outer space. But I was just ignoring them like…an idiot.”

Panel 4. He is very close to the scythe and he puts his hands near it to see how hot it is, but he doesn’t feel any heat coming off the strange object.

CARTER:

“Oookaaay this is weird. There’s not even any heat coming off this thing.”

Panel 5. Carter inches his hand closer and closer to the scythe, then he grabs it, and the scythe starts to glow even brighter than before. He is still narrating

Panel 6. Carter is screaming at the top of his lungs; he has his free hand trying to pull his other arm away but can’t. Under his shirt there are multiple orange glows like something is being branded onto his skin. Bolts of lighting are striking all over the ground around him as the scythe still glows. Carter is still narrating

CARTER:

“AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!

CARTER (NARRATION):
“The second I touched that thing it all happened so fast, I couldn’t get my hand away and pain ripped through me.”

PAGETWENTY-ONE (seven panels)

Panel 1. Everything stops at once the lightning, the glow, and Carter passes out and falls backward. Carter is on the ground passed out, the glowing lights under his shirt are still there, he has the scythe in his hand.

Panel 2. Dave is running toward Carter as he is down on the ground; there’s a text box that says “ten minutes later”.

Panel 3. It’s all black and there are text bubbles where someone on saying something.

DAVE:

“Carter! Come on brother get up! Please don’t be dead! Come on wake up!--”

Panel 4. Carter’s eyes open up to see his friend Dave kneeling over him trying to wake him up. Dave has a scared shitless look on his face.

CARTER:

“Wha- wait what’s goin on.--”

DAVE:

“--Oh thank god you're alright, I thought you were dead!”

CARTER (weak):

“Why would you think that?--”

DAVE:

“--Because you were passed out and not moving.”

CARTER:

“Makes sense. Could you help me up.--”

Panel 5. Dave helps Carter to his feet and says something, Carter has a pained look on his face as he gets up. Dave is doing the little air quotes by his head with a sarcastic look on his face.

DAVE:

“What the hell happened here? On the phone you said you crashed. By the way I think “crashed” is underselling your situation.”

Panel 6. Carter points back at the scythe on the ground and says something, Dave has his hands on Carter’s shoulders.

CARTER:

“It didn’t look like that at first! It’s because that fell out of the sky and blew up my truck.--”

DAVE:

“--Yeah I was about to ask about that. I think you hit your head buddy. Because that sounds really crazy.”

Panel 7. Carter looks angry and is yelling something at Dave.

CARTER:

“Then how is it here man!? How!?--”

DAVE:

“--Maybe a farmer lost it out here, but we should get you back to my house.”

CARTER:

“No one uses those anymore!--”

DAVE:

“--Okay! Dude calm down!”

 

PAGETWENTY-TWO (six panels)

Panel 1. Carter steps back and points to the wreckage of his truck while yelling. Dave says something with a worried look.

CARTER:

“How the hell am I going to relax with my truck blown to absolute hell!--”

DAVE:

“--Yeah I would be more worried about what your grandparents will do to you.”

CARTER:
“Dude I’m more worried about what your sister will do to me.”

Panel 2. Carter sits down on the wreckage and continues to talk while dave listens with interest.

CARTER:

“Now can I please get back to the story. I found the scythe there sticking out of the scrap and then I grabbed it and I passed out so here we are. That’s all you need to know.”

Panel 3. Dave points with his thumb to his car still parked on the road, with the headlights on.

DAVE:

“Come on man, let’s get back to my place.--”

Carter (OP):

“--Okay. I think I need a first aid my skin hurts. Maybe I got hit by some shrapnel and didn’t notice.”

DAVE:

“I don’t think so.--”

Panel 4. Carter says something while grabbing at his jacket, he has a pained look on his face/

CARTER:

“Well, it’s just that I feel like there’s a burning pain all over my skin.--”

Dave (OP):

“--You’d be bleeding if you were or at least your clothes would be torn up.”

CARTER:

“I’m still going to check.--”

Panel 5. Dave says something while pouting and hunching over.

DAVE:

“Well take off the jacket, and let’s see what’s wrong with your wittle arms.--”

CARTER:

“--Don’t you talk down to me man. Because you’re being a dick. Now just look at me already!”

DAVE:

“Ha! That’s what she said.--”

CARTER (OP):

“--Good one. Ass.”

Panel 6. Carter takes off his jacket and on his arms there are marks going from his wrists all the way up his arms. He has a look of shock and is yelling; Dave is saying something off panel. The marks look like tattoos of different symbols from other cultures.

CARTER:

“What the hell! What is all this!?--”

DAVE (OP):

“--You look like you just got out of prison! How’d that happen!?”

CARTER:

“I could tell you, but right now I’m busy!--”

DAVE:

“--Doing what?”

CARTER:

“Freaking the fuck out!--”

 

PAGETWENTY-THREE (six panels)

Panel 1. Dave has his arms on Carter’s shoulders and says something to him with a comforting look.

DAVE:

“Let’s just get back to my house. Then we can figure this out.--”

CARTER:

“--Is the party still going on?”

DAVE:

“No. After Mia chased the college guys off, and my outburst, people left.--”

CARTER:

“--Okay let’s go.”

Panel 2. Carter and Dave are in Dave’s Car talking, Carter looks over to say something to Dave.

CARTER:

“Hey how did the thing with those college guys go.--”

DAVE:

“--I got nothing, nada. Not even a closeted. I’m getting desperate man, hell I’ll even go for a bisexual guy at least they’re partial to the--”

Panel 3. Carter now has a grossed out look on his face, and he is covering his ears and yelling.

CARTER:

“Stop! Don’t need to hear that! Let’s just drive and get to your place!--”

DAVE:

“--I know you’re okay with gay people, but at least let me tell my stories.”

CARTER:

“How about this, tell me a story that a straight guy can hear without cringing, or in the least just don’t go into detail.--”

Panel 4. Carter is pointing upward with his finger explaining something. Dave has a happy and mischievous smile on his face.

CARTER:

“You know I’m still traumatized from your, Matthew McConaughey dream story.--”

DAVE:

“--Oh come on, it wasn’t that bad it…”

CARTER:

“It was very very bad and very very graphic.--”

DAVE:

“--Well we’re about to pull into the driveway so let’s talk about that later.”

CARTER:
“Not about that dream we’re not.

Panel 5. The car is in the driveway of Dave’s house, Carter and Dave are walking up to the front door talking.

DAVE:

“So how do you think they’ll react?--”

CARTER:

“--Twenty bucks says that Mia gets angry, Vinny will say “awesome”, Ana will make a terrified squeak.”

DAVE:

“Make it forty and you’re on.--”

CARTER:

“--Deal.”

Panel 6. Dave and Carter are talking off panel. Vincent and Ana are sitting around on the couch in the living room in front of the coffee table. There is still cups and other pieces of trash on the floor.

DAVE (OP):

“Hello is anybody there?--”

VINCENT:

“--Hey Dave where’d you go? You missed the rest of the party.”

CARTER (OP):

“He had to come pick me up. I had some car troubles.--”

VINCENT:

“--Well, you missed a senior girl getting drunk. Then she took her top off.”

 

PAGETWENTY-FOUR (six panels)

Panel 1. Carter and Dave are talking off panel.Vincent and Ana are talking to them in the living room, Vincent leans, over and Ana has her cup near her mouth.

CARTER:

“Awesome.--”

DAVE (OP):

“Gross.--”

VINCENT:

“--Yeah then Mia stopped it.”

ANA:

“Yeah thank god.--”

Panel 2. Dave is talking off-panel to Vincent and Ana; Dave has a smile on his face as he’s talking.

DAVE (OP):

“Yeah who needs adult supervision when you got Mia and she’s standing behind me isn’t she.--”

VINCENT:

“--Yep.”

ANA:
“For about five minutes now.”

Panel 3. Mia is standing behind Carter and Dave with an amused smile, Carter says something with a smile on his face. Dave’s eyes are widened, eyebrows raised, and jaw slightly open in surprise.

MIA:

“That’s my job isn’t it?--”

CARTER:

“--Hi Mia..”

MIA:

“Fine very fine..--”

DAVE:

“--Hey sis, you know anyone can be bor--”

Panel 4. Mia walks between them and says something to Carter, she pushes Dave away and he almost falls over. Carter responds to Mia while shrugging his shoulders.

MIA:

“Yeah no one cares what you think. So Carter where’d you go? Before you left you were enjoying yourself.--”

CARTER:

“--I just wasn’t in the mood.”

MIA:

“I call bullshit? Why’d you leave?--”

Panel 5. Vincent sits up and says something from where he’s sitting. Ana says something with a concerned look. Carter is narrating again.

VINCENT:

“Yeah what happened man--”

CARTER:

“--I was about to get to that.”

ANA:

“Great we’ve been worried about you.--”

CARTER (NARRATION):

“Yeah this is the overprotective stuff I was talking about.”

Panel 6. Carter has his hand up to explain his situation, and Dave and Mia are talking to him off panel.

CARTER:

“I had some stuff to work out.--”

DAVE (OP):

“--Like what?”

MIA (OP):

“You can tell us anything, you know--”

CARTER:

“--Not important. We have more pressing matters to discuss.”

VINCENT (OP):

“What pressing matters? Your car probably just ran out of gas.--”

ANA(OP)(sarcastic):

“--Or maybe it just blew up.”

 

PAGETWENTY-FIVE (six panels)

Panel 1. Carter is still talking while everyone else is either behind or in front of him and he starts to take off his jacket.

CARTER:

“Wow surprisingly close. Also, since I want to win a certain something. I’ve got something to show you..--”

Panel 2. We see all of Carter’s friends reactions, Mia looks furious, Vincent has a wide grin, and Ana is covering her mouth with both hands. Carter has his arms out showing off the tattoos.

CARTER:

“Ta-da!!!!!!--”

MIA:

“--WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!”

VINCENT:

“Awesome dude!--”

ANA:

“Eeek”

Panel 3. Carter has a smile on his face; Mia is standing in front of Dave, and Carter is pointing at him. Vincent and Ana are standing and looking at Carter’s marks. Vincent has a smile on his face and Ana is still dumbstruck. Dave is stressed out; he has his left hand on the back of his head and distressed look on his face.

CARTER:

“Boom! Right on the money! You owe me forty bucks dickface!--”

MIA:

“--What’s he talking about?”

DAVE:

“We bet forty bucks to see how you’d react.--”

VINCENT:

“-- Awesome.”

ANA:

“Why! were these your idea?!--”

Panel 4. Same shot, but Dave is waving his hands in front of his face. Ana is talking to him, and Mia is still pointing at his face.

DAVE:

“No god no!  I found him with those, his car exploded, and there was a scythe.--”

ANA:

“--Exploded?!”

MIA:

“Tell us what happened!--”

Panel 5. Dave is even more stressed out; Carter puts his hand on Dave’s shoulder to calm him down as he says something. Dave is all sweaty and making stressed out stereotypical gestures.

DAVE:

“Um, uh. He called me! Said that his car crashed and that he needed a ride! When I got there I found him in a crater clutching a scythe!--”

CARTER:

“--Okay dave, how about you just sit down because you’re making yourself look even gayer.”

Panel 6. Dave walks over to the couch with his head hanging low. Carter starts to explain everything. Mia is using angry impatient gestures.

CARTER:

“Now that that’s over I’ll explain everything.--”

MIA:

“--For the love of god just start already!”

CARTER:

“Okay I will! It all started after I left…--”

 

PAGETWENTY-SIX (six panels)

Panel 1. All of them are sitting around the couch, Carter has his index finger up explaining something. There’s a box at the top of the frame that says “10 minutes later”

CARTER:

“And that’s when Dave found me passed out.--”

ANA:

“--Wait! What was your wish?”

CARTER:

Not important. as I was saying…--”

DAVE:

“--So, you're not going to tell us what it was?”

CARTER:

“Why do you want to know?--”

MIA:

“--It sounds important to the story.”

CARTER:

“It’s not.--”

Panel 2. Carter points both of his hands toward his chest as he says something and Mia responds with a look of disbelief. And Ana responds off-panel.

CARTER:

“Do you guys believe me on this, or do you think I am crazy?--”

MIA:

“--We want to believe you. But that was the dumbest thing I´ve ever heard.”

ANA (OP):
“What about that time Vincent said he could get make Vodka with a paper bag--”

Panel 3. Carter motions his hand towards Dave. Dave point at Carter as well. Mia has a sarcastic look on her face as she says something.

CARTER:

“Oh come on! Ask Dave, he was there when he saw these; come on man tell em.--”

DAVE:

“--He's not lying; I saw the thing, and his car did explode.”

MIA:

“Oh, really, prove it.--”

Panel 4. All of them are standing around the small crater where the wreckage of Carter’s truck is. Carter and Dave have their arms crossed; their friends are standing there stunned with their arms slacked down.

CARTER:

“Told ya.--”

MIA:

“--Oh my god.”

ANA:

“This isn’t happening. This can’t be real.--”

VINCENT:

“--Damn dude, how are you going to explain this to your folks?”

Panel 5. Mia and Carter are talking to each other, Mia points her hands at the wreckage. Ana says something while shrugging her shoulders.

MIA:

“I believe you about the car exploding, but the scythe thing sounds stupid.--”

CARTER:

“--I'm not making this up. I mean come on how else would you explain this?”

ANA:

“Your gas tank probably exploded because of the crash.--”

CARTER:

“--There was nothing else here to light it.”

Panel 6. Dave points to the ground in front of them while yelling. Mia and Carter are both talking off panel.

DAVE:

“I saw the scythe it was right here! It's not like that thing could just walk away.--”

MIA (OP):

“--Maybe you could wish it back.”

CARTER (OP):  

“Ha ha very funny. You know what I’ll humor you.--”

 

PAGETWENTY-SEVEN (six panels)

Panel 1. The scythe appears out of nowhere in Carter’s right hand in a puff of smoke. Everyone else but Carter jumps back in surprise.

CARTER:

“Whoa! Holy crap!”

Panel 2. Dave is pointing at the scythe with a happy smile; Vincent has his hands on top of his head. Carter looks at the scythe interested, and he says something.

DAVE:

“Told you it was real Mia. Suck it!--”

VINCENT:

“--Jesus Christ that thing is freaking real.”

CARTER:

“I guess so, did I do that! Hey Ana what’d you think? Ana, Ana.--”

Panel 3. Carter looks in Ana’s direction with an annoyed look on his face as he says something.

CARTER:

“Ana, oh for the love of god! Again! What the hell woman!”

Panel 4. Vincent, Carter, Dave, and Mia are standing around Ana who is on the ground, because she fainted. They are all talking, Carter is pointing to Dave who looks really annoyed and Mia is irritated and pointing to the scythe.

VINCENT:

“Who’s turn is it to wake her up this time?--”

CARTER:

“--Dave’s turn.”

DAVE:

“Crap.--”

MIA:

“--While he´s dealing with that. How about we all talk about the thing that just came out of thin air.”

CARTER:

“We should.--”

MIA:

“--No shit.”

Panel 5. Ana is waking up and is disoriented, and Vincent says something while looking down at her. Dave is holding Ana up and says something.

ANA:

“wai- wha what's happening?--”

VINCENT:

“--Good, you’re awake, now help us figure this out.”

ANA:

“Figure out what?--”

CARTER:

“--What the scythe is.”

DAVE:

“Maybe it’s magic? You know it just appeared out of thin air.--”

Panel 6. Carter strokes his chin in thought as Vincent, Mia, and Dave talk off panel.

CARTER:

“That’s one possibility.--”

VINCENT:

“--It could be alien.”

CARTER:

“Also another possibility. But I’m not sure aliens would base weapons off of farming tools from Earth.--”

MIA:

“--We should take it with us.”

DAVE:

“Where would we put it.--”

 

PAGETWENTY-EIGHT (six panels)

Panel 1. Carter is lying down on a couch tossing and turning. The blanket is going up to his chest, and we can see some symbols on the top of his chest. There are text boxes at the top of the panel.

CARTER (OP):

“I’ll keep it with me, since I can call it and all that. How about we try figuring out more tomorrow.--”

Panel 2. A pitch black area with mist hanging around; a female voice is saying something to Carter as he stands there with a scared look on his face.

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN (whisper):

“Carter....Carter…--”

CARTER:

“--What is this, where am I, who are you?”

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN:

“Someone who wants to help you.--”

CARTER:

“Help me how?--”

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN:

“--Someone has tipped the scales of fate. And you are in the middle of it all.”

CARTER:

“What?--”

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN:

“--There are two sides to this conflict and they both get something out of this. If it is not stopped many people will die.”

Panel 3. He still has the same look on his face, Carter is still looking around for the voice.

CARTER:

“What?--”

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN:

“--Yes this is what happens when you try to twist destiny. And this is what they did and it will destroy the world as we know it.

Panel 4.Same as the last but his head is facing a different direction.

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN:

“In order to fight this you need me by your side.--”

CARTER:

“--Why should I trust you? You won’t even show yourself?”

Panel 5. She steps out of the shadows; she is of middle eastern descent and incredibly beautiful. She is wearing a black leather jacket, red shirt, and jeans; her eyes are also incredibly red. Carter looks completely dumbstruck and speechless.

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN:

“Because I was once like you human. These people have hurt me, turned me into a monster. And they will hurt you and the ones you love.--”

CARTER:

“--Uh huh.”

Panel 6. Both the woman and Carter are talking to each other, and she has an annoyed look on her face.

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN:

“You’ve got to be kidding me.--”

 

PAGETWENTY-NINE (six panels)

Panel 1. She smacks Carter right in the face to snap him out of his shock.

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN:

“Wake up loverboy!--”

CARTER:

“--HO! Ow why?!”

Panel 2. The Mysterious woman continues to talk to Carter while he is rubbing the part where he was slapped.

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN:

“As I was saying, we have common enemies who have hastened the end. And with me by your side we can fight back!

Panel 3. She looks upward as Dave’s voice is booming around them.

DAVE:

“Carter wake up.--”

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN:

“--No! I need more time with you. I will visit you again Carter Gray. But before I go I need to give you something. Hehehe!”

Panel 4. She grabs Carter and Kisses him, Carter’s eyes open in surprise, and her eyes closed and she’s smiling.

Panel 5. She stops but still is grabbing his shirt and says something with a smile.

MYSTERIOUS WOMAN:

“Now you need to wake up Grim. We have much to do.”

Panel 6. Dave is lightly shaking Carter trying to wake him up.

DAVE:

“Hey Carter, wake up.--”

CARTER:

“--Huh…wuh what's happening.”

DAVE:

“It’s six in the morning, what do you want for breakfast.--”

CARTER:

“--You know what I like.”

DAVE:

“Eggs, bacon, and three pancakes coming up, old fashioned but tasty.--”

 

PAGETHIRTY (six panels)

Panel 1. Vincent, Dave, Mia, Carter, and Ana are sitting around a dinner table. They are all eating different food and talking while smiling. Carter is the only one with a sullen look on his face.

VINCENT:

“Dave, of all the gay stereotypes you indulge in. Cooking is the best one.--”

DAVE:

“--I don’t embrace all stereotypes.”

VINCENT:

“So if I were to go through your playlist I wouldn’t find some certain songs.--”

Panel 2.  Mia has a concerned look on her face as she says something to Carter who is eating his food with a worried look on his face.

MIA:

“Hey, Carter you okay? You of all people usually chime in when mess with Dave, so what’s wrong?--”

CARTER:

“--Not much, it was just a long night.”

Panel 3. Vincent says something with a smile on his face

VINCENT:

“Well what do you expect! He both crashed and blew up his car all in one night. I’m surprised that he was even able to get up this morning.--”

CARTER:

“--It’s not that, it’s just that I had an incredibly weird dream last night.”

Panel 4. Ana asks Carter something curiously, and Dave says something with a smile on his face. Carter shudders and says something and Vincent asks something with a smile.

ANA:

“What was it about?--”

DAVE:

“--Was it like my Matt McConaughey dream?”

CARTER:

“(Shudders) No it was not like that. But thanks for reminding me you gross bastard. But there was a girl there.--”

VINCENT:

“Was she hot?”

Panel 5. Vincent asks Carter something with an interested look, Carter answers off panel. Mia says something with a doubtful glare.

VINCENT:

“How hot, on a scale from one to ten.--”

CARTER:

“--Fifteen.”

MIA:

“Is that relevant.--”

CARTER:

“--You didn’t see her and it wasn’t her looks. It’s that she said some weird stuff to me.”

Panel 6. Dave asks a question, and Carter has a concerned look.

DAVE:

“Like what?--”

 

PAGETHIRTY-ONE (six panels)

Panel 1. Carter pauses because he doesn’t want to freak them out by the mysterious woman's message. Everyone around the table looks at him surprised and curious.

CARTER:

“It was all about bad people, fighting, the end, and then she kissed me.--”

DAVE:

“--Wow, really sounds pretty sexy and weird.”

CARTER:

“Yeah well dreams are like that.--”

Panel 2. At the top of the frame there is a box that says “two hours later”, Carter is getting dropped off at his house and he has the scythe in his hand. He walks into his house and walks up to the door of his room.

Panel 3. Carter sits on a chair in his room and looks at his scythe.

CARTER (thoughts):

“What the hell is this thing?--”

CARTER:

“--Oh I’m screwed.”

Panel 4. He gets up and then walks out of the room with down look on his face.

Panel 5. He walks into the bathroom and turns the lights on; he stops at the mirror and looks down at his arms.

Panel 6. He takes his shirt off.

 

PAGETHIRTY-TWO (four panels)

Panel 1. He looks at himself in the mirror, observing all of the markings. The marks are not just on his arms; they are all over, his chest, back, stomach, and there is a bigger symbol on the side of his neck. A skull with two scythe crossing under it with a Roman Numeral four on the skull’s forehead.

CARTER:

“Yeah I am most definitely screwed; how the hell can I hide these from Nana?”

Panel 2. As Carter puts his shirt back on he turns his head to the left because he hears something.

SFX:

“DING-DONG”

Panel 3.  He’s walking up to the front door

CARTER:

“Okay wait up, stop touching the damn button before your break it!”

Panel 4. He opens the door to find two people. One is a man with brown hair, and the other one is a woman with blonde hair.

CARTER:

“Hello, what do you want?--”

THE MAN:

“--We are here to collect.”

CARTER:

“Collect what?--”

THE WOMAN:

“--Not what, who, we are here for you Carter Gray. We need you to come with us the other Horsemen are waiting for you.”

CARTER:

“What?--”

 

The end of issue # 1

 
 


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